Damn. I did not expect the conversation to play out the way it did between Narmer and his wife. Or that he even had one at all!? I played a blasé character who didn’t care, but me irl was so gagged! He really let my naïve angel spill her awkward heart out to him, liked it, and then didn’t tell her he was married. Man is such a red flag even before he chokes out his wife and threatens to gut her.
Seriously though, it caught me so off guard. I’m not condoning the actions, but I really hope we see him get really scary towards the enemies in our favor so I can simp without my conscience smacking me around like Narmer was.
Though the way that my noble reacted to it was very in character–stumped, shocked, horrified, a little overwhelmed–but still willing to give the guy the benefit of the doubt and pity him, even though irl that shit would be so not okay! Still, they’re a very whimsical character. I just think you did such a good job there.
Also, the wife making the cutting remark about him being disgusting because of our age when we caught them (she’s 20-24, but I head canon 20 to make it even worse lol) and when Ahmose called our attraction to the king “so gross” too I laughed.
Ahmose was such a fun character! It was nice to see our noble get some time to shine by figuring out the investigation too. And the guy just staring at the wall made me snort.
Jesus, Narmer, be careful or you’ll cut yourself on all that edge… oh, too late. Lots of fun and interesting moments in this chapter, but the wife beating certainly puts a damper on things. Will wait to see how it develops, but as it stands this hits a bit too close to home for my captain considering Heset’s background…
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Not sure of the meaning here. Straight away? Straight up (honestly)?
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spot. Also, Petmes is great lol. So he may actually be 10k years old Who else do we know that looks younger than they are? Hey Qenna, where’s your glowing amulet?
Ahmose pronoun error. Also, lol Ahmose is relatable playing floating corpse in the pool. And incredible visual of her pushing a giant, stoic captain into the water
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For consistency’s sake, most of the time you write it as “Petmes’s”
Yeah, I’m reconsidering my N (and potential A) romances now just as much as I’m leery of Q romance. Real world experience makes me not want anything to do with alcoholics or rageaholics (and a ragey parent often makes for ragey offspring as well…)
Which really kind of sucks because that’s three out of four available (for me, given I’m not into women) romances. Why can’t my sad, shy noble have her dead husband back? Or Ebo? I’d take a chance on Ebo, he seems sweet.
New update chapter 1 vizer son when picking to go to yhe library when back at the palace after being binded by the priest i think this is the moment when the pharoh bumps into you and drops the wine
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The adventure only just started, so yes, there will be a lot more coming
That’s good to hear! I’m planning to add more options later in Chapter 4 to fine-tune about how you feel about that scene and Narmer once the MC has time to calm down and analyze their own feelings The coding part is still a question mark haha so I’m not sure yet how I’m gonna do it, if I should make restrictions about it or not… I don’t want to ask the readers the same questions again, so maybe I’ll make it in a way that if you chose to be scared/shocked, then you’ll get to choose more negative feelings, and if you chose simply uncomfortable/pity, then you get more neutral options. I’m not sure yet, but I’ll do my best to try to make it feel in-character for every option without feeling like you’re just repeating the same choices again.
Petmes and Qenna work in mysterious ways lmao
No, that’s just my mistake. It shouldn’t be bleeding anymore if Petmes heals it, I just need to put a temp variable there, which I forgot
Thank you again for the grammar fixes and the spotting of these inconsistencies! I spent most of this week editing out the mistakes and I thought… surely I caught most of them… Well, oops (I’m sure there is more that none of us have noticed). I’ll fix them in the next update
Ebo might be added as a half-romance later. I can’t promise anything just yet, but I’m strongly considering it.
I’m loving it, just a noticing continuity errors when playing with my one eyed guard, forgetting that he has one eye and an eye socket
Also when Z arrives at the tavern to meet my guard at the start it assumes that my guard locked the jewels up when he gave them back to the screeching banshee of a noble woman.
The eye thing is probably going to stay that way because it’s the captain’s force of habit of referring to their eye as “eyes” and not “one eye and a hole/patch/glass eye”. The text also hasn’t specified yet if they have a glass eye or not, which I was thinking to add later during the eye color choice. When it’s very obvious that the text is supposed to be talking about only one eye though, that’s a mistake and I should fix that. Zaia looking for injuries in the captain’s surviving eye is a good catch, thank you!
Can you please include some screenshots of this part? Or just copy-paste the text, that’s fine too. I was searching the text just now but I couldn’t find the error without context because that part has a massive amount of variations
Ah, I see. What did you do with the thief? I mean, did you catch her and let her go, or did you lock her up, did you not catch her but swore to find her later etc?
Who else do we know that looks younger than they are? Hey Qenna, where’s your glowing amulet?
The coding part is still a question mark haha so I’m not sure yet how I’m gonna do it, if I should make restrictions about it or not… I don’t want to ask the readers the same questions again, so maybe I’ll make it in a way that if you chose to be scared/shocked, then you’ll get to choose more negative feelings, and if you chose simply uncomfortable/pity, then you get more neutral options. I’m not sure yet, but I’ll do my best to try to make it feel in-character for every option without feeling like you’re just repeating the same choices again.
