[WIP] The Passenger (1/1/19)



Hi everyone, just a little update to let you all know the next chapter is coming nice and sweet, and to give you a short sneak peek. Thanks for all the support and the nice words :grin:

Roach chat

“And then I…” you let the silence stretch for a moment before letting the air go. “No, that’s it. I don’t remember what happened next.”

Roach lifts ${r_their} eyebrows. “Good thing you didn’t forget the details of the fifty deliveries you were carrying.” And there’s the barb. Of course.

“Want me to spin some dumb tale about tentacles ripping the sky open and me using my telepathic powers to fend them off?”

“I don’t know. Are they the japanese kind of tentacles?”


I like your writing style. I think you’ve done a good job of capturing how a crafty eldritch creature would behave should they ever be in this situation.

If I’m understanding this right, the MC chooses their name at 8 years old. What exactly were they called before that point? I understand some characters would want to change their given names, but perhaps that would have more impact if they actually had a given name before hand.

Edit: I should clarify. What I meant was “what exactly do the humans surrounding the MC call them before they change their name?”


My guess is that the alien was called “(slithery alien screech)” because that is how eldritch beings pronounced their names, that or a Lovecraftian noise.


Hi! I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed reading this!

I couldn’t put it down once I started :slight_smile:

My MC is going to be the preppiest, most charming, eldritch being this plane of existence.


Since the only ones that change names are trans/nb MCs, that’s headcanon territory.


I think what @Kamer is getting at is that it’s odd to not see our MC’s name until that point in the story, but I guess it kind of makes sense.

Like, The Eldritch Creature :tm: doesn’t want to acknowledge such a lowly name, until it is forced to…

But I do kind of think that would happen earlier in life - perhaps even in toddler years. It could even be an excuse for MC to “throw a temper tantrum” about their assigned name. Maybe give the reader a chance to change the “automatic” name at that point?

Older Sister: Come on, then, (Name)! We’re getting ice cream.

3YO MC: My name isn’t (Name)! It’s (player-choice)!!! Call me (player-choice)!!!

Eldritch Being in MC’s Head: I may not remember my own name, but at least this is a step above…(Name)…eugh…


I did it that way to keep the gender and name options close to each other, and because I wanted the toddler stage (4 years) to focus on the fact that there wasn’t a dad around (or another caretaker for that matter), so I decided to code the name picking at the same time for all MCs.

The fact that it happens at age 8, has to do with Livvy sensing her little sibling is bottling something up, and clumsily attempting to get them to open up. If MC is trans/nb she sorts of thinks that was it. If after listening to the story, they act with apathy, she gets a little creeped out. If neither of those things happen, then she waves it away as her sibling being different.

So that was my reasoning behind it, but if enough players want the ex name to show up and then to change it themselves, I’ll see where to add it (in the future because I’m lazy I’m trying to churn out CH 2)