Overall this story has been quite the delight to read. Not sure why I haven’t read it sooner, if I’m being honest.
Summary of my Playthrough
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I’m concerned that the title of this WIP is too similar to Villains. Have you thought of altering the title at all?
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Choosing to stay in the hiding spot increases our impulsiveness.
And though I want to move you, I know and understand why your mother doesn’t wish to take you out?”
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This shouldn’t be a question.
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I find it weird that one of the default names for our character is Reese, and there’s also another character named Reese that shows up a little later. Maybe change the default name to something else?
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Can the person who can change into anyone’s greatest desires appear as a brand new gaming computer?
“But she warns them first and she never kills them. Most of the time, they go to the hospital simply because of a flesh wound.”
“They go to the hospital because of a flesh wound,” Reese mimicked me, rolling her eyes as she sent me a playful smirk.
At the moment though, it was gazing up at me, a certain look in its eye. I didn’t know much about squirrels, or what they were capable of, but I swore that this one was giving me the death stare.
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You know you done screwed up when even the squirrels are giving you hateful glares.
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I’m also having trouble with the password section. Is there something we’re missing?