Twenty One (WIP) Updated 6/25/2022

Darn I want that cake :pensive: I’m super intrigued by this premise! How did my poor MC end up like this?

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THE CAKE IS A LIE!!! (Portal):yum:

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Some day the cake shall come (hopefully) Thank you for the kind words! Hopefully, MC makes it out alright :^)

The cake is a lie :: Snickers :: and I fully expect the mc to snap and going out in blaze of glory hopefully against the powers that be that forced this situation :smiley:

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Alright, so an update! I have finished and uploaded half of chapter 2. For people that have already read the demo with Chapter 1, I suggest just waiting for Chapter 2’s completion, this is just news for the newer readers.

Also, I have read the poll on the option of ROs and I am wondering when usually it’s best of incorporating “flirting” options into the story. I was thinking maybe potentially starting at Chapter 3. However, the story is planned to take over the span of only 5 days. So would it still be alright for RO’s to exist (might feel rushed)? If anyone has a workaround or solution for this situation, I’m open to suggestions.

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Hmm could be tricky if it was a longer time frame would be easier or multiple games with the same people but lasting only five days total? Not entirely sure I would go with ro’s myself
case in point the one mc I started up currently has no desire to be around any of them and just wants to survive long enough to get the heck out of the situation. Just some quick food for thought since I’m on limited time at the moment lol will try to give more thought later on.

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I think it mostly comes down to if you think making the chars ROs adds anything to the story. Since the story only covers 5 days I don’t think anyone would be expecting a full blown romance, so maybe just adding flirting as more of a flavour text thing rather than something that completely changes ones relationship to a certain character would be enough? Or maybe it just changes some scenes a bit to show there’s some interest there? Well either way, whatever you decide doing should be fine as long as you don’t feel as if you are forcing anything in the story.

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Ooo I see. I agree with this sentiment. I will have to ponder on this. Thank you for providing your MC’s thoughts on how they view the situation, it’s always good to gain new insight!

I appreciate this comment, it’s very validating. Ngl I felt pressured to include RO’s simply it was the norm in COG type games. I’m not opposed to it, but for this type of story I do like the flavor text approach rather than a full blown relationship. :thinking:

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Hello everybody!
I am happy to announce that Chapter 2 is here! I believe the prologue, Chapter 1, and Chapter 2, it should solidify the premise of the story. Chapter 2 will contain some skill checks (Hopefully I didn’t make them too difficult) Also, chapter 2 will introduce a new mechanic involving a certain individual. I would like to hear your thoughts on this mechanic. (Alter Ego)

Throughout the story, I tried to sprinkle in hints about the magic system of the world. I tried to not do an info dump for readers, thus I only gave small pieces of dialogue pertaining to “Contracts”. Please let me know if the overall magic system was easy to figure out.

Also, I would like feedback in terms of characters, plot, and pacing. I’m curious to hear everyone’s thoughts on these three main parts. If there is anything that you wished was elaborated more, I am willing to listen so I may potentially answer them in future chapters. Thank you for taking the time to read this and I hope you enjoy it!

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Heyo everyone,
So turns out a lot of life stuff happened, so I haven’t been able to work on Twenty One at all, but now I should have more free time to work on it, basically I’m saying chapters 3+4 are delayed :smiling_face_with_tear: I hope everyone can understand

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