It was clear to me, but I’m also very familiar with the concept, so… maybe I’m not the best person to answer.
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Was clear to me too!
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Can we create a royal guard? That would be cool. One thing I enjoy very much is you can say some truly savage lines in this were hilarious.
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I feel it would be a bit too close to the City Guard, which also has protecting the Sovereign as one of their responsibilities. Maybe I’ll implement an option to re-specialize them, but creating a whole new unit would just be confusing.
I actually don’t remember writing many “savage” lines, but maybe that’s because my break is getting long. I should really resume writing, but there are some things I need to deal with first.
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This isn’t about the game specially but it also happens with this wonderful game. Does anybody know what I should do if I can’t make any saves for any of these games no matter how many old saves I get ride of?
I usually do Inspect (right click on CogDemos game) > Application > Clear All on PC.
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Thank you
This is easily in my top 4 WIPS please CONTINUE this WIP
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I dunno… I get the feeling there’s some crucial change I should make before moving forward. That some major issue is preventing the story from getting more engagement and, until I fix it, all other updates would just be me yelling at the void.
Could it be the third page? Is it too much of an exposition dump? I thought it was necessary to set the stage, but maybe every other reader gets bored at that point and walks away? I wish I had more data…
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Hey Omeg! Maybe I shouldn’t be interfering, but I’ve seen you worrying about your book’s reception a few times so I thought I’d say something.
One thing that delayed me from reading was your summary on CogDemos. It’s short and to the point, which is good, but it didn’t give me a glimpse of what the real drawcards of your story are. It’s zany and funny and set in space and you get to plan a space war and fight against a jerk space empire, which I love - but your description doesn’t tell me that.
Maybe I’m wrong and that isn’t the reason people aren’t engaging, but at least for me that was the reason? I don’t know if I’m being helpful, but I wanted to try.
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You might be right. There’s only so much I can do with a CoGDemons description (250 character limit FTW) but maybe I should expand on the core idea at least a little bit. Thanks.
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It was easy for me to understand, yes.
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I think that when you choose to make a division of battle thralls if you choose:
“I wield the right of conscription. I will draft all able-bodied slaves into the military, no matter how anyone feels about it.”
That “draft” should be set to true, since, well, it says it’s a draft, and even if they’re getting their freedom in exchange after the war, they’re being forced to fight when the others choices where they ask for volunteers show, depending on the MCs Underclass reputation, that 40% to 60% of the slaves would rather not risk death for a chance at freedom.
That and the version of the question of whether or not to use female soldiers uses the non-draft version, which sounds weird when they ask you why would you draft women and not men when you are drafting men.
Also maybe a comment from an MC whose goal is ending slavery about why he is choosing to do that? Maybe he thinks that the fastest way to end slavery is using that as an excuse to take away as many slaves as he can or something.
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Sure, I’ll change that in the next revision. You didn’t even have to explain your reasoning—whenever a command seems to be missing, that’s probably because I forgot to include it. There’s a lot of code in this game.
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God Update. I finished third of the five mini-chapters, finally allowing the player to meet Perun in person and request divine assistance. I also made some changes the prologue, making the first few pages shorter and sharper, and decorated the stats screen with a decently cool map.
All in all, I’m not dead. Stay tuned for future updates.
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Sooo everyone hates me , my City Is doomed 
i think i got everything ah yes perun Is an Ass
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i thought you were dead bro.
I just didn’t know it existed until a couple of days ago, honestly. The name made me think it was a fantasy and the forum software is pretty shit at letting you know who the author of a thread is, so I just skipped over it because I ignore a lot of fantasy WIPs unless the name interests me.
You’ve got a pretty decent following in the Saturnine thread, so I’d announce it there as another work in the same setting so people who have that thread tracking will have it show up in their Unread threads. I checked and it’s been mentioned there a few times, but only as a project in the future. I had completely forgotten you’d mentioned it by the time I saw this thread, and I didn’t remember the name. A “While you’re waiting for the release, you should look at my next game in the same setting” would probably be a good idea.
I also feel like it’s a decent idea to include something else in the thread title, even just the genre. Just knowing that it’s a science fiction game would help it stand out among the other WIPs.
That aside, I do like the story here, but I’ve only had time to go through it once so I don’t have any real feedback right now.
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Your story is great so far. The problem isn’t about the story is that we are on a forum that have few people and even fewer that will take time to read ur story. It doesn’t mean its bad.
So maybe you like ur story to have more marketing ? have a lot of eyes on it ? and get a lot of expection and people tell what the story should be like ? 
keep the good work. If the story disappoint we will be there to tell.
Till next.
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