Just played the game and it was pretty good, a very unique story on its own. I do have some input though.
The Bad:
Slow pacing is the biggest issue of the game, for a action drama story rooted in tragedy and revenge you do spend too much time going to family events, cafes, flirting with the girls, meetups with the homies, and as a result the thrill feels dull. There’s barely any action so far and plot progression is uber slow which makes the story feels boring ish.
When you spend more time eating breakfast, hanging with the homies, flirting with your best friend and 3 other girls or talking to your uncle’s boyfriend then it becomes a huge issue for an action drama revenge tragedy as it causes sluggish pacing and turns it more into a slice of life story of “I got mommy and daddy issues as a rich kid”
Too many friends, too many allies and not enough enemies. There’s too many characters in the game and while some do get killed off which is a good thing the cast is still far and wide which slows the story even more as you talk a lot with them. This is made worse when you realize huh the MC is well liked and respected by everyone and barely has any enemies, this means not a lot of tension or drama is going to be in the story as everyone likes the MC and everything goes fine and dandy.
Also who are the bad guys idk we barely meet them. Hell some characters are not even needed in the story like your uncle’s boyfriend like why is there a side character’s love interest anyway?
OP MC, this is a common issue these days in comic books, anime, manhwa and even video games or movies. The MC is OP AF in every single way possible:
1: Not one but TWO overpowered powers which don’t even require any training or some form of sacrifice which causes the MC to SLAP everyone easily? check
2: Extremely loyal and OP best friend who can kill people easily and childhood friend who is similar to you in money and influence? check
3: The government and law enforcement don’t mess with you? check. 4: rich and powerful af? check
It feels like the author envisioned this story as the heir of the Samsung Corporation in Korea meets Batman in the story, talk about being born with a diamond spoon bruh
Lack of drama, tension or conflict is another issue, everything feels too easy. The MC didn’t earn or struggle in the 6 chapters that I’ve read with the exception of mommy and daddy issues, but aside from that all of the many allies love the MC and are all powerful and/or rich meaning character development is zero.
I didn’t feel “oh crap whats gonna happen next” as its all too easy. This is made even funnier by the fact that the Detective RO, the Superheroine RO meets you once and likes you already like bruh we are literally on opposing sides which makes no sense. I get that childhood best friend RO and childhood friend RO likes you but there is zero conflict.
Instead of the feeling of the world being against you and you started from the bottom with endless struggles to overcome them (Batman, Punisher, Daredevil) you just feel like a rich kid who gets what he wants, I didn’t feel like a man reading this but like a boy playing GTA on god mode with cheats.
Vanilla Personality, the MC isn’t that interesting if you ask me with the options either being shy or confident and with other characters its very similar, they’re all nice af and lacks the cool or mystery factor or the conflict tension other stories have. It feels weird that the characters can do terrible things but they are all super nice. Ash is an example of this of being a bumbling shy girl who then snaps and kills others easily.
The Good:
Attention to detail, although there were some mistakes (Bugatti labelled as “Hyper Sports Car” or Ferrari LaFerrari Aperta as “Supercar” as they are both “Hypercar”) The detail on the guns, outfits, tattoos and cars/motorcycles were highly immaculate and extremely appreciated, most stories just say fancy car or guns but in this game its actually detailed and based in the real world which makes it even better in terms of visualizing the world. I am familiar with these brands but even those who are not can google them.
I personally would add clothing brands and jewelry brands as well. If its possible try adding a picture of the car or guns you choose in the story perhaps?
Unique story, despite being a more common story in comics, manhwa and manga the story of revenge isn’t really that common in IF games as most authors just want vampire romance or supernatural/superhero college or werewolf humping.
Brutal and detailed fight scenes, sure in 6 chapters there was only 2 fight scenes but the ones that we got was pretty good, it definitely had “The Boys” level of brutality and the details were both gory but interesting as it wasn’t that hard to follow or visualize. Shoutout to Homelander and Soldier Boy my childhood icons who MC and Ash would probably like.
Linear story but your choices do matter, I appreciate the fact that this story is like a novel in that its pretty linear but your few choices actually matter in shaping your future goals and even your viewpoint on being a violent killer or not. You can even influence the ROs in their viewpoint and shape their future. This is something that is rarely ever done in IF stories as most characters just listen to the MC. Only other game to do this is FH so massive props on the this point.
Bonus points to the Diverse ROIs and their fantastic AI art.
Overall the story is pretty interesting and the idea is pretty good, a classic revenge story that most IF stories haven’t done for some reason with a good idea but a less than great execution due to slow pacing issues, lack of conflict, lack of trauma, OP MC, lack of drama, lack of thrill and too many characters who are allies instead of enemies.
While I do appreciate playing a game where I am a real life Andrew Tate at the age of 20 driving a Bugatti with anime powers and seducing hot girls while wearing a Gucci suit I asked my self? Hmm is this a story or a fanfiction? why is everything super easy and everyone likes me even though I’m just a rich kid who hasn’t done anything? Then it popped into my head, my MC is a real life Mary Sue…
Overall I want to see how the story ends because even though I wouldn’t call it great its still pretty good, keep up the great work.
I’m glad you’re enjoying my ROs!
jk jk. I think Ash is a bit more chill towards Skylar if MC doesn’t flirt with Skylar. 
It would be a massive headache to your MC before everything comes crashing down 
It won’t really change anything because Luka and Grandpa are already accepting of MC’s choices anyway. So, hiding them from them wouldn’t really matter since they’ll still support MC. Plus, as comradelenin says, in coding standpoint, it’s too much to do for a choice that ends up the same anyway.
Yeah, I’ve been trying to hunt down all of these pronoun bugs, but a few still manages to slip through every time 
A strong enough haemokinetic can do some amazing stuff with their blood, but they’ll also need to consume blood to “replenish”. But they can walk under the sun just fine 
But then, they’ll be pretty easy to kill by pyrokinetics like Ash.
In a certain RO route…
So, I can’t say for sure yet 
But thanks for letting me know! I didn’t expect Luka’s relationship to get to 100 so soon 
I’ll get it fixed by next update 
I don’t really wanna lose the momentum by keep coming to the previous chapters and make too many changes when I could have focused on the next chapter/update instead.
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I’d love to hear what you guys think of the story!
