Ah, well good luck with it!
Well I donât know whatâs going on here but Iâm just gonna speak da truth for da peasants whispers Ortega is the best bae in da game and that is why I should be president
No
Argent is da best bae because she can knock Ortega out of the ballpark with snap of her fingers
Guys⌠Guys. Why limit yourselves to just one? Gotta smash 'em all.
Ortega-MC
Mortum-Puppet
Argent-Villain
(TBH I want Argent for me as villain and normal washed up dude, as malin confirmed on Tumblr, You can romance Argent as MC
Now that is a fun way to do the romance. And when they learn you are all the same person.
Run very fast.
At least from Argent.
My MC is just in this for power money and revenge.
Just because she can fight doesnât mean her people skills are anything compares to bae Ortega
Literally my exact reasons.
if the puppet does wake up she better not get any funny ideas about Ortega or Dr. Mortum if she doesnât want to get whacked yo
Not every puppet talk in their sleep. Itâs a consequence from your cover m choices.
Dead memes for dead lads!
First off, hi everyone~
How have yâall been? Iâm like a month late to this demo shindig because summer semesters at college seem chill but are super fast paced in reality and are actually hell. Iâve been doing my best to keep up with the Fallen Hero tumblr posts, but Iâve missed the CoG part of the fandom so much!
Now for feedback at the illustrious @malinrydenâs request
Primary Feedback, though it's really not that bad
âYou have a list. A list and a map. People of interest. How they connect to each other. Thereâs a list and a map and a plan. A plan⌠oh you like your plan quite a lot, but if you want it to succeed, you have to make sure you do what you need to do.â
Idk⌠this bit just sounds awkward to me in comparison to the rest of the writing around it. Like it doesnât flow as well with the writing style you have going on?
âYouâd like to deny it, but you should be honest with yourself. You wish you didnât have feelings for him, that would make things a lot easier. Youâve had months, months in which you could have worked on severing your ties, drifting away again. You could have pretended to hate him, or just that you didnât want anything to do with him and his world again.â
I would suggest throwing in a line break here:
Youâd like to deny it, but you should be honest with yourself. You wish you didnât have feelings for him, that would make things a lot easier.
Youâve had months, months in which you could have worked on severing your ties, drifting away again. You could have pretended to hate him, or just that you didnât want anything to do with him and his world again.
âI thought we were here to talk about us, not about Puppet Master.â No use putting this off any longer. âIâm not sure Iâm the one thatâs avoiding this conversation.â The words are teasing, but the tone of his voice is soft, almost brittle. âWe need to be two to talk.â
âYou donât get it,â you say with another sigh, burying your face in your hands. A moment of respite from the glaring sun. From looking at him. Because hedoesnât get it. Itâs not just that talking about your feelings goes against everything youâve taught yourself to survive. Itâs worse than thatâŚ
I feel this doesnât flow well.
MC opens up with talking about needing to talk about their relationship, then immediately follows up with how itâs difficult to talk about because Ortega âdoesnât get itâ? The MC saying âIâm not sure Iâm the one thatâs avoiding this conversation.â is followed up immediately by them saying and thinking things to justify avoiding a serious conversation.
Maybe if there was more of a pause/silence in between the 2 paragraphs it would flow better? Or if Ortega said something before the MC bursts out with a âYou donât get itâ?
Pause
âI thought we were here to talk about us, not about Puppet Master.â No use putting this off any longer. âIâm not sure Iâm the one thatâs avoiding this conversation.â The words are teasing, but the tone of his voice is soft, almost brittle. âWe need to be two to talk.â
You are both silent for a while, unsure of who should pick up from there. Just as Ortega opens his mouth to say something, he closes it again. Eventually you open yours and say âI know I havenât been the most forthcoming over the years butâŚâ You lose you words and the silence encroaches upon the two of you again.
âYou donât get it,â you say with another sigh, burying your face in your hands. A moment of respite from the glaring sun. From looking at him. Because hedoesnât get it. Itâs not just that talking about your feelings goes against everything youâve taught yourself to survive. Itâs worse than thatâŚ
Ortega says something
âI thought we were here to talk about us, not about Puppet Master.â No use putting this off any longer. âIâm not sure Iâm the one thatâs avoiding this conversation.â The words are teasing, but the tone of his voice is soft, almost brittle. âWe need to be two to talk.â
[Itâs 4am and I should be doing hw but here I am and I canât think of an appropriate Ortega response beyond: Insert Ortega calling MC out on the âIâm not sure Iâm the one thatâs avoiding this conversation.â here⌠Iâll probably make a new post or edit this later]
âYou donât get it,â you say with another sigh, burying your face in your hands. A moment of respite from the glaring sun. From looking at him. Because hedoesnât get it. Itâs not just that talking about your feelings goes against everything youâve taught yourself to survive. Itâs worse than thatâŚ
This stuff isn't a big deal, just me nitpicking or stating my preference:
âFuck. Are you overthinking this? You made it out in one piece, with the Rangers none the wiser. Maybe they foiled your plan, but you came off great on camera. A small setback like this wonât ruin your plans, right? Right. So why canât you get it out of your mind?â
For spatial/story flow reasons, I would throw in some line breaks here:
Fuck. Are you overthinking this? You made it out in one piece, with the Rangers none the wiser. Maybe they foiled your plan, but you came off great on camera. A small setback like this wonât ruin your plans, right?
Right.
So why canât you get it out of your mind?
âYou sympathize with their plight, you were one of them once. Before Sidestep. Before you had grown bold enough to try to be one of them. The respectable citizens. Maybe itâs only fitting that youâre back here.â
I would italicize the second âthemâ for emphasis, because you donât see the respectable citizens part until afterwards. The confusion is super short lived and minor but still there.
You sympathize with their plight, you were one of them once. Before Sidestep.
Before you had grown bold enough to try to be one of them. The respectable citizens.
Maybe itâs only fitting that youâre back here.
These aren't problems, just me gushing
âDid you really think you had a shot?â you ask, making sure to position yourself between him and the gun. âAgainst me?â
IDK if this was intentional or not, but I loved this pun so much. Thank you.
ââŚgotta use the right tool for the right job.â
10/10 pun/catchphrase use, this is the reason why I love the old superheros. Catchy phrases, puns, and oneliners
Now that that is done, time for fan theories/speculations
THEREâS NO FREAKING WAY THAT ORTEGA AND STEEL BELIEVE THAT MC IS A LOW LEVEL TELEPATH AFTER WHAT THEY DID DURING THE NANOSURGE OR WHATEVER IT WAS CALLED!!!
actually there is .
Summary
Since you knowâŚheartbreak ?
and the nano incidentâŚseemed to be more like 'Oh no , we gonna die â then all out of the blueâŚit happen .
I think they maybe suspicious . But donât think they know just how strong the MC is . Because even the MC doesnât know their true potentiel and how far they can go .
Iâm pretty sure Ortega thinks/knows MC is stronger then they think they are, but I suppose the blurred part is exactly how much. Like, MC stopped Nanosurge but if they were the only telepath there, and the nanosurge had never hit before, how would they know the power level necessary to take it down? Maybe nanosurge was brutal but easily swayed, and malin says on her tumblr MC is beta level- not the strongest, but not exactly anything to sneeze at.
Unless they could test it with another telepath, MC could pass it off by pretending that any telepath at beta level could have taken it down if they were there at the time.
from what I could tellâŚmc isnt the only telepath . And the heartbreak has been so far the strongest ones .
And yes , like you saidâŚthe issue is that they have none to measure it against . (save heartbreak ) , or anyone legit from Governement .
I also saw a few snippet (in the 1st book) that tell that even the mc donât know their true potentiel . But it make me wonder if they have others power that areâŚwellâŚasleep . And they havenât found them yet . Guess only time will tell .
It would honestly be amazing if our MCâs potential was basically on Professor Xâs level of being a telepath.
Meh I prefer Mcâs powers in some ways tbhâŚbut that made me think of something, can mc inhabit the body of another telepath? As I just thought they could justinhabit the body of another telepath to get Professor X powers. As I assume if they can, they could inhabit a weaker telepathâs body. But I think Xâs powers are different to mcâs? Not sure tbh only seen a few xmen films and canât read the comics.