Woah mate, you’re pretty intense.
@aequa What do you think about people checking out what you’ve got so far and commenting on it? Maybe it’ll help you to figure out what to do with the parts you’re unsure of. They might be actually good 
Don’t judge yourself too hard.
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Is it an iPhone thing or something? 
My cellphone displays it correctly.
I would if I didn’t think it was total filler! Which it pretty much was. There are some blank spots in my plans for chapters and it led me to writing things I thought would be important but could have all easily been cut out. Judging myself too hard is my specialty, but I’m trying to let that go!
That’s weird. My computer shows it correctly, but my phone doesn’t. I actually don’t remember the symbolism behind it or why I put it there… It was either a sun symbol or an evil eye to me…
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After skimming through the edited chapters, it looks like Leo’s a bit less uptight/serious now. And I feel like Theta’s maybe talking a bit more? Also RIP to Saro’s lockpicking skillz.
It shows up normally on my iPhone, so I guess not. 
Well I don’t think filler is always bad necessarily? I guess it depends on how you do it. Even if it’s not advancing the plot much, as long as it feels natural and is entertaining it can be okay. And since the last chapter was pretty eventful, some “filler” could maybe provide a breather to process and think about everything, as well as learn a bit more about other characters. Not every chapter needs something huge going on. But it’s all up to you! If you feel you can improve what you’ve written so far even further, then go for it.
that symbol is a boob and you can’t convince me otherwise
By the way, is the symbol supposed to represent The Six or Caelum? I thought it was just Visa’s constellation, but then I remembered Cursim had it on his clothes or something, so I guess it’s supposed to represent all of them?
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I am attempting to Re-trace residue of Lilith’s Innocence in order to remind herself who she used to be 
Only a maximum of 5 persons may feel sympathetic towards us, including the head master… but i suspect only Leo and Theta will ever give us present
That’s the perfect way for me to take my mind away from the Spirit Realm/Caelum…
However, on my way to visit Lilith … I plan to perform Faith-Healing with my power along the way, this will ultimately gain more followers with the Spirit Religion and thus, should gain high approval from the spirits 
according to the Oracle Bone Script … that is the word for Sun
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Even creepier
Nani?
We have family friends quote unquote and a bunch of mindless cronies eager to please the school idol 
But they already got most people believing and can show tangible proof… And why does Lilith need faith healing?
Let me try this another way
You should accept her for who she is and stop trying to change her
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But i am assuming Lilith live far from us? So … we can gain more believers along the course to her old house… oh, i am performing Faith-Healing to local residents , not Lilith … curing their illness and injury , with such miracle our Faith should growth like wild-fire
Theta, Leo, Saro, Lilith and the Head Master
I thought other students are afraid of us ? Why they will want to give us presents ?
Oh… I am accepting who she was/Is , Lilith is my best childhood friend She just need me to remind her that
Because they’re afraid of us, duh.
FTFY
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Uh-huh uh-huh I doubted anyone would notice actually. Just another reconsideration of characters. I relied too heavily on Leo’s over-protectiveness. I think I made them all slightly more immature and self-centered. RIP. I’ll never forget. :^/
It had none of these things. 
I think so too! It was just that it was really short and literally nothing happened. Like absolutely nothing. Like 6,000 words of actual dead nothing. I got it though I think. I have a (possibly horrible) idea that I’m excited to write about. It might be an awful idea but that’s even more exciting because I’ve been waiting for so long for someone to get really pissed off at me here.
☉ ☉ !!!
oooo i wanna spoil it. hhhhh i really want to spoil the previous plan of the story hhhh. It is Visa’s constellation now though! Probably as an evil eye. I need to think more to be sure. It could just be a sun/halo.
I’m realizing Lilith has some psychopathic or sociopath tendencies idk man. I’m questioning if she ever knew or cared who she was.
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Careful, this man will do anything for his lilith. I mean I do understand him after all lilith is my main RO but… @Eric_knight “love” for her is to strong like “if he snap he will go to your house and force you to write him fanfic about lilith” strong.
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Well… part of the allure for interaction fiction is that we won’t know what or whether our choice will have bearing or influence the outcome of an event… which i believe is the disadvantage of a fanfic where there is a “fix” or linear outcome that our choice(s) won’t matter
In my MC’s case, it is an alluring process of whether action(s) or choice(s) i make will influence the events of the future , no matter it is for the better or the worse
But hey… when did i ever said i “Love” Lilith ?? I only mention she is a good friend
Hmmm… But my MC never knew or understand about Lilith’s problem (Leo and Theta never said anything , Lilith certainly didn’t mention to me that she has such difficulty ) , so my actions and choices are based on what i learn from the ongoing events but i am with you on wondering whether Lilith ever knew or cared who she was 
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Aw, but I liked Leo being serious and overprotective… 
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Yuppp I’ll usually check when changes are made, just out of curiosity. When I saw Leo actually being sarcastic and joking in a few places I was like w o w
Follow Your Dreams
Visa’s been secretly flashing us from the stars this whole time. It’s always the ones you least expect, smh
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Agreed.
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She knows that already and she still hates you. Im pretty sure she felt kinda betrayed when MC “took” “her” title as divina. Also she hates MC even more now, because he/she forgot about her. I guess.
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He was like a mother. Which is kind of weird.
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kill Lilith, or make some bad shit happen to her. I guess some people Eric_knight would be pissed.
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Im trying really hard but i cant see boobs. The way u did, its more like an expression. of surprise for me.
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I think that
basically, She is so used to mask her real self and act her way through things,
that she can’t tell anymore,
even when alone,
whether it’s her thoughts or her masks. 
I’ve beeb writing a story(about 3 to 5 books) for some time now (about 3 year, i guess. Being developing the world for about ten.). This problem is part of my main character’s personallity which is based on my own. I have this issue, and i think Lilith could relate to this specific trace.
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“Fixed that for you”
Those are definitely eyes.
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Visa, the hot mom type. I approve 
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Exactly. Leo was… cringy. I get that he supposed to be caring and all but his behaviour reminds more of how mom used to gush over me in my early teens. And friends being that clingy would make me a bit uncomfortable.
I think Leo’s personality would’ve worked better if he was a relative of some sort, maybe a cousin.
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Is this sarcasm.
ASDJFKLLKSDJF
I would separate them further, but I can’t do double spaces. ☉ ☉ You can totally see it if you put another space between them… Why are we talking about this?
Is it legal to date your 100-year-old relative?
I mean, he had known MC for two years by then. But I think so too. Picking out characters in the beginning, I was basically like, “okay, this one’s the anxious one, this one’s the dead-inside one, this one’s the… female one, and this one’s the evil one.” I kind of tried to develop them beyond that, but it was hard to realize I could have left those designated traits behind and they would still have a personality.
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A little… 
But, yeah, I think his overprotective nature is pretty cute, even if he could stand to loosen up a bit.
A pair of bicycle wheels?
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Oh I bet I can guess who’s who.
Um… let’s see, Leo’s the female one, Theta’s the evil one, Lilith’s the anxious one and Saro’s the dead inside one right?
Meanwhile here I am having never interpreted him as serious due to his cell phone habits, his reactions to Lilith and the possibility of us regaining our memories (which is why Theta’s ranked higher than him in my book), and his general overprotectiveness, like someone who just got a new toy and is paranoid everyone wants to take it.
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