Hmm… 700th comment. 
Anyways, I got an error when I picked Form after signing the contract in Unit Beta.
line 631: It is illegal to fall out of a *choice statement; you must *goto or *finish before the end of the indented block.
I think I fixed most of the errors some choices don’t work yet so if it has [To be done] on the end don’t choose it.
Looking at the code on my phone via dropbox looks weird but seems like it needs to be refined. some choices go nowhere will fix tonight.
Let me know if you find anymore errors.
Same choices as before and got a different error this time when picking Form.
line 630: increasing indent not allowed, expected 4 was 5
Should be fixed now.
Added the option to restart an episode if you die (hopefully it works) Now continuing episode two.
http://nocturnalstillness.com/site/?page_id=179
EDIT: avoid the demo my attempt at a save system resets your stats at the start of episode one still working on it.
just reading the op, this sounds like it has a really great potential as a story nocturnal. 
edit: going to play the last link you posted. by the way, i took your advice and posted up a topic.
I’ve removed the save system currently so the demo can be played.
Wasn’t sure if you knew that trying to restart episode 1 after being killed also results in an error.
@_jI
Thanks I’ve fixed the error. I removed most of the restart episode choices but left some in the beta path! Thanks for letting me know
@Nocturnal_Stillness no problem man. glad i could help. what i was going to suggest is that perhaps you could cut down on the text. there are a few places where there are some walls of text which i think could be broken down quite nicely with some choices conveniently placed throughout or between.
to give you an example of what i mean, instead of being given a lecture about werewolves/vampires/zombies, perhaps you could read a book. by breaking each paragraph into pages, you can have a turn the page option at the end or even let the player take a break from reading and do some activity. maybe what he does could affect stats (eating, reading, watching tv, playing games etc) in some way. i think it just breaks the wall down into easier to read sizes.
there were a few spelling mistakes but nothing glaring. the one i can remember (having chosen werewolves) was that the plural was written incorrectly (i believe) as werewolfs or werewolf’s but i don’t think it’s a huge issue and honestly, it can probably just be polished once you’re done with the whole thing which i’ve found pretty captivating so far.
hope that helped.
Yeah I intend to add a few more page breaks just trying to find the best places for them.
Where did I put ‘werewolfs’ or ‘werewolf’s’ can you remember?
Edit: found it error was caused by my coding. it works with vampire(s) and zombie(s) but didn’t spot it went werewolf(s) thanks for spotting it.
@Nocturnal_Stillness cool. oh, they were in the library, i’m pretty sure. where you’re looking for more books on werewolves.
Its easy to fix anyway.
So how far does the game go right now?
Last update alpha path went to a house full of animators then 1-3 choices after that.
Been trying to sort the save system out
If anyone spots a typo or thinks a choice lacks an option please let me know because as soon as the save function is working I’ll finish episode 2 and also intend to add a few non-death end scenes in the pilot.
The save system seems to be working now will work on finishing episode 2 tonight.
The save system is up and running, the last mission for alpha/beta has been removed as you get drafted into gamma different.
The game goes up until your first case choice of gamma but no further. Had a rather unproductive day but you do get to choose if you get someone from alpha/beta into gamma with you (currently only 1 from beta but will be adding another character soon)
latest link: http://nocturnalstillness.com/site/?page_id=179
@Nocturnal_Stillness
Got to work finaly, nice job with finding the book. It seems in the conversations you do not identyify who is speaking, for the most part not a problem. However there was a time or two I had to reread to clairify who said what. I also hit an error line 1662 bad label weaponstest1.
error fixed!
in regards to the conversation I normally say who is speaking at the start then go back and forth without saying it. I can add them thats no problem.