That was an incredible start, I’m really floored!
I love the general ambience of the thing, and I’m really curious about the direction the story will take.
I also have to say - the game looks GORGEOUS, especially when playing on black background. I would go as far as suggest you actually tell people on the first page it’s best played on black background and if they didn’t already, give them the option to switch to it. For example on the same screen as the maps and romance emblem.
I don’t mind the bare ChoiceScript games look, it’s perfectly fine, but I have to admit when an author goes beyond themself to do something that looks like an actual user interface, it’s incredible.
Another thing I’ve really enjoyed is how customizable the MC is, appeareance wise. A perk of having a gender-locked MC, I guess. And well, since I always have male MCs, this is perfect!
And the XP system? Chef’s kiss!
I agree with previous commenters about various typos and so on here and there, but since you’ll be checking that out, there was no need for me to list them. I didn’t see any issues other than that - at least in my run.
Now, I guess I have a small suggestion.
It would be nice if there was some mention somewhere related to the MC and Rex both having blond hair and blue eyes, if such is MC’s appeareance. For example when Rex appears and is first described, and his hair and eye color are mentionned, MC could think something like “what’s the big deal, I also have blond hair and blue eyes”. Or well, someone else could mention it. I can very well imagine Kell getting grumpy and saying he doesn’t understand what people see in Rex considering MC has the same attributes and sports them so much better, or something like that
And well, I’d love a codex or something with species’ descriptions - I feel like that’ll become very useful very soon. For example, I can’t for the love of me picture exactly what Kell looks like, especially the tail type - it seems to be a thin and flexible tail, considering he can crack it like a whip or use it to wrap the MC, but that aside…
But man, I love Kell so much. By far my favorite big bro in IF!
I’m extremely curious as to what you have in store for him. With the way he acts around MC, he acts the way a RO could, but since they are brothers, I don’t know what to think.
I mean, I wouldn’t be opposed to him being a RO nor to him NOT being a RO - I’m honestly just extremely curious.
That cliff hanger though! Aaaack!
Well, I think all of that can be summed up to - I am so excited and hyped and I love it!
Now, with that being said, I have a question that may seem a bit dumb, but oh well, considering this game seems to focus heavily on romance, I guess it’s not out of place.
The player can really customize the MC, they can decide what’s MC starting relationship with Rex, if they like alcoholic beverages or not… But can we decide if MC was in previous relationships or not at all? This is something I really like in games, and I feel like way too many games with adult MCs assume MC has experience in dating / physical relationships already.