Interesting premise, no question about that. Do you have the story planned out? I am just curious what the overall plot is moving beyond this bio-weapon attack.
Your writing is pretty good and I like what I read. Some spelling issues, mostly looks like what comes from typing quickly and just missing a letter. Some repetition issues, particularly in the beginning where almost every sentence began with ‘you’ and some words are used close together, like ‘adjust’ and ‘realize’. But that seems a little nit-picky and not something you really need to worry about at this moment.
Two things you might want to check out:
I chose to just ride past the woman with car trouble to go home and feed my dog. The text said that I rode past, then it told me that I was looking at the engine with no idea what I was doing. Didn’t really make any sense, so maybe there was an *else statement missing somewhere in there?
Secondly, this statement here:
“You never was the most mechanically inclined and after you crashed my bike you learned this quickly. you worked for days to get those tires on but when every tool looks the same, you soon had my dad just fix it for me.”
My and me are not what you are looking for here, so just keep an eye out for that. Also that ‘was’ has got to go
I look forward to seeing what you do with this, sorry that I can’t really comment much on the game/story plot right now, but I will certainly do so as you continue to update.