“What the heck?” you question "thats the third time this month."you say shaking your head to help wake yourself up as the fleeting glimpses of the dream fade.
Space is missing here. I also think it’d be better to write the whole “qestion” as one line, like “What the heck? That’s the third time this month.” There’s also inconsistency in capitalization of injections between dialogue lines here and in other places later on.
Your nose catches a whiff of something tasty as you head downstairs and as you open the door to the kitchen and see your mom standing there with her back towards you in full aprin, spatula in hand, making breakfast.
You ask causing her to jump and almost lose the spatula on the process.
“I had the bad dream again.” You respond
Full stop missing at the end.
“What the hell! You cant remember your best friends birthday?!”
" I’m really sorry."
She shakes her head dissaprovingly saying “well then I guess you are going to have to pay for the party.”
Should be capital.
“I was kidding but next time You better get my a present worth at least as much as the whole party.”
No reason for capital and it should be “me” instead of “my”.
Well my wallet is gonna hate me but at least Jessy wont.
Won’t*. Missing commas as well.
Too little to comment on the story yet, though I like the premise. I think you could do with more descriptions though. As it is, the story feels to be going too fast. The whole breakfast could be more fleshed out, saying how you feel, explaining more on when the dreams started happening, how they’ve been affecting your life lately etc. etc. The appearance of your best friend and more info on what they’re like would work good too. Right now the flow doesn’t feel natural, if that makes any sense.