Vengeance-Your Revenge (WIP) ( Updated 11th July 2023 Word count-26k) ---Chapter 2 released

It will be working by tomorrow morning.

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There will be fight scenes and shoot outs. And I will give the option to specialise in one fighting technique. Also by tomorrow morning the Prologue will be out so the Demo will be working.

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I wonder if we will get a chance to set where in India our family is from. Also, regarding character customization: will you do the “Merry Crisis” (a great WIP albeit with a radically different tone–worth checking out) approach, or say that while our father is Indian, our mother might not be, or vice versa (hence PC’s appearance is fully customizable). Both are worthwhile and valid–like I said, it is your judgment as the author.

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Well, no one ever writes about latín american countries.
If You want You could make mc latín american :point_right:t4::point_left:t4:

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I think I will give you a choice of countries and assign names in such a fashion that they fit these countries without any trouble.
Just the problem with it is that then the whole geography changes.

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While I rather liked the idea of (half?) Indian PC in a story that’s initially set in India, it’s ultimately your call.

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It’s your choice whether you want to have both Indian parents and your MC will be customizable I mean many Indians are fair skinned. Rarely pale skinned aswell. But you could go with brown and black as well. Don’t worry the prologue coming tomorrow doesn’t have such important choices.Its just an introductary. Of the events that have happened. I will also post the RO list tomorrow. Also it’s up-to you if you want to romance some the ROs or not. The first book is not going to be heavy on romance. It will have occasional flirting but MC is in dangerous bussiness so…

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I have decided to set the story in India only. While I have visited other country aswell I find India much more prone to corruption and Vengeance-Your Revenge which is first part of Vengeance trilogy will be based in India. In Part 2
Vengeance-Rise of the Fallen ( title still in work you will have scenes in many countries).Vengeance-Your Doom will be set mainly in Paris I can’t reveal more.

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RO list
Monty/Monica:Your childhood crush whom you met at school. He/She is also the one that got away. What happens when you suddenly meet them again after a span of ten years. But remind he/she can be materialistic.What does she love more you or your money. (5 feet 8 inch(Monty)/5 feet 4 inch(Monica) ,pale skinned , slim, brown hair and brown eyes)
Robbie/Rita:Police officer who likes to bend rules. But she can bend a lot other than rules. When she takes interest in something she is completely in. And it appears she has taken an interest in you whether for your crimes or for you that you have to explore. ( 5 feet 10 inch(Robbie)/ 5 feet 6 inch (Rita) ,olive skinned ,
athletic black hair and black eyes)
Alexander/Alexandra: Mysterious guy/ girl. (6 feet(Alexander) 5 feet 8 inches (Alexandra), pale skinned, athletic black hair and blue eyes) . This is the only Non Indian /Russian RO.
You can’t have polymorous relationships in this book. Sorry but I don’t want to include that. You can flirt with all of them but only until you get official with one the others will treat you as friends( without benefits).

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I wanted ti try out the demo but it says 404 error, I like the concept of modern day mafia theme. Action,suspense,adventure, mature,romance,horror,and etc should be included when writing this(Or however you wants it:)). I sincerely hope the character development is present when writing this because I’ve read books with static to no development. Also a little realistic, like if I just threw a 300 point guy off a bridge but can’t kick open a door it would be confusing(Unless door is metal or stronger ofc,thinking wood). I also encourage a good sleep schedule and going out interacting with people to build characters easier, for instance talking with a fast food worker shows how they actually reply(Depending on the time and the area).HOWEVER! I want to love the characters and feel they are alive…you know? Sometimes character development and feelings are left out and it hurts to leave knowing they never change, even if your a MC. Really looking forward to this, I support your work!(Also when it’s out I’m definitely buying it)

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The Prologue will be available within a few hours. This story is my passion. And don’t worry I will finish it within 4 months also I want the characters to be perfect.

Also I am including stats from chapter 1.

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The Prologue is out. I know it’s short but it was just to tell people about the settings.

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If you want any changes you can suggest it. I am open to all suggestions. I need feedbacks if I need to complete this story. As you know it’s my first story and I don’t know whether people will like it.

After clicking reminisce or remember, second page was play again.
Is that the end of the demo?

It’s the end of prologue. It’s the first scene where you start remembering your life choices which led to your fiance dying on the day of your wedding. In the games while stats like Strength, cunning, intelligence is important whether you survive or not will depend on cruelty and optimistic stats because if Optimistm is low your MC will suicide and if your optimism is high aswell as cruelty is high he will be given life imprisonment . Cruelty will depend on how many innocents you kill.

Who are the ROs?

I have already given the RO list. They gender customizable for user friendly. I will upload the female RO sketches tomorrow . And the male ROs in a few days.

sorry didnt see it i recommended you post it on the original post so people can find it easier

I’m gonna be honest I thought the stats would be different they seem like stats you would see in a fantasy game instead int and cunning is good the other stats I’m not so sure about is our fighting gonna be fists why not have a fists stats and gun stats and leadership I would just change to charm but that’s just a personal take

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