Forgive me if I’m misremembering or getting this mixed up with another text based game I’ve been playing but do we not have the option to kill one of the criminals (the highly cyber-augmented guy)? I’m pretty sure I remember killing some dude after throwing an EMP at his generator.
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Unless I released an update without noticing, this definitely sounds like another game. Sure, you can kill that guy if you want lol.
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The one you’re thinking of is Bleed.
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Ahhh okay lol.
Yeahhh, seems so, assumed it was this cuz I couldn’t find another game of this genre in my bookmark section. Must’ve forgotten to bookmark Bleed.
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OK, what is going on here? Why is your writing so good? Your description of scenes, your pace, the way you immerse the reader into the scenarios… they make me feel like I’m reading a work of a very mature writer. I’m not just reading a working progress work. I feel like I’m reading something that should have been on the bestseller list. I love this so much! And I have to say I love MC and Bo already.
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I don’t know how it happened, honest! Haha.
I’ll try my best, but I don’t know about ‘mature writier’—maybe after it’s all finished 
I’m so glad H and BF are getting love, though! I know the BFFs trope is hit and miss for a lot of people.
(And thank you for the errors—I’ll fix those now)
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i may be in the minority here, but i just feel that sometimes the writing can be a bit word-heavy. that’s not bad in itself, but i find it distracting when i’m trying to go through a scene and i’m met with two paragraphs describing a character’s appearance or the city layout. even more so when i’m introduced to five different people at once, all of them getting a detailed description one after the other.
imo these moments could be a little more spaced out, and it would benefit the flow of the narrative without feeling like we’re taking a break from the main stuff to get info-dumped.
overall, i really like this game though. it feels very grounded and realistic, and it hits all the marks for me in a superhero story. i like most of the characters, and my mc behaves like a real person who got handed this fantastic power and is just trying to do some good with it.
and i liked specially the division between civilian and mask personalities, it adds an extra layer that distinguishes mantle from others in the genre.
great work with this and i’ll keep my eyes open for future updates!
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Thank you!
Talking about the dreaded infodumps:
This is an early chapter thing—it was a conscious decision on my part to burden the first two chapters with set-up, so that what comes after can shine unimpeded. My thinking was, once your mind clicks reading a story, and you connect with the world, you don’t really want it to still spoon feed to you like you’re still learning. But it was always something I went back and forth on.
What I’ve released was already heavily edited down 
haha. I remember I had a whole paragraph in the opening scene talking about how BF and H met and how quickly their bond formed, but I ultimately cut the whole thing, even though I liked the passage. Because I think the scene already speaks for itself on the friends’ bond.
For the introduction of RF South:
Even with what I said previously—usually I’d absolutely be spacing out introducing that many characters at once—in service to the story of the scene. I think the reason I didn’t in that case is because that is the story of the scene, being overwhelmed by introductions. It felt like it put the MC and the reader on the same page.
Thank you for the kind words as well as the feedback 
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Maybe try interspersing that info at other places, once sentence at a time? You already are doing a good job slowly revealing bits about the story’s backstory one hint at a time.
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Thank you 
If you’re talking about the H & BF passage, I do actually stand by cutting that. I think it’s enough to say the two are life-long best friends. Going into details on how they met, when that story’s already so easily surmised isn’t so necessary (they met in school).
But don’t worry about missing out on that kind of content—it’s not like I don’t enjoy throwing in other references to their history here and there 
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When I reached End of Demo I want to scream “nooooo!!”. This is sooo good 
I really enjoyed it, the humor is great, I can’t wait for more 
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Thank you, you’re too kind! 
I’m both sorry and glad that I left you wanting more haha
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I was wondering why we can’t see the code of the game. I’m asking that because after reading a LOT of game like this I can’t stop myself from stat-maxing.
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Putting in a question at the top here: Does everyone feel consistently happy that their playstyle is rewarding, points-wise, the personality you play as? And, do you feel you get enough points and aren’t struggling to keep them?
Back to the reply:
I’m sorry, I know this can be annoying for some people!
Originally, I did write all my code around the idea that people would be able to go through it—and I only changed my mind because I was self-conscious haha.
But, at this point, there’s quite a lot of spoilers appearing in the backend now, so I unfortunately won’t be opening up the code. I’m really sorry about that.
I will say, you don’t have to worry about gaming the stats—I like to write with the idea that there’s never a ‘fail’, just a different path. Espeically for the personality scores—those will mainly always be flavour.
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I think you get enough point of each stats to create the MC that you want. I just didn’t found any choice to make a Flirtatious or Bashful vigilante but I suppose it’s because he met the RO for the first time and it would have been strange to flirt at the beginning
No problem it’s just that I like to see the code of a game, it make me appreciate the work that the author put into it and allow me to sometime discover scene that I didn’t even knew were possible in the first place. If the code would spoil the rest of the game then I’m totally ok to not see and prefer to simply wait for the rest of the game
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Yeah, not many flirt/bash options for now—they’ll come when the characters are more familiar! I’m itching to spark those connections haha
I’m glad you understand about the code; I definitely have no problem people going through it after release (as long as you don’t mind the mess )
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Can’t wait to find out how we got our powers, Bonnie’s accident, and Why she’s afraid of police stations. I really hope we can tell Bonnie our secret before she learns about it some other way.
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Thank you for the comment!
I can tell who your favourite is 
haha
I can’t wait to start giving some answers…
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Yeah I hope she will become the Oracle to our Batman.
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