Ah, thanks you for the information
I’m a little confused on how the it determines the two friendship choices in the new update. Is it random or determined by previous choices?
you mean near the end, with the faction?
Yes the one related to your “extracellular activity” that the dean gives you.
the choices are basically related to the faction leah for example is with the scientist, the third choice is disabled though if you date them, exception the royal and the biker, since you don’t date them at that point
Ah thx, ya had Leah as RO and went science but only had Raven and Frey as choices. But with a different play throught raven was the RO with Leah and Frey choices.
thats the gist of it
Is it impossible right now to continue F’s path? It seems game doesn’t register that I went with them to the party and I can’t get the scene when you are helping them with their exam revision.
It should be fixed now
Leah may still hold good enough relations with Hospur to divulge anything Leah learns about S.T.E.M.,
That sentence is a bit awkward…
“Not if you give up now! *she’s just guarded! I’m sure if you take some time–”
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"Emma’s face contorts with worry, and you see her glance back to the two fearful looking students. Her find some form of resolve, and her face holds a little more conviction, “I…I won’t let you! You’re just being a bully now!”
Unneeded quotation mark
. *she almost pushes you down into the water, and the two of you get into a slight struggle as you attempt to calm the redhead.
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*she seems to have planned this future in rigorous detail.
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Your self-designated *fiancée concludes the tour by turning to you, contentment across her face, “It’s everything I’ve ever wanted.”
My stomach feels like its been folded in half, “I think I’m…*gunna be sick…”
Were those on purpose?
Somehow the playthrough where I sided with Raven and murder a person wound up with less evil than when I was a jerk in my first
I fixed the majority of these! Thank you for the feedback!
Too you, your parents were no different, although Emma chastised you for your inconsideration.
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Got it! Thank you again for your continued feedback to make Triaina Academy more polished
Heya everyone. So I’ve been fairly disregarding of this forum page (I apologize about that) but I want to attempt to keep everyone on the same page regarding the book. So for those of you not on my tumblr page, I’ll also release the author notes of what I’m working on here from now on, as much as I can haha.
Progress Report #1
Heya all! So, the next iteration of “What the hell has Leo been up to with this book?” Well, I’ve been working on Chapter 5, which features the referenced upcoming tournament between dorms. Along with providing you the ability to see how your powers have progressed and changed, incorporating your specializations, there is one other major addition: The introduction of two new dorms, and ten side-characters who will be recurring throughout each RO’s romance route. These are the dorms:
Dorm Card
Team Leader: Joker Card.
Members: Acer, Rex, Juno Winter, Uno.
Dorm Gold
Team Leader: Vale Wunderkind.
Members: Treyla Wunderkind, Princilia Crown, Lewis Gear, Gaul von Sentinel.
Look forward to meeting them soon! As a disclaimer, none are ROs
I only need raven …but I’m excited to buy the final version. And thank you for your hard work and dedication. Can’t wait to see this come out
You’d go mad if you tried adding any more ROs.
ok ill take everyone else.
MWAHAHAHAHA!
So I finished my first playthrough of the game, so here are my thoughts.
I’ll go with the good things first because we seriously need more optimism at the moment.
1.) The concept. I’m not too fond of romance stories but the war-torn setting is very unique and immediately makes it stand out amongst the other romance stories. I just feel like the whole war wasn’t well developed though because I am quite a sucker for good world-building.
2.) The writing. So far, the descriptions and dialogue are usually on point, they’re usually decent or average at worst. Although there a few missing quotation marks and all that, the descriptions are detailed but not overwhelming, and the dialogue suits the characters.
The story is also looking good so far and the most of the choices feel like they matter. Keep it up.
Alright, those are my commendations. However, I have one criticism.
The characters.
Whenever I look at the characters, I can’t help but think “Hey I feel like I saw this person before.” Most of the characters feel like a rehash of certain character archetype. This isn’t an inherently bad thing, but the problem is that most of them don’t do anything to make themselves stand out. Of course, this may be invalid because you may be developing themas I write this, but this is something to take note of while you write your story.
Emil/Emma and Ren/Robin are rather decent characters though. Emil/Emma make themselves stand out of the “energetic younger sibling archetype” because they’re literally the sibling of the player. Ren/Robin, while I don’t like them, the whole gambler aspect makes them somewhat unique and they do have some potential.
The two worst offenders to me are Vee, Raven and Levi (I haven’t played through the game to set them to different genders.) Levi and Vee don’t do anything and feel completely forgetable, plain and simple. Raven feels completely out of place and look like they’re just in the story purely for fanservice. I’m sorry if this segment sounded a bit harsh.
Again, you may be developing these characters further as you write, but I seriously hope for these characters to be improved. You don’t have to rework their meeting scenes or anything, you can just develop them more in future interactions.
I wish you well, and good luck with your story. Godspeed.
Thank you for playing through! You share a great criticism, and one I certainly already hold close to heart.
Granted, this is how they were originally designed, conceptually haha.
An interesting choice. I would personally see these two as primary offenders of your critique. Blond haired socialite fond of card games and younger energetic altruistic sibling haha.
Rest assured, I intentionally lean into the character archetypes at first, but each character will develop with significant detail along their route, and on their respective paths. I will also do tweaks of the beginning parts of the game as I go along too, so perhaps it will give me some opportunities to set a character detail apart haha.
I also thank you for your commendations!
Sometimes it is great to have eyes on the outside so to speak, although I can reasonably suspect those who don’t enjoy romance stories will most likely find fault in this game no matter the setting its in haha. In regards to the setting as well, I am happy to see you find it interesting. Right now it is much like a standoff ‘cold-war’ situation, so there are not many developments on the home front, but assuredly it is being incorporated in its own way haha.
This tells me there is room for improvement, and rest assured I am planning on ways to improve
Thank you again for taking the time out of your day to give me this feedback. As I said before, I will certainly ingrain it in my heart while I continue paving out the journey that is to come within this story haha.
Progress Report #2
Hello everyone! I wanted to let you all know you’re great, and I love you all Another thing I wanted to let everyone in on is the fact I’ve made some progress, and specifically that I’ve finished the first round of fights in the tournament and am in the process of crafting small scenes with path variations for each RO! I look forward to presenting them to you haha. I’ve currently finished E and R and am working on L now.
Ya might be wondering why the reports are so close together! Unfortunately it’s not because I’m fast at writing haha, I was just severely delayed in informing the forum on the last one. This is up to date information!