Okay, folks, I have been hard at work both squashing bugs in the code and expanding some scenes in the first chapter to flesh them out. I have also, as you can maybe see, mocked up a primitive title banner (and corresponding chapter banners) that will appear in the next version of the demo. I intend to upload a new version of the demo once I’ve completed the additional scenes. Since I’m still assessing how many of them I’ll need (at least two scenes with the royal consort, for example), I can’t give an exact date just now.
Before I get to the personal responses, I just want to say thank you to everyone who replied, liked, and clicked my little WIP thread. I’ve been overwhelmed by the positive response to this story and I can’t say enough how much I appreciate it.
- The term ‘Noni’ is one of my own invention. There are a few terms for nonbinary family members that are in semi-common use, but since there is no consensus I felt comfortable creating my own. Especially as I’m trying to construct a narrative of a world where nonbinary gender is commonplace and accepted. I am hesitant to italicize it, because that would create the impression that it’s a foreign word, which I feel would disrupt the immersion. I will try to rephrase the term’s first appearances, to make it more clear that it’s a term of endearment for a parent, analogous to Mama/Papa and the like.
- On the subject of the MC’s ruthlessness and compassion, I am aiming for these to be relative terms, which means I need to work harder to establish the baseline against which the MC measures their own compassion. I hope adding some more descriptions of King Orust and his reign will help with this.
- The subject of the Royal Consort and their reaction to the conflict between their husband and the MC will definitely come up, and sooner rather than later.
- Ha! This is what I get for copying code from the wiki without editing it. Bad programmer, no cookie. I have removed the option to return to the game through the bottom menu. The standard CG menu should work as normal in the new version.
- This is a bug to do with the command that ends the chapter. I am going to have to do some more testing and consult external sources, but I’m on it. No worries.
- I knew it would be a polarizing choice so I’m glad to see someone is enjoying Suthis’s native aristocratic arrogance, and generally supervillain-like flair for the dramatic.
- Regarding Lux, their gender is determined as being the opposite binary gender as the MC, for plot reasons. For the nonbinary MC there is a selection screen. I do have another character held in reserve, which is introduced would be the opposite binary gender of Lux… I have not yet decided whether or when to add them in. But yes, Lux would likely be tolerant of the Monarch taking lovers, and when the subject of heirs comes up you’ll find that adoption is acceptable as well. I dread the heirs conversation because it will be a coding miasma… but I hope it will satisfy readers somewhat.
- As a side note, currently the story is not planned to extend deep into the years of their reign/marriage, so the subject of the Monarch’s lovers is entirely up to your imagination.
- Neither Lux (Tamirah/Teven) nor Kidia (the secret heir) are strictly ROs, because they don’t have proper, full-length romance arcs. However, if you choose to marry one of them, there will be a small amount of optional romantic content. Once again, this is not planned to be a full romance arc. There are no ROs.
- Thank you for the detailed feedback! You gave a very helpful response. I really appreciate it.
- I am specifically looking at smoothing down some of the transitions between scenes, and removing some placeholder lines that remain from when the first chapter was an outline. As I said above, there are also several scenes I’m adding, specifically to give a better idea of the relationships and dynamics of the Suthis royal family.
- I also intend to explicate the timeline more, which should help explain why things are moving so quickly, and hopefully make the transitions seem less abrupt.
- I am very glad you enjoy the character of Kidia, I find them a little difficult to get just right. Brash and impulsive, but not foolish. It’s a delicate balance.
- If the alliance goes through, you’ll see a lot more of that relationship in chapter two.
- Thank you for commenting. I’m really glad you enjoyed the game, although for fans of Game of Thrones I’m afraid it might not be bloody enough… Only very little murder, really.