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I think what I love about your story is our characters problem Heās not loyal to this nation or itās people heās loyal in my personal opinion his individual loyalty he got peopleās respect like the orc and his teacher and thatās mostly where he relies on Thatās why heās staying in this nation if they died tomorrow today heāll leave and never look back but getting two people who rely on him now make him worthy of staying and going to that village and seeing some Rich kid try to throw power of new moves to a poor kid really irked him to make him stay a bit longer and prove them wrong itās my defiant nature I view it because that is what Iām picturing of my character why heās still in this kingdom he bitterly doesnāt like even though heās a bastard child of a noble king
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Yeah, I totally get that! I love how you see him sticking around just for those few he actually cares about , Itās like, heās there to prove a point, not out of loyalty to the place. Cool insight into why heād stay despite being a nobleās bastard!
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Youāre welcome I just canāt wait to see how the kingās going to react when he spouts his true beliefs in his face I wonder if heās going to be red in the face because to him the black wolf is not just a title for him itās a meaning wolves care about their own and theyāll stick by their own Heās not a loyal dog took the nation heās loyal to his people that means heās cunning as a wolf and should be respected as one and personally as a person who loves animal itās very cool to see our character is nicknamed the black wolf because I actually like that because he has loyalty to something itās not an insult to me The insult is the last name as a person who has is a bastard myself and have given the last name as the person who didnāt raise me it kind of irks you so I understand it
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Well in future chapters you will form your own banner your own surname your own kingdom and many more things to come 
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I love the story but im confused. I read lore and it says that most royalty has elven blood/lineage do to alliances. Is that for the elves only or human royalty also? Read more lore and it says there several E-H hybrid rulers. Our kingdom especially is known for our hybrid royal. So why are we being hated when hybrids have been high status for generations?? And if the black wolf is our kingdom symbol then idk how being called the literal symbol of a powerful country with the most land is a bad thing. Maybe switch to demon wolfor change symbol to silver wolf? Because mc being black wolf is basically saying weāre the mascot of the kingdom. So is mc hated bc of the affair or only bc hybrid genes? And ik its tied to our moms hair but is black hair rare?? Or mc is called black wolf bc its rare among blackmore bloodline??
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well their will be some changes first the banner will have a silver wolf with a cresant moon something like this House Ceryndor ā @kayasbook on Tumblr second we are the only hybrid in blackmoor family born out of a wedlock and people hate us because of our bad omen bad luck associated with us .
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Ahh ok. I will be following this story.
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Hey, love the writing style and medieval world in this WIP. The bastard character is also unique and a twist within the genre. Keep up the good work!
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Wait is MC genderlocked ? Reading the families background in the stats it keeps mentioning a āMikhailā before the game even begins.
This IF is good but confusing. Thereās a gender option but no matter what you choose youāre always referred to as male and then MC is supposed to be a prince but keeps being referred to as Lord rather than Highness.
idon think theres any pronoun issue in the game you can either be lord/lady that being said if you are talking about the stats page then yes it needs work and pronoun issue can be there
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yes the stats page need work ik that 
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I think what got me drawn to the story is not just because Iām a bastard myself bastard in many ways in language of my family history is women that didnāt marry my mother raise me herself with the man I actually call Father who came to my birth gives perspective of what we come from still have the last name but I changed it my mother and my actual father I view him and it was mixed together with my siblings but really love about the story is blood is not mean you have to be a family member it depends on the people youāre around hell orc itās more of a brother or a messed up Uncle we get to the prospective of it these are people who grew up without proper lives and itās easy to see them latching on including the elf that cannot speak people need to watch onto something an ideal or family they make one
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i read this twice and i love it. Always fun playing as a cold intimidating MC and Rika is such a sweetheart.
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Hey, not sure if it was mentioned but when we meet Erik he keeps being referred to as āHisā.
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Hope this wip can keep going until finish and not end up like other game of thrones theme wip that suddenly stop. Stay healthy 
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