“Everything is goo-”
Swap body
“WHAT THE FU!?”
Cant wait to see more
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The best story I read so far! Good work!
Hey everyone! Appreciate all the replies - I will look at them more in depth later, just thought I’d address two things really quick.
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A being referred to as “Unknown” - Im not sure if this just a weird bug because I’ve had it happen on my end sometimes when I’m first going through a play through, so try refreshing and see if that works
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Save system - I honestly had no idea what this was, it was a plug in on Dashingdon so I thought why not haha. It was causing errors so I turned off. I think that’s my fault and that I probably need to do some kind of coding in my game for it work?
Thanks!
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Initially reading the summary, it seemed a bit too simple.
However, after a play through of what you have so far I have to say the story is lovely!
There are quite a few pronoun typos that will need to be fixed, but I think you have a great start here!
Playing as a female MC. I liked all of the RO’s. I am particularly interested in why E has taken such an active interest in the MC.
One thing I am curious to see is if the MC potentially has other powers if they kiss other people under the arch.
I am excited to read more! Good luck!
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reminds of that one anime called “Yamada and the Seven Witches” where he kisses people to swap bodies with them and use their powers. cant wait to find time to play this!
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I’m amazed none of the other kids were like “let’s kiss!” yet to see what happens changing the pairs lol
errors in the genders
She’s quite slim, with a lithe frame that makes it clear she doesn’t do much heavy lifting. Her long, crimson hair contrasts with her pale, almost ghostly skin. Her blue eyes are cloudy, verging on being considered grey, but with a bright enough hue to still be blue
Regardless of his personality, it’s hard to deny that She is attractive. Even with her punky dyed hair.
Should be her
“Looks like you guys had a good time.”
We all turn to see Evan standing there. He isn’t in her school uniform, and is instead wearing a tank top and a pair of shorts. He holds a roll of raffle tickets in his hands.
Should be his
me nitpicking the description of relationships
The relationship description of:
Evan: Okay, so he may have a schoolboy crush on you
Does not match up with the way E acts lol So I suggest changing the relationship description for something along the lines of: they seem to find you “interesting”, to fit more with the vibe E gives 
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Fun game! Definitely interested in following this one along.
South Carolinian here. Will be watching this thread with Great Interest… 
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Have to admit, when I read the premise I thought I wouldn’t like it, but now that I’ve finished what’s written so far, I really really liked it!!
There were quite a few pronouns errors, but nothing too awful. Alistair became Atticus at some point though, which I found funny ngl😂.
I would really appreciate it, if you could get the save slots back. I’m sure there’s someone here that knows how to implement them without the error, who’d be kind enough to help you.
All in all, I dig what you have so far and all the characters are very likable to me. My fav so far is Alistair, actually. Probably because I like the mildly tsundere types lol
Anyways, looking forward to more!!
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Saves should be working now!
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The way we get forced kiss needs to be changed because it honestly makes A look kinda stupid. You saw the person who ran off with your stuff, you screamed for people to help and saw me run after them, who we look nothing alike. It just made me annoyed with her the entire time tbh.
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nani I was a big fan of the manga and didn’t think I’d see this series referenced years later lol
Definitely gonna check this out!
Finished the demo and I am loving the concept. But I hope we get more downtime between missions, since I feel like we’re going from mission to mission with Darcy. Maybe more dates, slice of life with the romance options and glimpses into their normal life. I do really like and am intrigued by a morality system though, and whatever Darcy has planned. Excited for more!
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I do really like the idea I’m a sucker for a body swap but I feel like we need way more time as ourselves before the switch we should have one full day at school meeting every important character as ourself at least once and a little time with our parents in our house than we can switch.
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I mean, It’s the inspiration lol
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I think maybe a week or even a month before the swap would be better, get us as readers invested in the mc’s life and their struggles…and give us the time to have our mc’s a chance to maybe build a nice antagonistic relationship with the over-privileged jerk we’re destined to swap bodies with and their clique. And of course to establish our own friends and relationships at the school too.
Other than that this has promise but the gender errors in particular are jarring.
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Damn, that was good. I love it. I will be looking forward for more.
ahhh i needed a new school setting story and this gave me a good feeling right up to when A was actually being rather cute and boy did i want the story to continue.
sidenote, i felt the relationship with E felt very fast, like instantly swooned and gushing whenever they entered the room, wish it kinda was more of a slow-burn similerly how A wont admit they kinda dig you.
and darcy raises many flags for me… instantly not trusted AT all!
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Found this bug(?)
And the cheating. I have a BIG problem with the game not letting us out of the cheating thing. I don’t want to do that, and $5000 is not going to change my mind. I don’t care if “no one could possibly know,” either. It actually made me quit playing, when there was no other option but different flavour variations of you go ahead and agree to cheat.
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Hello everyone! I’ve taken a couple days to absorb the things being set. Thank to everyone who enjoyed the game! I really appreciate the kind words it helps keep me motivated 
@Knoez I probably could have done a better job explaining this in my summary, my bad! I would define it as a supernatural romance coming of age story, although the romance is definitely optional. A lot of the focus is placed on the relationships, but obviously the story plays a critical role as well.
@Dej 
I promise I’m not stalking you. But seriously though, that’s a hilarious coincidence! I spent a couple years living in South Carolina, so that’s where I drew my inspiration from.
@No_This_Is_Patrick I understand where you are coming from with the agency thing. I’m definitely trying to think up a couple of solutions to mitigate this problem and give the MC more options to oppose Darcy. However, I think it’s important to note that the MC is kind of at Darcy’s mercy, because they need the money desperately. So it is an imbalanced power dynamic, which I understand can be frustrating in a choice-based game. But I hope you understand where I’m coming from!
And about the forced kiss scene at the beginning with A, it’s really supposed to be more light-hearted than anything. You’re totally right, it does make A look stupid. Because they are being stupid! They are totally acting emotionally, which they can tend to do.
@AnneWest Don’t worry, there will be a way to refuse cheating in the upcoming update! I was going to include it in Chapter 1 but decided not to, but now I see I have a lot more editing to do, so I think I’ll add it in anyways. I understand being forced to cheat is frustrating, but the MC is in a bit of a desperate position. Plus, if they didn’t agree, I wouldn’t really have a story to write! Hope that makes sense. Hopefully you can give the story a second chance!
@dawn Thank you so much for providing examples for the errors in gender pronouns. Makes the work much easier for me, so I appreciate it! I also totally agree with your take on E, so I am going to change the descriptions.
@rkgk Ok so funny story, he was supposed to be Atticus at first, but then I realized that would mean there would be dozens of Atticus’s (because of Audrey not ending in s), which bugged me because it wasn’t gramatically correct, so I changed it to Alistair. But I guess I forgot to change it for the height scene which is hilarious, I’m glad you found it funny too!
@Xarena @idonotlikeusernames Hmm, I see what you guys are saying. I think my big fear with the prologue was taking too long to focus on developing the MC, because then things can sort of drag on. I wanted to hit the ground running, especially since it is kind a of a fish out of water story, where the MC doesn’t feel comfortable and isn’t grounded quite yet. And then, as the story goes on, gradually learn more about your MC and shape them the way you want, versus a big exposition dump or a slow, slice-of-life beginning where we’re sort of just twiddling our thumbs waiting for the plot to start. Please, let me know what you think about this! I am planning to add more scenes to chapter 1, aside from the group and Darcy’s missions, which should help build a stronger connection to the MC and flesh things out more.
@Xarthery I definitely had blinders on when I was finishing up Chapter 1 and didn’t realize that the player didn’t get to connect with the MC much, so thank you for pointing all of this out! Especially the scholarship bit. I do have a plan for it and it will be an important part of the MC’s overall arc, so there should be a scence included in Chapter 1. Thank you!
If you commented something and I didn’t touch on it, I apologize! Feel free to @ me or DM me and I will reply ASAP!
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