Yessss, I think I like the idea of losing control… It still does what you tell it to do but much more over the top. I like it makes the MC feel like a monster. Can we have a point in time when we black out and do an “Ichigo” and have to fight a darker Ren for control of the shade while in the outside world our shade controls the body and rip everything to shreds?
Don’t forget he’s getting a bankai finally…
Awww… I kinda didn’t want him to get a bankai. He just seemed like that type of character who didn’t need it.
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It’ll be interesting what kind of shikai and bankai he gets.
I’d put an answer to ‘dark ren’ but be spoilers!
He apparently already has a shikai @Nocturnal_Stillness something or other about how OP he is so his sword can’t help but be in shikai which makes no sense bc he never met his zanpaktou in the first place but whatever.
‘Dark Ren?’ Might be a spoiler… I wonder what tragedy will befall my MC?
There is already a lose control “ending” if you reveal you are a monster with high enough form and choose to take revenge.
But I would always imagine my MC once turning into a monster for a brief moment (Like Alice’s Hysteria in Madness returns)
There will be more just saying there is an early ending where your powers go crazy lol
Not a proper update but Episode Six now goes upto the first draft of the ritual.
If I’m honest I’m not happy with it, so hopefully your comments can help me hammer out something more ‘acceptable’ I’ll never be 100% happy but no-one will ever be about their own writing lol
link for the new page:
https://dl.dropbox.com/u/82599458/Unnatural/Season%20One/web/mygame/index.html
Also a bit off-topic but on-topic if you’re enjoying my writing, here is a link to some of my earlier writing,
Error STILL not fixed.
oh well I can live with it for now.
It’s annoying though
Yes, NS, shade responding to the subconscious seems quite appropriate.
When I got to the very end of Lakota describing the ritual I got an error, were we supposed to be able to get to the ritual?
Hello,
I don’t know if you know about this particular bug or not but in Chapter Six, The Last Day, my character asks Lakota questions concerning the ritual. After getting the answer for the last question the error:
line133: No selectable options
Hope this helps.
Is there any chance we could be a hybrid of shade and azure? Shade powers are de-Bauss but wings are awesooooooome is there any chance of a really rare situation where you can go hybrid as what I’d like to call an “Evil Angel”?
Evil angel? No no no, angel of darkness!
There’s really no reason why the MC can’t make wings with form, and I for one would suggest tentacle wings like in Diablo, so you can smack people around and have both hands free. 
Or maybe just shard-like wings with a shadowy membrane that extends or retracts between the shards. Besides @stsword you already have form which pretty much can do exactly what Pride (from FmaB) does with the shadows.
When you choose to have your family killed by a werewolf, in unit alpha if you choose to kill the werewolf boy, when choosing whether you felt bad or not, perhaps add the option that you did it out of revenge for your family.