WIP Grey Swan - Birds of a Rose Rewrite Update 03.11.24

Ooo I really like the rewrite so far!

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Another small update, be aware that this one is riddled with untranslated words and a few typos! I wrote this during two train rides lasting the entire night so I was quite tired.

I will fix this today after work.

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two things

  1. Bad save slots
  2. The game gives an error after the choice of how the horn sounds

Thank goodness for that! I wouldn’t mind playing as a bird, but I genuinely liked the premise you’ve shared. I’m pleasantly surprised by how on top of things you are with your updates.
I remember following your progress when I was still lurking without an account.

So, is it almost finished now? I can’t wait for the full launch!

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I remember from some time ago, possibly in one of the author’s other books (?), the author mentioned that they weren’t a native English speaker. It’s great to see how much their writing has evolved! Their English may have improved, and as a result, their writing style has changed too. A year or two can change a person so much!
A rewrite definitely makes sense in that regard.

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  1. has been fixed
  2. I couldnr recreate that error, has there been something that showed up on your screen?

I got trauma from that ngl :sob:

I wish, but no, even less so with the rewrite now.
The only thing mostly finished is the plot alone, the rest still needs to be done.

But I am glad you like the rewrite!

Its stated in my first post that I am not an english speaker and thank you for thinking that!

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Got a cha ce to play the rewrite and im enjoying it greatly only saw one instance of code showing but other wise everything else looked good.

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Just played the updated demo, and that we’re actually experiencing the situation with the MC’s friend and how they can potentially get the back scar is some good stuff.
Also very interested to see how this situation with the ceremonial arranged marriage is going to work, and how the rest of the cast feel about it. Especially after seeing the Phoenix mentioned to be the second biggest red flag, considering how the (seemingly) biggest Red Flag acted in the original demo.

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I didn’t realize the MC was going to Marry a grown adult in the new demo. I was shook :sob::sob::sob:

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This will be corrected with the next update!
My tired ass writing § instead of $ lol

I am currently writing that good stuff!
(I can only hope its good, I never wrote torture before, we will see!)

Now for a few this will take a bit longer, since they tae a bit longe to show up, but all wil have an opnion!

What if I told you the former red flag has been dethroned? :joy:

yeah, nothing better than an arranged marriage… even if it is only on paper, right?
Dw though, you can totally kill your religious spouse!

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On the description up there Karla/Chris is set to be opposite gender of MC, but is it different for the rewrite? Because I play a male MC and the Dove that appears is always Chris :thinking:

That aside, LOVE LOVE LOVE the new BOAR :sparkling_heart: :sparkling_heart: :sparkling_heart:

I keep replaying even if it’s still short, just to admire your writing and immersing in the feeling it evokes! It’s very atmospheric :heart_eyes:

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It is, however you can romance both of the siblings! Spoiler: in the old demo the same-gender sibling always died, while here they actually survive!

Yeah but Karla shows up as well, she is just a bit… preoccupied with what happened and will be available for romance a bit later!

:heart: :boar:

Thank you! I am currently working on adding more and we already cracked 10.000 words for the new demo! However I want to add a few more things before I update :slight_smile: already adding a bit of replay value!

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Aaaaahhhhh I love this line

But it got lost, like so many old things do.

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I loved writing it, I am so proud of this!
Thank you for liking it!

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We finally cracked the 10k on this rewrite, now in the public demo as well :slight_smile:

What you can do: learn more about the Divine Flock, nearly die, finally meet the one you are promised to!

(Now as always more stuff will be added as time passes!)

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How do you become a vampire?

Not yet in the game, but it will be easy to become one!

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I’m getting an error with the lake party.

start line 925: Invalid option; conflicts with option ‘a’ on line 922

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Fixed it, thanks!

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How fascinating. I really like the atmosphere of new demo so much more so far because it’s super unsettling! Very Silent Hill Church Cult vibes. You really nail the creepiness of a cult-fanatic-MC on the head, especially when I selected all the positive options and became a member of the Doves.

Heartbreaking to see what happens to our friend/crush though. And choosing to take the punishment for them is so hardcore, especially if you’re not in love with them.

That Angel Consort is such a ride or die fr. Leader would be lucky to have them!!

Also, love the white robe options when Leader’s is blood red. That’s such a vivid contrast and kind of telling in my opinion that our MC is just a pure baby and Leader is up to no good.

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