Twenty One (WIP) Updated 6/25/2022

This is my first ChoiceScript Game!

Title: Twenty-One
Genre: Action, Supernatural, Modern-Fantasy
Synopsis: Your life is no longer yours. But that doesn’t mean you can’t stop living. A new world outside your own lays before you. You find yourself to be one of the top agents of an organization in charge of eliminating demons and devils. The final battle draws near. Will you be a savior? Or will you perish?

I’m not sure how consistent when I’ll update this, but currently, there’s an estimate of 35k words excluding commands. Currently, at a prologue, Chapter 1, and half of Chapter 2.

I am curious to hear people’s thoughts on this type of story!

To play the demo, go here: https://dashingdon.com/go/11256

EDIT: I added some personality stats, so internal thoughts will have an effect on these stats!
EDIT: Half of chapter 2 has been added!
EDIT: Chapter 2 has been finished! (6/25/2022)
*Feedback about characters, plot, and pacing would be greatly appreciated!

Summary with Spoilers

You find yourself in what you believe to be the afterlife. However, a man and woman are in the same supposed afterlife with you. They guide you to cross over a door alone, where you will endure trials and tribulations. Once you cross over, you find yourself in a different body that is not yours. Apparently, you’re in a modern world setting where a war against demons is raging against a secret organization. A prophecy told a Chosen One would defeat the demons and close the gates of Hell. It turns out, you’re in the body of the Chosen One and the final battle is in a week! You must use your wits, fragmented memories of the Chosen One, and a special gift from that man and woman in order to succeed. Also, you must avoid suspicion from your comrades and even the Chosen One’s evil alter ego! Can you close the gates of Hell in this adventure!

Content Warning

-Mention of death
-Mention of gore/violence

Features

-Try to avoid suspicion in this world
-Slay demons and devils
-Try to control your evil half
-Defeat the King of Devils
-Save the world

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Super excited for this! love the demo so far

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Maybe this is still just the char gen phase, but the abundance of illusion-of-choice choices is rather odd. There are a lot of choices that don’t actually do anything at all, and even more bizarrely, mandatory choice sets for which every choice does exactly the same thing. The latter half does have actual choices that increase various skills – but they’re also not really choices, because there are no skill tests. At least not so far, but it’s early on.

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Ohh I seeeee. Most likely, I’m going to implement later on certain stats, such as (Optimist vs. Pessimist) or (Sarcastic vs. Serious) so these choices will fluctuate that! :^D

@geldar

Sorry if I double messaged you, this is my first time replying to someone!

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Thank you!

Did a quick playthrough it’s got some work to be done but your story has potential so I shall be keeping a eye on your progress. :smiley:

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Thank you! I really appreciate you taking the time to read it! I’ll do my best :smile:

I’ll need more to properly judge, but the choices don’t really feel like choices. Hopefully that’s temporary

Just wanna say I really enjoyed this, I hope you end up going full ‘Mc’ with Humanity’s last hope. Love the idea of a regular guy having to act as the main character eg: soloing enemies, killing bosses all the while he wants to piss himself in fear.

Also, loved that ‘Go see my dog in heaven. Wait’ joke that’s some good shit my dude

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@Sadisticshades This comment made my day! Thank you for the kind words, it really pushes me to work harder :grin:

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This Wip’s premise is interesting, i liked trying to act cool while being super scared inside lol, looking forward to future updates dear author, and thanks for making this wip, cheers!:+1:

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Are you supposed to meet the tall blonde man no matter which corridor you decide to go down? Because right now choosing between left or right makes no difference.

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Seems pretty good please add more

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Fixed! Going right should lead you to Anja now. Thank you for telling me!

Thank you for the kind words! Hopefully I can upload within the next couple of weeks. Also, will try to have a save feature soon!

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Dude the demo is truly 10/10, but there is something that im wandering, is what happend to thesuper big shoot before we got stranded in them lmao i want to hope that they are just relaxing in some other world or something, and NOT that they just had a truly gruesome fate like ego death or that they soul just got eaten or worse.

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Maybe they bailed out and we’re the replacement

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:eyes:! Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed the demo, we shall see the truth of everything soon enough .3.

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Hello Everyone,
The current plan is to release Chapters 2 and 3 this month. However, chapter 3 will only cover half of Tuesday in the story, so I was wondering if I should hold off and finish chapter 4 before updating the demo. Also, I would like to know if people would be interested in having RO options in the story.

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I would say if chapter four finishes where you left off in chapter three then save those two updates for one update in of themselves and go-ahead put out chapter two before hand. As to the ro option question lol I’m pretty sure for a lot of people they would like having options most of the time. :smiley:

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Ooo, I think I shall do that then! Thank you for the feedback, also you’re right about the RO thing I already see it in the poll :joy:

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