Thank you, I’ve uploaded corrected version.
There is a reason Ling chooses to use that nickname, and it’ll be explained later, but it just has to do with the MC’s family’s heraldry before the Rebellion.
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Not yet at this part but does she call female MC Little Lioness? If not could it be implented? 
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Done and uploaded (little lion was used for all genders before).Thank you for the suggestion! 
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Wow thanks! This was quick and nice of you. 
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Obsessively replaying made me notice I’m not getting juna relationship points as they are listed in the code. I believe the same thing has happened w stats previously?
Like i get no points for any of these choices:
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Thank you for letting me know! I think it’s the same issue as with the personality values, so I’ve gone ahead and increased the numbers a bit. I’ll check in the morning to see if they’re high enough now or if they still need some tweaking. Also, seriously, thank you for replaying it so much, that really means a lot to me as an author!
Of course! It was like a 5 minute ordeal on my end, so it was no trouble at all. 
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My pleasure im glad my ocd can b of service 
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@Notlev
Errors found:
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Hey! I’ve fixed and uploaded the first problem, thanks for pointing it out!
As for the second one, I actually addressed it earlier:
Now, the third one’s a bit strange… are you sure you never got the Zenon scene in Part 1? I double-checked the code, and it’s gated by a variable that only gets set if you choose the “
” option during Zenon’s scene in Part 1. I’ll look over it again just to be sure, but that’s what I’m seeing so far.
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Hmm ill check again but idt i clicked n e thing w a heart my bad ill look.
Could we maybe get some kind of indicator in our relationship stats? Im not coder so idk how hard thatd be i was jw
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O this book makes me cry every time. Its the only story that does that for me. Its made me a masochist, cuz I keep reading!
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Hey! Yeah, I’ll get that done later today, it should be pretty easy to add.
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Okay, you got me. I think only one other story (Keeper 3) has genuinely made me cry before. Well done. I love that you have options to keep the pain fresh, and I love that the choices are flexible enough that I can have a charismatic MC who is absolutely loyal to and cares deeply about her friends, while being ruthless and nigh-sadistic to her enemies. It’s a mix I feel works very well considering events, and I’m glad I can do it.
Well done on making me cry. Can’t wait for more <3
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I didnt go too far yet but do we get choices of not being okay with whats decided for us? I really despise fighting and bloodshed. I feel like my MC also would be shellshocked after what happend and doesnt even wanna be close to weapons.
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That honestly means a lot, thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
I still need to get around to playing the rest of the keeper games myself. I only finished the first one, but everyone keeps saying how amazing 2 and 3 are.
While it’s not new, there is a choice around the start of Chapter 2 part 2, where you can choose how your MC feels about the appointment. And after the Julia scene, if you choose one of the three known ROs or the MC’s mother’s scene, there’s a chance to talk to them about it more personally.
In Chapter 3, I also plan to include a choice where the MC can choose how they feel about their role now that they’re actively in it, including how they feel about the idea of taking lives or having to order others to kill.
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Thanks. That sounds lovely!
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Praying for a speedy chapter 3 
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WOW this is so well written. i haven’t gotten that far i think but it’s probably the only wip that’s ever made me feel so attached to a character and their emotions so much. the scene in the forest when like half the people you know and trust are just brutally killed and/or basically tortured right in front of you was agonizing in the best way ever. geniunely you write the mc and their emotions so well, the nemio rejection scene is one of the only scenes i’ve ever felt compelled to read every option for. the regret in having spoken your feelings out loud, the unwanted but necessary acceptance, the pure delusional rejection to nemio rejecting you. all of them are written so well. and seeing mc continue their delusion after the fact was just a little cherry on top, it kinda makes me want to see it addressed more afterwards but i dont know how that would work from a writers perspective. also the childhood bedroom scene after finding out you’re going off to war. all of the choices for who to be with after finding out are the BEST though! the whole thing is amazing honestly.
the characters are so well written too, i doubt i’m the first or last, but i looooove nemio and his distant protective self even if he kinda wants nothing to do with us.sucks for me he’s not an ro but oh well, zenon is ADORABLE, the library scene was soooo cute and trying to convince nemio it was nothing was so cute. so excited to finish reading it and seeing the rest in the future!!
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Thank you for the feedback, I’m glad you enjoyed playing it! This is my first more serious writing project, so it’s been a huge (and very enjoyable) learning experience for me so far. Also, idk how others do this, but most of the choices (and emotional moments) were written pretty instinctively 
, just following what felt right in the moment rather than any kind of detailed plan, so I’m always open to thoughts on how I can improve or what you’d like to see more of.
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I’ve enjoyed the game so far, but I can’t help feel a little frustrated at times when it comes to the MC’s personality. Or rather the lack of impact our choices seem to have on it? I can choose every wet cat option I’m presented in the options, and that’ll be represented in that segment. But as soon as we turn the page and get to a choiceless narrative segment, it’s like the MC’s personality is different. Fight cause pride demands it and definitely over what happened to them, etc, that kind of feeling. But um, no? Like my MC, based on the choices I made, is a traumatized child definitely not over it, who cries at the drop of a hat and freezes when faced with aggression. It’s like those choices don’t matter, and the MC ends up feeling like two different people.
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