So I stumbled across this on Dashingdon yesterday and honestly…there are so many things I have to say, but what stuck out the most was that this has to be some of the most stunning prose I’ve ever seen. It’s detailed, yet flows even smoother than simpler stories, and every single word used just makes the mood and themes of the story come across stunningly. Like even grammar errors aside. It especially stands out in scene description; the atmosphere of the town and the action scenes felt so immersive - for one, I really liked the part where the MC almost gets eaten by the flesh wendigo thing in the prologue. I was actually sickened reading it. Kudos to Fiddles on that, you’re one of the only people I’ve seen who can pull off writing that kind of horror.
That’s not even going into the interactions - it’s been said before a lot, but Bautista dealing with the panic attack and literally the entire forest segment with Trace afterwards were serious highlights.
Getting to punch Nazeri was cathartic as hell, sure, but it’s also super interesting how them running away played into their character, which is what I love so much about this writing. Plus, the Warden is great. I get that some people don’t like predetermined personality, and it’s true that in some scenes their dialogue can seem jarring, but it’s amazing how their inner feelings fit the narrative - you can really intricately understand both why they act and react to what’s happening around them.
Sorry for getting all gushy, though. I just sincerely look up to people who can convey things like that so well (I had to replay the demo three times just for the writing). Anyhow, gotta say, mad props to you for everything and I’ll definitely be following this WIP in the future, hope it goes far.