(WIP) Scales of Justice - CHAPTER 3 UPDATE (14/09/2021)

NEW UPDATE: CHAPTER 3 RELEASE (14/9/2021)

AUTHOR NOTE:

Hi!

I’m Julia Owl and I finally decided to create my own story. I’ve only been reading CoG and Hosted Games for half a year, but the atmosphere and possibilities inspired me so much that I decided to try and create something myself too. This is the first time I attempt to write something like this, so I really hope you will like it!

This is a fantasy story that takes place in a world far away from Earth – a place called Therania. There was some interaction between Therania and other worlds long time ago, but that is in the past… at least, that is what is believed. Nonetheless, this tale does not focus on these lost connections: its plot is focused on the people of Therania and their lives, their history and what is more important, their beliefs.

IMPORTANT : This is a story about people, their wishes and perceptions, their love and suffering. It does not intend to lecture, nor it tries to convince anyone. The characters around you will have their thoughts and defects – however, just like in the real world, the beauty resides in that difference.

TRIGGER WARNING : This game contains scenes of violence, including sectarian ceremonies and fight descriptions: please be careful if violence, kidnap, cult sects, death or murder (inflicted both by your MC and other characters) is a trigger for you.

WHAT’S NEW IN THE UPDATE:

  • Changed V’s female name from Valeria to Venis to avoid grammar issues in-game.

  • Fixed Chapter’s 2 battle issue, that didn’t give you the change to get a satisfying win if you had a 50% skill or higher.

  • Added a new character: the serious Paladin R is ready to stumble into your life by Fate’s mercy and desire.

  • Added a new location – explore Riam, the small yet popular village outside the Wicked Woods that has many things to offer!

  • Get yourself a personalised horse. Everyone wants a horse!

  • Find out what are you willing to pay for a secret…

  • Be careful – even walls have ears in Riam, and they’re all listening to you…

Any advice would be really helpful to improve this tale: please do not hesitate to contact me here, via email or in Tumblr to ask questions, express doubts or make constructive criticism!! Moreover, I am not a native English speaker, so I’ll also appreciate feedback on grammar if you notice any mistakes!

SCALES OF JUSTICE

LINKS

DEMO (Current update: Prologue and Chapters 1-3) → https://dashingdon.com/play/myimaginedcorner/scales-of-justice/mygame/

TUMBLR (the anonymous ask option is finally on, in case you prefer to ask me something that way) → Trending topics on Tumblr

EMAIL → feedbackscalesofjustice@gmail.com

SUMMARY

Rumours circulate around the streets of Capital, the main city of the Hero Kingdom. Rumours about an artifact, as dangerous and powerful as one can only imagine. Some claim it is capable of twisting one’s own nature, making you as good or bad as the owner wishes. Others say that it can identify the true nature of a soul, putting the Ritual used by the Seers on a controversial position for the first time in centuries. The mage that created it is unknown: whispers in the shadows only talk about a labyrinth, set somewhere hidden to protect the artifact. Many want to get it – many others, to destroy it. You, however, are none of those – you just want to live.
You are an adventurer, a mercenary that lost its normal life to the leaders of Hero kingdom when they executed your mother as a recognised ‘villain’. You father disappeared long ago, so you had nowhere to go. Thus, you were left with nothing else than a few personal belongings, and you had to learn how to survive. Luckily, you prevailed, living a humble life with many dangerous trips to earn some gold. However, that almost safe and peaceful existence is now threatened with a letter, found among your old clothes with this year written on it in your mother’s handwriting…

FEATURES
  • Choose your character’s gender (male, female or non-binary)
  • Choose your preferred class or avoid fighting with your charisma.
  • Choose the gender of the 4 potential RO’s.
  • Romance, befriend or rival… discover the virtues and the vices of your companions.
  • Fight Fate or embrace it.
  • Begin the journey that will bring big changes to Therania and people around you.
ROMANCE (SPOILERS)

All 4 romance options are introduced in this first game, some earlier than others (don’t worry, you will have plenty of time to get to know them now, and enjoy their constant company later!):

  • Shoren/Seile → Heir to the throne in Hero kingdom, where your journey starts. Also, your old friend which is very attached to you. Likes to read and practice magic, enjoys adventure and heroic deeds. A recognised “Hero”, with blonde curly hair, pale skin and a pair of beautiful blue eyes.

  • Robert/Reina → Order’s Paladin, defender of Hero and knight of Fate itself. Brave and honourable, is determined to protect the people of the kingdom. Very loyal to friends and very dangerous as an enemy. Has short brown hair, tanned skin and an athletic build.

  • Valerius/Venis → An Outworlder, who was caught by cultists from the Wicked Woods. Gracious, elegant and charismatic. Has long dark brown hair with a silver streak, olive skin and golden eyes.

  • Arion/Aria → Leader of Vannais, a recognised “Villain” who escaped from Hero and now rules the enemy kingdom. Serious, reserved yet respectful. Doesn’t like to stay behind hiding in the castle, thus always personally appears in battlefields and negotiations. Has short blonde hair, pale skin and greenish eyes.

Be careful! These characters have their thoughts and opinions on the world and your actions: if you want them to support you, convince them or take their side… or neither. That is your choice after all!

CLASS

This game focuses more on the story than the stats, thus if you wish to make an easy run that is easily achievable. At the same time, if you want to make your fights more interesting, there is an option to learn a second skill from 0 and risk the skill checks!!

  • Combat → you are a warrior and specialise on close combat. You can use a sword or a bow in your fights.

  • Offensive magic → you understand the nature of the world and make it bend to your will. You can use offensive magic in combat, yet be careful: your protection is not as good as one that a warrior wears!!

  • Healing → you learned the path of magic, yet you are not a fighter, quite the opposite: you do not wish to harm, but to heal, thus you stay behind and support your companions by scaring Death away.

  • Strategy → although you do like war, you do not like to execute it yourself: your skills allow you to become the one that guides the others, quickly formulating plans that grant you advantage during battles.

  • Persuasion → you are not a fighter, nor you like to resolve conflicts through bloodshed: your charisma and oratory skills allow you to end battles even before they start, and your speeches help you during negotiations.

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So much potential! I hope to see more of this!!

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Very interesting start!
A bit too short for me to give really constructive feedback, but I like the premises, and I can’t wait to meet Arion! :heart:

Three small things that bothered me:
  • The name of the game in the save plugin was not customised, and thus the saves overlap with another game. I would suggest naming it something unique, derived from your game’s name (though I can’t tell you how to do that).
  • Would it be possible to get some premade names to choose from, in addition to the input option, please? It’s quite annoying to be forced to type in a name. :rofl:
  • The choice of equipement for a charisma based character is weird. The way MC talks about how important that first purchase was for them, saying “nothing” afterwards is awkward.

I think that’s it! I’ll be eagerly waiting for more!

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Thanks!! Positive messages are such a big motivation for a new writer like me! :blush:

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Wow, thank you so much for the feedback, those are really good points!!

A is a REALLY interesting character to write, so I’m very eager to present him in the story too!!

Feedback
  • Yes, the save plug is something absolutely new for me which I am also unsure how to customize, but I will try to solve it asap!!

  • You caught my attempt to avoid the one thing I’m bad at XD! But sure, I will definitely think about some premade names for the MC!!

  • Wow that’s actually a really good point!! I will fix it as soon as possible, thank you for making me notice that!!

I’m really happy you liked the first chapter: it is still a small portion of the tale, but I really wished to see how people will respond to it to be motivated to write more after my exams😊

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Bit of a misspelling here in the second option, “him” should be “her” and “his” should “her” since seile is female in my playthrough

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Will there be a villain path per say, like instead of listening to his father and using the artifact to protect the world like it says in the note, will we able to destroy it, or at the very least destroy the current hero rituals?

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Bit of a misspelling here in the second option, “him” should be “her” and “his” should “her” since seile is female in my playthrough

Wow, thank you!! I’ll fix it asap :grin:

Will there be a villain path per say, like instead of listening to his father and using the artifact to protect the world like it says in the note, will we able to destroy it, or at the very least destroy the current hero rituals

Well, I’m planning to write it as an extensive project of at least three books: I thought to do so because I want to provide an extensive range of choices and paths to follow, as well as to allow the 4 companions to have their stories developed and affected by the MC. Overall, the answer is YES! “Scales of Justice” will be designed with the aim to provide as many endings as it will be possible, as I want to create a world whose future will be completely in your hands and subjected to your will: thus, there will definitely be quite villanous and rebellious possibilities! (Maybe even attached to certain ROs…)

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As Leonardo DiCaprio once said in the movie Django, “You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention”

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Interesting premise. I like the world you build in your work. Will definitely keep an eye on this.

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Interesting premise. I like the world you build in your work. Will definitely keep an eye on this.

Thank you! I hope it won’t disappoint you :grin:

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Wow this is lit :fire:…waiting for more updates

Thanks author and take care

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I will admit, this was an incredibly interesting read. Few books have been able to pique my interest before this easily. I like the worldbuilding you have so far and the premise is very interesting. Im curious after having read all the comments, will race play a big part in the story?

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Wow this is lit :fire:…waiting for more updates.
Thanks author and take care

Thank you so much!! I am really happy to hear you liked it and are waiting for more :blush:

I will admit, this was an incredibly interesting read. Few books have been able to pique my interest before this easily. I like the worldbuilding you have so far and the premise is very interesting. Im curious after having read all the comments, will race play a big part in the story?

Wow that’s so motivating to hear, thank you!! I will work hard to keep it as interesting in the future.

As for the species, yes, it will play a part in the story, but it is more linked to the engagement and immersion of the reader rather than the plot. Your race will affect how you perceive the world and how the world perceives you, so it is a mechanism that hopefully will make your experience more unique each time you create an MC!!

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Oh my god, it’s just the prologue and chapter 1 but bloody hell I am already in love with this story​:heart_eyes::heart::100:. And correct me if I’m wrong but, is this book will be free​:thinking:?

PS: Sorry if I’m wrong grammar, 'cause english is not my first language hehe😅.

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Oh my god, it’s just the prologue and chapter 1 but bloody hell I am already in love with this story​:heart_eyes::heart::100:. And correct me if I’m wrong but, is this book will be free​:thinking:?

I’m so happy to hear you liked it so much! :grin:
Yes, I am not planning to make the access to each released chapter paid at any moment: I want to make it free until the very end of the book, and it will stay free for some time until (hopefully) I am able to release it officially on Hosted games!! This is my first book, so I really wish to make it accessible at the beginning to see how people react and enjoy my writing before planning anything paid!
I am still unsure how it will work with Hosted games and how I will manage it when it will be complete (I am new to the world of publishing, so excuse my vagueness), but at least those are my plans for the future of SoJ!

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The premise of the story is pretty good indeed

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SCALES OF JUSTICE UPDATE - CHAPTER 2 RELEASE AND SOME OTHER THINGS!

Hi there, it’s me again!! After all this time, I’m happy to announce that Scales of Justice Chapter 2 is now available for you to enjoy!!

Again, I’m open to any feedback that you want to give me: You’re welcomed to leave your notes in the comments below, or you can use one of the links to go to my Tumblr or text me to my feedback email. I’m more than happy to listen to your opinions: your support is what makes me keep working on this project!!

NEW THINGS IN THIS UPDATE:

  • Added a new TRIGGER WARNING for violence, murder, cultist sects and fighting: please, be careful!!
  • Added a new character: meet V, the mysterious victim of a cult’s ceremony.
  • Added World Lore to the Stats page.
  • Visit the Wicked Woods, a gloomy forest that surrounds the Capital.
  • Learn about the fight dynamics of SoJ: the first battle of your journey is closer than you think.

ALL LINKS ARE IN THE FIRST POST OF THIS TOPIC: I REALLY HOPE YOU’LL ENJOY THIS NEW PART OF MY STORY!!

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woooo!

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Hi!! Loving the story so far! Wanted to ask,Kyle the former mercenary, he’s not trying to flirt with us, is he?
““Good girl,” he purrs with a smile,”

The word “purrs” used here is usually used when someone is speaking in a lower/lowered voice in order to be flirty/seductive, but based on the choices and dialogue surrounding this, I don’t think it’s meant to come off that way? Thought I should ask just in case!

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