Hey-hey, I’ve read the game and I’m enjoying it so far. You have a really nice writing style! The only issue I’ve encountered is that sometimes there’s missing punctuation 
Good luck with your writing~
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Hey, thank you for giving it a read, I’m glad you enjoyed it! I try to proofread more often now, but some things do slip through. After the update, I will revisit Chapters 1 and 2 to rewrite certain parts, fix some issues, and integrate the suggestions I’ve received so far—I’ll make sure to address this issue as well. Thanks for the heads up!
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Thank you, btw for your kindness 
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Commenting to keep thread open
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Good call
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Hey everyone!
We’ve reached the end of another month, and I hope you’ve all had a chance to relax and recharge in July.
About the project:
Progress has been steady. I’ve rewritten most of the scenes in Part 2 (it became much bigger than I anticipated), and the polishing is nearly done. I’m now focused on finishing a few remaining sections and making sure there are no bugs or other issues - it will take me around a week or two to finalize everything.
The update is currently around 85k words, and I expect it to stay close to that as I wrap up the remaining sections.
That’s all for now. Thank you for your continued support, and I hope you’ll enjoy the rest of your summer as August rolls in!
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Gotta say, Barny and my MC have not started on a good note here. But really, the only person who humiliated Barnabas was himself. He waltzed into the stables of another lord and assumed the young man in expensive pants, shoes, and undershirt with well-groomed hair and clean nails was the stable boy and immediately goes noble asshole mode. Then gets mad when he gets caught being an ass. My MC could have thrown him out of the estate or let Nemio threaten him for the disrespect, but he waved it off. Didn’t even mention it at the party, either. But Barn has the nerve to attack him at the party for humiliating him? You did that on your own, baby boy. You and that 0 points in perception and intelligence. This is what pure char build does to someone. 
I needed the option when he grabbed my MC to glare at him defiantly and tell him the only one who looked down on someone was Barnabas.
Now I ship them. Yay, enemies to lovers. Lol. Come on, Barny. I got 5 in finesse, 4 in fighting/intellect/charisma, and 3 in perception. After what my MC went through as a kid, he never stopped training. Bring it on.
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Hey everyone!
I hope you’re all doing well. I just wanted to let you know that I finally completed the update, and it should be available now. I apologize for taking this long to update the game (and for the delays); it turned out to be much bigger than I initially anticipated (again).
Here is what the update contains:
- Chapter 2 Part 2 is now available with ~81k words, pushing the overall word count to 271k words (not counting the character info pages, of course).
- There are (WIP) options that are still not fully done, so I decided to leave them locked for now - I plan on finishing the Barnabas and Zenon scenes (I already have most of it drafted) and then move on to the rewrite. The other WIP options will be added during that process.
There are a lot of new variables, so you will need to start a new save to play the update. However, you can still choose to skip straight to Chapter 2 if you do not wish to play the game from the beginning.
I spent a long time trying to eliminate any bugs or issues, but I’m sure that there are some that slipped through. If you encounter any problems, inconsistencies, or anything that doesn’t seem right, please let me know.
I’m always eager to hear your feedback, so please don’t hesitate to share your thoughts, critiques, suggestions, or any questions you may have.
Thank you for your patience and support, and I hope you enjoy the new content!
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I just finished the story, it’s amazing. Love the blood and gore description. I wonder if our character’s personality can be cruel or violent to a certain extent? Or maybe just cruel and violent fully lol I want to slayyyyyy enemies and unstable at the same time 
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Hey! I’m glad you enjoyed the story! Yes, you will be able to make some (in my opinion) pretty cruel decisions later on—maybe as early as chapter 3?
I’m also planning to add a hidden stat in the rewrite (and future chapters) that can be raised by specific choices and will influence the MC’s inner thoughts to a certain extent.
So, yeah, you will be able to do some cruel/violent things in the upcoming chapters, and these choices will impact how common people, other soldiers, or your allies view your MC. You can be a benevolent commander, striving to minimize bloodshed and prioritize the needs of the common people. A beloved leader who considers the well-being and desires of your soldiers. Or a ruthless and unforgiving force, showing no mercy to enemies or traitors. (etc.)
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It was a very well written update the buildup to chapter 3 and the family interaction are as superb as usual.
I really had a good time.
I just wonder about something,is Fighting the stat for Military strategy or is it Intellect and Fighting is mainly about physical combat ?
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Woah, that siblings fight xD
Tell your sob story to someone else who actually wants to hear it. Calling “sob story” being kidnapped by a bunch of psychos and watching people you know and like get murdered?
It looks like Julia can be as mean as MC who hates her. Although I have to say, from MC’s side it was mostly frustrated attempts to make her realize she wasn’t welcome around them. She was just too stubborn to respect that 
This made me think that her puppy like attitude was kind of facade hiding equally negative emotions towards her sibling. The difference is that MC always showed these emotions and she didn’t. Am I right?
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Perhaps she starts resenting an MC that doesn’t give in to her visible adoration and treats her like an annoyance as well as continuously berating her for things… in all honesty she definitely has been more coddled than the MC and expects the MC to give her attention like everyone else. At least that is my interpretation and opinion regarding Julia. Also yeah that dismissive response of her own siblings kidnapping is petty and unreasonable given what could have happened to the MC if they hadn’t escaped not to mention the trauma of seeing people you love or care about die in front of you.
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Yeah… I guess MC is literally the only person immune to her ‘little angel’ charm!
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She has that sort of selfish mentality if you ask me but remember she is still a child… spoiled and coddled perhaps but hopefully she grows out of it with the MC’s help.
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Hey, I’m glad you enjoyed the update!
Fighting is mainly combat skills/experience, while intelligence is general intelligence and magical knowledge for now. There will be new stats in the upcoming chapter that will be focused on your ability to command an army (strategy, tactics, leadership, etc). The idea is that these skills will be calculated based on your current stats, but I will still have to figure out everything.
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Question regarding what the Council/Senate’s whole plan is regarding sending the MC into the army if you can answer without spoiling the major plot points. Are they trying to get the Heir to House Serin killed? Or is it something else entirely?
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MC is still a child too. Or better word, teenager (turbulent time in life, we all know it xd), so I don’t expect particularly mature behavior either.
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Julia can be that mean?
She’s my adorable little Angel:sob:
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