# War of Genealogy: Talon Saga (WIP) Seeking Feedback **URL:** \ **Category:** Works In Progress\ **Tags:** nonbinary-inclusive, gender-choice, low-fantasy, young-adult-fiction\ **Created:** [December 7, 2025, 8:51am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917 "2025-12-07T08:51:37Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 20\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 7, 2025, 8:51am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/1 "2025-12-07T08:51:37Z")
_As the child of the legendary mercenary Loyce, you are a young warrior swept into a bloody conflict that threatens to destroy the entire continent of Talon. Caught between your loyalty to your country and your duties as a mercenary, the future of your homeland rests on your shoulders._ - Manage a mercenary company and go out on missions to earn money. - Train yourself to become a master swordsman. - Participate in a brutal war tearing across the continent. Lead your nation to victory. - Recruit brave warriors to build up your army. - Go Hunting or fishing to survive, lest you die of starvation. - Become a hero decorated in valor. - Earn the respect of your comrades. - As commander, the lives of your men rest in your hands. Lead them to a flawless victory, or lead them to their deaths. As usual, I ask for any feedback you have to offer. I hope you enjoy it. **PROGRESS TRACKER** : Prologue = ✓ Intermission1 = ✓ Chapter 1 = ✓ Intermission2 = ✓ Chapter 2 = ✓ Intermission3 = ✓ Chapter 3 = ✓ **PATH SPLIT: ----------------------------------** **DELIVERANCE** : intermission4D = ✓ Chapter 4D = Intermission5D = Chapter 5D = Epilogue D = **PATH SPLIT: ----------------------------------** **REPRESSION** : intermission4R = 1% Chapter 4R = Intermission5R = Chapter 5R = Epilogue R = NB: Total number of chapters are subject to change. To play the demo, go here: > **[CoGDemos](https://cogdemos.ink/play/matt-fusion/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga/mygame)** > **Support Author** > > PS: I finally got around to making a Patreon. Any support would be much welcomed​☺ [Matt Ryland | Stories, Games, Novels, Interactive Fiction | Patreon](http://patreon.com/user?u=91926610) > **WoG Series Plan** > > [War of Genealogy (WIPs) - Seeking Feedback!](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-wips-seeking-feedback/137587/) **Update 1.5 added ✓** **Update 1.6 added ✓** **Update 1.7 added ✓** ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 7, 2025, 2:21pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/2 "2025-12-07T14:21:27Z")
This game probably has the longest prologue of the bunch as there is a lot to unpack, but once you get to chapter one you jump right into the main story. ---
**Author:** ![Zen1](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/z/ed8c4c/32.png) [@Zen1](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Zen1)\ **Post date:** [December 8, 2025, 12:43am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/3 "2025-12-08T00:43:36Z")
After clicking year passes the game on infinity loading ---
**Author:** ![Fye](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/f/c67d28/32.png) [@Fye](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fye)\ **Post date:** [December 9, 2025, 10:03am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/4 "2025-12-09T10:03:00Z")
Won’t say no to a management game ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 9, 2025, 6:19pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/5 "2025-12-09T18:19:47Z")
I added some more stuff past that point. The scenes are easy to write, but the code takes some time to implement. ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 9, 2025, 6:20pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/6 "2025-12-09T18:20:14Z")
😊 thanks for giving it a try. What are your thoughts on it so far? ---
**Author:** ![Good\_Teacher](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/good_teacher/32/250262_2.png) [@Good\_Teacher](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Good_Teacher)\ **Post date:** [December 9, 2025, 10:26pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/7 "2025-12-09T22:26:24Z")
Hey it’s me. I like the concept so far. Can’t wait to see where you go with this. gg ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 9, 2025, 10:31pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/8 "2025-12-09T22:31:45Z")
😁Sup bro. Surprised to see you here. But thanks though. I’m glad you like it so far. ---
**Author:** ![Chukwuemeka\_Odulukwe](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/chukwuemeka_odulukwe/32/237076_2.png) [@Chukwuemeka\_Odulukwe](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Chukwuemeka_Odulukwe)\ **Post date:** [December 10, 2025, 6:33am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/9 "2025-12-10T06:33:17Z")
Well this is interesting I didn’t know you made something new ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 10, 2025, 6:40am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/10 "2025-12-10T06:40:12Z")
Yeah. I’ve been wanting to get back to Hunter Sky since Velocity ended, and it just so happens that on the poll the Hunter Sky rewrite got the highest votes. So we’re here now. ---
**Author:** ![Good\_Teacher](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/good_teacher/32/250262_2.png) [@Good\_Teacher](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Good_Teacher)\ **Post date:** [December 14, 2025, 6:50pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/11 "2025-12-14T18:50:28Z")
So far I like abelian but we don’t get see any of the other characters yet so I can’t say much more. ---
**Author:** ![silvana\_Valencia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/silvana_valencia/32/164369_2.png) [@silvana\_Valencia](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/silvana_Valencia)\ **Post date:** [December 19, 2025, 2:16am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/12 "2025-12-19T02:16:20Z")
The game is fun, the story is interesting, the narration is quite fluid, it’s on the right track. The only bad thing I found was the mission to escort the priestesses. Is there really any way to complete that mission? The lead knight keeps taking health potions even when his hit points are at zero, and my sword always ends up breaking when I manage to kill two knights. I wouldn’t necessarily have a problem with that if I could simply equip another weapon, but when I buy a weapon in this game, the one I had before simply disappears and is replaced by the one I just bought, even if its durability was at maximum. So I can only have one weapon, and if it breaks during that mission, I can’t even try to defend myself with my hands like in other fights. You can only block and dodge endlessly until you get killed. ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 19, 2025, 3:09am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/13 "2025-12-19T03:09:49Z")
Hey there! I’m very happy you enjoyed it and thanks very much for he detailed feedback! 😁 I didn’t mean for the battle to be so difficult that you couldn’t pass it. I apologize for that. I went back and increased the weapon durability and lessened the amount of chances that the enemy would use healing potions to make it fair. ---
**Author:** ![silvana\_Valencia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/silvana_valencia/32/164369_2.png) [@silvana\_Valencia](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/silvana_Valencia)\ **Post date:** [December 19, 2025, 5:02am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/14 "2025-12-19T05:02:03Z")
I appreciate that; it’s still a difficult fight, but now it’s entirely possible to achieve it if you train your character well and have a good weapon. Keep up the good work; I love stories where you can manage your own group. Several of my favorite books are of this type, and this story reminds me a bit of a certain hosted games story that was also about being the leader of a mercenary group. This story could really become one of the most fun if you keep it up. Just one more thing: I found a bug. I can’t post a screenshot here for some strange reason, but this bug appeared right where the priest gives you that blessed sword, just when I wanted to go to the next page. The error message says: missions line 1323: Non-existent variable ‘mission\_successful’ ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 19, 2025, 6:27am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/15 "2025-12-19T06:27:05Z")
Fixed! 👍 Thanks for pointing out the error! ---
**Author:** ![MK\_TK](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/m/90db22/32.png) [@MK\_TK](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/MK_TK)\ **Post date:** [December 19, 2025, 7:47pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/16 "2025-12-19T19:47:08Z")
There seems to be a bug. I can’t go to Gretchzen Pass or talk with Hector. Whenever I try to click these choices, I keep getting these messages: intermission1 line 367: bad label gretchzen and missions line 18: bad label hector. ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 19, 2025, 9:13pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/17 "2025-12-19T21:13:45Z")
I haven’t uploaded those scenes yet. I’ll add them in the next update along with chapter one. ---
**Author:** ![Timeo\_Lettermann](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/timeo_lettermann/32/239433_2.png) [@Timeo\_Lettermann](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Timeo_Lettermann)\ **Post date:** [December 31, 2025, 3:25pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/18 "2025-12-31T15:25:38Z")
The start is very promising but I get this error : Uncaught Error: intermission1 line 1709: label ‘enemy\_turn’ already defined on line 891 after your mother teaches you about the world when you click A Year Passes… ---
**Author:** ![Sooty1](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/7993a0/32.png) [@Sooty1](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Sooty1)\ **Post date:** [December 31, 2025, 3:50pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/19 "2025-12-31T15:50:44Z")
Yeah same thing here ---
**Author:** ![Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/fusion_ultimatum/32/266247_2.png) [@Fusion\_Ultimatum](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Fusion_Ultimatum)\ **Post date:** [December 31, 2025, 10:04pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917/20 "2025-12-31T22:04:07Z")
Hey there! Thanks for the feedback! I’m reall glad yoh like it. The error is fixed btw! Smile😁 [Next page](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/war-of-genealogy-talon-saga-wip-seeking-feedback/174917.md?page=2)