Hello! My name’s Pheo and I’m currently working on a game called The Exile, which takes place in the realm of Navera, a world divided by the Times of Old and New. Remnants of The Old World, mages and mythosi, are feared just as much are they’re adored, possessing the otherworldly magic that was only alive before the time of humans.
This is the alpha demo, so it’s still in early development, which means it’s by no means polished or as detailed as I’d like it to be, but is easy to edit and modify as needed!
You’re the ex-commander of the Kingdom of Plaithus, and your name is known by all. It used to be whispered in fear by your enemies, and the very mention of it could send men fleeing. Your people had cried it out in battle, swords raised in your honor as they faced death fearlessly. You were a hero, and to some, a legend.
Until you weren’t.
You can’t remember what happened. All that’s left are blurry faces, screams, and the feeling of blood on your hands. The only reason you still have your head is because of the pity of an old friend.
And now? It’s only been a year since the incident, and already things are going wrong again when a rather peculiar sorcerer offers you absurd amounts of gold in exchange for protection from… well, that’s the problem, isn’t it? You don’t know.
- Choose your own pronouns (or set custom ones) and customize your commander’s appearance
- Pick what mythosi blood The Commander has been infused with-- gorgon, werewolf, phoenix, or demon blood.
- Romance one of six ROs, two male, two female, one non-binary, and one gender customizable.
- Choose your Commander’s past, directly shaping and changing the current state and history of the world.
As always, please notify me if there’s any typos and coding errors!
"Flirt Options": As of now, not all flirting options are necessarily flirting, but rather options that would lead to a deeper and more intimate relationship with characters. However, I could see how this may make players who don’t romance/aren’t romancing a specific character feel like they can’t know a character as well or can’t express the MC how they would like to or risk romancing an NPC. I was considering for some dialogue options creating them twice, one as a flirt option, one as a simple platonic one! I’m interested on any feedback regarding this or if it would be unnecessary.
Questions: What major questions do you have, if any? Are they questions in the sense you want to read more to answer them or questions in the sense that you feel like the story is too vague and doesn’t explain enough?
Pacing: Does it move too slow? Too quick? Is there more/less development you’d like to see? Would you like the different POVs to be different? Thoughts on the POVs in general?
Personality of MC: Does it feel off at times? Does MC act too aggressive in scenes where you don’t directly control them? I’m using a method to check the highest stat, but I’m worried the aggression stat overrides the rest to the point I’ll need to create a workaround…
However, any feedback is welcomed and appreciated!
The ROs are gender locked except for one possible option…I’ll see when I get there!
Appearance: 5’9, skin the color of bronze with long wavy hair that’s only a few shades darker than their skin. Their eyes glow in the darkness with magic, a greyed out blue and green. They wear a deep v-neck black gown with golden embroidery, an outrageous amount of rings and jewelry, and their signature wine red lipstick.
Background: Vethna is the sorcerer who hired you. All you know is that they’re a noble from the south, but their past, who trained them, and why they’re on the run are all mysteries to you. They can be snippy and downright mean, but it’s undeniable that they need you to protect them, for better or worse.
Appearance: 6’0, light grey skin that’s twined green and covered in iridescent scales. Purple bags sit under his pale green eyes, which, like all mythosi, glow in the darkness. Wears smudged black kohl. His hair is long and half shaved, mostly black with streaks of white, tongue forked and sharp fangs often protruding from out past his lips.
Background: A gorgon tasked with hunting you down for the gods know what. He’s impossible to read, and it seems like no matter what situation you find him in he’s always wearing a mask. Is it possible to see underneath it? Is there even anything there? And, more importantly, can you ever gain the gorgon’s trust after what you’ve done to their kind?
Amilia Von Clamile
Appearance: 5’5 with snow white skin and blood red hair that’s poorly cut and uneven, coming to her chin on one shoulder and sitting well past her collarbone on the other. Her eyes are hazel and her face is covered in freckles. A deep scar juts into her lip on the right side of her face and runs down her jaw and neck.
Background: A half-fae bard who seems to know everything and everything. She’s adamant on following you and Vethna around on your journey so she may one day “tell the tale of your greatness.” Neither you nor Vethna think it will be that great, however. Only tragic.
Appearance: 5’11 with warm toned skin that’s often burnt red, leaving splotchy tans along her body. Her eyes are a steely grey, hair blonde and cut short in a bob. Covered in scars with feathers in her hair, pupils slits and teeth razor sharp.
Background: Your old friend and a current knight in the guard, infused with the mythosi blood of a griffin. She’s fierce and just, and was the most loyal friend you ever had. You hate that you can’t say the same after what you did.
Sabir Du Vaelas
Appearance: 6’1 with dark, cool toned skin, black eyes, and long black hair kept in locs. He wears expensive robes that are a deep teal and is covered head to toe in expensive silver jewelry.
Background: Sabir used to be in your charge before everything went south. A powerful and well known diplomat, everyone knows of his title. His reach is far and wide, and there’s not a string that he can’t pull or a puppet he can’t make.
Will be revealed when the demo is further completed…
I can’t put any official dates for my updating schedule quite yet, but after the first update(s) I’ll hopefully be able to get a feel for the future.
Here’s the demo!
As of now, the Demo is 137k words in total with an avg. playthrough being about 33k words! Reminder that you will have to restart your saves with each update.
- March 5th, 2021: Demo is uploaded.
- April 13th, 2021: Chapter 2 is uploaded. (+84k words)