Very niiice. Deff lookin forward to more
“Ok. I am going to tell you the truth, and I need you to remain calm. Ok?” Na’rushalei nods; she is beginning to trust Erik a little. “We need to move you. The people that did this to you may figure out something is wrong, and while we could protect you, I think it would be better if we hid you.” Na’rushalei’s eyes begin to dart around the area as her breathing speeds up. “Hey hey hey.” Erik soothes her as she wraps his cloak around her body. “It’s going to be ok.” He points to you. “That’s my cousin, Adam. She has friends that can hide you. I am not going to force you, though. Do you want us to do that?”
Pronoun mismatch, I was playing a male character.
“Sitting next to her is Adam.” You raise a hand in greeting to the Thu’anayn as Dravin speaks. “he is one of our best fighters. If you ever need anything in that vein just petition his for help, him skills are impressive”
Should be him and his respectively.
You burst forward while pulling your dagger from your waistband. With a sing, precise strike you slam it into the left side of his neck. Blood splurges over the knives grip as the tip rips through the other side of his neck. His dark eyes look up at you as blood pours from his mouth.
Should be single.
This IF is a MASTER PIECE oh man
There are going to be way more choices down the line. Right now I just want to get all the romance paths sorted. Once they are all locked in, I plan for the story to expand in multiple different directions and have you be able to influence dialogue more. It’s possible I even go back and add to the sections already there.
As for being friends with ROs you’re not romancing, it will be possible but will take into account which character path you are on. For example, if you go down Chloé’s path, it will be very hard for you to be friends with Cassian. And once Hemah gets introduced, it will be hard to remain friends with Na’ru if you choose his path.
Nice, it makes sense to do that first. I will say though that this is a good amount of content for 90k words because i expected a shorter read. Still, overall it’s a nice read and I’ll be following this story. Keep up the good work author! :))
Honestly, the hole sister thing is cringe as hell, could not really make it through the story.
Who’s Kayn Gray? I can’t remember when we first met him.
He’s the guy your character beats the stuffing out of during what should have been a harmless training spar.
Hence the option to apologize.