Interesting. Sounds like it could be a pretty good game. Good luck with it.
@FoxalypticWorld
-Thank you! I really need help with that one.
@redhead222
-Glad you find it interesting! This there another game that have the same idea?
I currently writing it right now, maybe a few week?
@The_Ravenclaw
Thank! I still new to this so it is a pleasure to hear the comment!
@Everyone
Working on coding right now! But my Exam is coming right up, so I donât really know when, maybe a couple of week.
Sorry but I canât stop thinking about Crusader Kings after reading this thread lol.
Yes for romance and yes for location choices and I have some suggestions/questions
1:maybe for location choices (if you include them) there could be a mountain location for good mining but the miners discover a horrible secret in the mines!
2:will there be a chance for power-hungry rulers to conquer other areas?
3:is there any date that we expect a demo by (unless IRL or major coding problems occur)? no rush
4. will we get to name our village/capital/kingdom
P.S. I may have already mentioned this but Iâm REALLY looking forward to playing this!
- Crusader Kings is a Grand strategies game which I never heard of it until now (need to search in google). It wonât be like that because this is choice of game. It is still a âstoryâ. My game will be more simple than that.
@Coold00d12
-1. I will see if itâs fit in. Thank you for suggesting!
-2. Yes! Their will be some of them try to steal your village! So be careful!
-3. I donât really sure since my exam is week away. I may not be able to make much progress.
As for the Way of Monarchy progress, I already start coding. Almost finish with the prologue!
For your information, I want to lay more background in the Empire
The setting in the game consists of four Empire. They were called âThe Blessed Fourâ
Laviana
the Empire located dangerously near many volcanoes. It is gift with many of mineral and iron that come from the eruption of volcanoes, which are the resource for making armor and weapon. Laviana is known as the first empire that were created in Varia and have a reputation of âThe Strongest Soldiersâ. However, because of the volcanoes, the empireâs agriculture suffered. There are often desperate need of food each years because of this.The majority of races living in Laviana are dwarf and human. Other races are rarely been seen. There are a rumors that there are dragonâs lair nearby.
Roofa
Located in the middle of the forest, Roofa is known as the empire of nature. Forest is like their second home. Exotic fruit, herb, and high quality potion are the main import for this Empire. They have a plot of land for agriculture, but lack of iron and armor. They are also lack of trading route because the difficulty in transportation. The majority of races living in Roofa is Elves, little of them are halfling. No dwarf lived here.
Mi-Chous
Mysterious is the only definition of Mi-Chous empire. The citizen of Mi-Chous empire contain only two races, the Kinian and human. Kinian have a pair of wing on their back. Some are bat-like, some have features. With their appearance like angel, they were called âMasters of the skyâ. No one Know where the capital city of Mi-chous is located. Maybe they have it, or maybe not. No one knows. Their trading routes doesnât existed. They currently are independent with balance resource.
Inkaza
The empire that depend their take on agriculture and fishing. It was labeled as the most friendly and welcoming empire. Easy to access for both merchants and travelers. Though, they are known as the âconnectionâ between Roofa empire and Laviana empire, providing both empire with the resources they lack. The population consists of Human, Merman, and halfling. Although, there have been more corruption sneaking underneath. The empire has the largest, infamous black market.
The four empires sound great, and Iâd love to be able to completely flip their reputation by the end of the game. Get the corruption out of Inkaza, form a powerful trading system as Mi-Chous, etc.
@Shawnheatherly
-Thank you! I create these empire because of many thing, plot and all. They are very interesting both their cultures. Some of them have secrets that are waiting to be reveal!
By the way, I already hit 1.3k words! (including the code thing)
And it only prologue! (I donât know if I should be proud or not)
I might be posting it by Sunday, looking forward for feedback!
oops mistake!
thank you for pointing out! @TheMeek
Please tell me you meant 1.3k words⌠Iâm sure you did, but this has a world of potential and I for one am looking forward to seeing the results.
UPDATE
I add the plot up little bit. It was the plot of why you were thrown into the role of ruler in the first place. Your parents were both âmysteriouslyâ die when you are fourteen years-old. Thatâs when the village goes down-hill. When you have turn eighteen (the common age to be given responsibility, blah blah blah), there are numerous problem for you to solved and there will be a clue for you to find out what really happen!
I would say that this game will turn out more dramatic then I thoughtâŚurgh, got to finished it!
@TheMeek
-Thank you for pointing out! I reply it in my phone and not properly look at it. My bad. Please look forward to it!
Demo(?)
I personally think that it has lots and lots of reading. ArghâŚ
The prologue isnât finish (Iâm so sorry!), honestly, there are more but I will update later.
(It not even half of it, and the code is hard for the stupid me).
Well, here it is?
This sounds fun and it should have romance and you should be able to pick which empire you start in also if you put in dragons I would like a way to train/domesticate/ally with them
âWhen your respectful parents were âmysteriouslyâ died, you are suddenly thrown into a role of a ruler!â - âwereâ should be âareâ also died should be Killed
âinto a role of a ruler!â- âaâ should be âTheâ
âThe ability to change the way your home is within your hand.â - " the way" is unnecessary
âor will it labeled as a blessed cityâ - Missing a âbeâ between âitâ and âlabeledâ
âThe paper neatly pile into stackâ - âPaperâ should be plural, Missing are between âPaperâ and âNeatlyâ, Missing âaâ between âintoâ and âStackâ
âyou could see the thick layer of dust covered all of them.â -âCouldâ should be âCanâ, âCoveredâ should be âCoveringâ
âIt is an edvidence that there havenât been anyone come in contact with them " -âIsâ is unnecessary, âedvidenceâ is spelled evidence, âhavenâtâ should be âhasnâtâ
âat these paperworks with feeling of resignationâ - âtheseâ should be âtheâ âpaperworksâ remove the âsâ, missing 'aâ between âwithâ and âfeelingâ
âThere seem to be no end to them as you spend hours trying to arrange them. " both âthemâ should be âitâ
âYour head starts to hurt by just staring at them.â switch âbyâ and âjustâ p.s your head would hurt by staring at anything for too long so it would be best to change âstaringâ to âlookingâ
âItâs would be a pain to do it all, even if you spend an entire day doing themâ -Remove " 'sâ from âitâsâ, âspendâ should be âspentâ
âThinking back of why you are doing this right nowâ -âofâ should be âonâ, saying âright nowâ is unnecessary
âyou often questioned yourself what you want to becomeâ - âwantâ should be âwantedâ
âWhen you ask your parentâ -âaskâ should be âaskedâ, âparentâ should be âparentsâ
âSome of your friends want to be a knight,â- âwantâ should be âwantedâ, remove âaâ(unless all your friends wanted to be one single knight but that would need to be some big armor) âknightâ should be âknightsâ
âsome people want to become a merchantâ-âwantâ should be âwantedâ, remove âaâ, âmerchantâ should be âmerchantsâ
âBut it is not for youâ - iâm not sure whatâs not for you but i think you mean its not for the player to decide so add âto decideâ on the end
âIt was the time you snapâ - not sure what this means but itâs wrong
âSince you are born,â -âareâ should be âwereâ
" You are designed the one who will stand over others," -âareâ should be âwereâ, âdesignedâ should be âDestinedâ, add âto beâ between âdesigned(Destined) and âtheâ
âyou do not know what they meanâ - do should be âdidâ, âMeanâ should be âmeantâ
âIt make no sense.â - âmakeâ should be âmadeâ
âwhen your friend go on and on with their dreams.â- âfriendâ should be âfriendsâ, âgoâ should be âwentâ, âwithâ should be âaboutâ
âmany villages have an alliance and form many cities.â- âhaveâ should be âhadâ, replace âanâ with âcreatedâ(or similar words)
âSome of them form for the purpose of surviving and conquering other territory.â- âformâ should be âformedâ
" Human is not the major habitat that live here in this world.â âHumanâ should be âHumanityâ, âhabitatâ should be âinhabitantâ âliveâ should be âlivesâ
âFortunately, your tiny village were not part of this warâ -âwereâ should be âwasâ
(starting here you went back to the present without warning so these corrections are assuming you are no longer in flashback mode)
âor maybe because this village is not in their eyes.â - âeyesâ should be âsightâ
(back to flashback mode)
âThese major cities form themselvesâ-âformâ should be âformedâ
âthe Empire located dangerously near many volcanos.â - add âtoâ between ânearâ and âmanyâ, âvolcanosâ should be âvolcanoesâ
More Corrections laterâŚ
Actually, adding âareâ makes it sound clunky, just take out the were altogether. âWhen your parents mysteriously died, youâre suddenly thrown into the role of a ruler.â
sounds much better.
âIt is up to your choice to make!â take out the âup toâ. âIt is your choice to make!â
Also âtheâ should be âaâ. [A] thick layer of dust.
In the Academic specialties what is âcaftingâ is that supposed to be crafting or is that a type of magic (that would be a cool name for magical ability)
âIt is gift with many of mineral and iron that come from the eruption of volcanosâ- âvolcanosâ should be âvolcanoesâ, âisâ should be âwasâ(unless we are no longer in flashback), âGiftâ should be âgiftedâ, Remove âofâ,âmineralâ should be âmineralsâ,âcomeâ should be âcameâ(unless we are no longer in flashback),remove âand ironâ because iron is a mineral, add âtheâ between âofâ and âvolcanos(volcanoes)â, add âsâ to âeruptionsâ
âwhich are the resource for making armour and weapon.â- replace âthe resource for makingâ with âused to makeâ, add âsâ to âweaponâ
âLaviana is known as the first emprie that were created in Varia and have a reputation of âThe Strongest Soildersâ.â - âisâ should be âwasâ (unless we are no longer in flashback), âemprieâ should be âempireâ, replace âthat wereâ with âto beâ, replace âhaveâ with âhadâ(unless we are no longer in flashback), add âtrainingâ or something similar, between âofâ and ââthe strongestââ
âHowever, because of the volcanos, the empireâs agriculture suffered.â - âvolcanosâ should be âvolcanoesâ
â. There are often desperate need of food each years because of this.â - "change âareâ to âwasâ(unless no longer in flashback) ,add âaâ between âoftenâ and âdesperateâ, remove âsâ from âyearsâ
âOther races are rarely been seen.â - remove âbeenâ
"There are a rumors that there are dragonâs lair nearby. " remove âaâ, âdragonâs lairâ should be âdragon lairâsâ if there are more than one lair or âare dragonâs lair nearbyâ should be âwas a dragonâs lairâ
more to comeâŚ
@FoxalypticWorld
-Hehe, I actually think that way works too. I fix it like you recommend.
@Coold00d12
-Thank you for pointing out, I completely forgot that part.
(I have little time so I update just one type).
I will focus on more the next update.
@Raulin
-Goodness, I didnât think I messed up that badly
Many thanks for pointing out. It only mean that you read what I write.
Iâm so sorry for grammar and error. The top goal right now is to finish the prologue part of the game so I really didnât check for my grammars (and seriously, I am not so good with it).
Thatâs why Iâm really thankful. I will correct it in my next update.
This is the latest update:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/0imk1wo0n2r8kod/Way%20of%20Monarchy(DEMO).html?dl=0
I edit some grammar with many help. I changed crafting into one of the choice you need to choose. Just one though. I changed some content in âspending time with your mother partâ, some character development.
I have it, need me to go on for help?
Actually, it still says âcafting*â ^-^`
There were quite a few grammatical errors- but I still canât wait to see what you add.
BTW I cut off the boys hand~
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Oh darn I was really hoping weâd have another CoG where you get to play as royalty.