Trails Lead Home [Major Overhaul: 12/8/18 & Updated 12/11/18] [Now with a tumblr]

young-adult-fiction
nonbinary-inclusive
gender-choice
high-fantasy

#1

Overview

  • Trails Lead Home is a high-fantasy ‘game’ with various social elements interwoven to try and create a different experience. rather than focusing on just skill building, you have to build relationships [platonic or otherwise] with various characters and ROs. Player choices will matter and affect the world, mysteries and side quests will be added for you to solve, and there will be various endings that depend on the relationships and choices you make or break throughout the game.

Current Content

  • Five romance options; two monogamist [female, male and gender-selected], and one polygamist [male and gender-neutral]
  • Around 63k words [Introduction and part of chapter 1]
  • Ambiguous MC appearance for now
  • Hopefully interesting characters

Warnings

  • Please be aware that starting fights and ripping on one another is not helpful to anyone [not me and certainly not you]. Constructive criticism is welcome but let’s keep everything friendly and polite!

  • Let’s be open minded about various issues and topics to avoid offending one another.

  • Biological Issues with various species for now; please ignore this for the time being–

  • Updates will be slow and/or posted at strange times due to school, work, and other irl commitments.

Romance Options

  • There are currently four romance options, one is a poly between two characters in an established relationship, another is a female romance and the final is a male [bare with me, there will probably be more on the way.

  • Hollond and Galeon - Your poly romance option! They’ve been together for quite a long time but have yet to actually “tie the knot”. Hollond is the more abrupt, rude, and sly of the two while Galeon is the more serious, gentle, and caring of the duo. Both love one another deeply, but they might just be willing to allow a third in their strange relationship… Maybe that will be the MC? [This route may have trigger warnings]

  • Nanami - Monogamist female character who can be romanced by any gender – Previously depicted as overly bubbly and quick to befriend the MC, she is now much more cautious but no less caring. She hopes to befriend the MC and help them return home, but maybe she’ll start to feel differently about the whole situation?

  • The Unknown Male RO - Yes, he’s a mystery [because I’m still developing him] but right off the bat, he’s a bit shy and slow to warming up to affection. Taken by surprise at being forced to join the MC’s adventure back home, he slowly begins to open up to the MC and crew about his background and strange aversion to affection. [This route may have trigger warnings]

  • Finlay - Finlay’s gender is chosen by the reader/MC when they first meet them, they are hot headed, quick to fight, and get along pretty well with Galeon despite all of this. You kinda have to wonder why?

Updates and Fixes

– Fixed a mention of Stockholm syndrome that wasn’t meant to be left in there.
– Fixed broken save plugin.
– Fixed a pronoun mistake where an instance mentions a non-binary character as a ‘he’ rather than a they also a spelling error I had overlooked when referring to ‘the lady’.
– Added more to chapter 1 [Not spell checked]

Links

  • Demo - Here’s the most recent demo. Some of the end is rushed and will be fixed in the next update but do let me know what you think so far!
  • Tumblr - Feel free to ask about the game, characters, or story over here. I’ll try to answer any questions you have!

#2

Hmmm… in one of the choice, selecting still fond of the uncle had been branded as "Stockholm Syndrom " , which i feel weird… :slight_smile:

I had thought the uncle had been harsh … but he did raise the MC and assuming taking care of the basic needs , although he may not be the best of person … but i am wondering why it was consider a Stockholm Syndrome when MC was perhaps grateful for his willingness of taking care of him/her :slight_smile:


#3

omg did I leave that in there??

Well anyways, my point of view at the time was to explore more about the history that differs between the choices. This was going to be a dark path that I had changed [but apparently forgot to completely remove], I apologize for making you feel weird!

But that choice would have lead to a series of flashbacks that mostly centered around MC being mistreated by their uncle but at the time being blind to how he was treating them. They relied on him, he fed, clothed, and gave them a home so they relied on him and felt that by staying with him they were safe.

They would soon realize when they were older [present day] that what he was doing to them and their rather neutral/warm response to his actions were not okay. In my research [I’m doing more as we speak] Stockholm syndrome is typically cause when the victim is forced to rely on their captor for food and such which lures them into a false sense of friendship/affection/love – IE what was going to be shown in the MC’s flashback that was very much scraped.

I also wouldn’t call it willingness per say-- It’s kind of hard to explain without spoilers but the uncle took MC in because of their mother and her very specific ties to someone and some things during her lifetime. With her gone, it all falls to the MC [who is young and vulnerable] and the Uncle steps up to ‘take care’ of them. It wasn’t super thought out so I wouldn’t worry too much about that.

But anyways, I’ll fix that! Sorry!

EDIT: All fixed! Thank you for catching that! :slight_smile:


#4

You are welcome :slight_smile:

The setting of the story is interesting , especially a high fantasy background :-):grinning:

By the way, it was also mention by Jules that Ingrid was our only friend when small… hence i think there should be more flashback about our childhood friendship right ? And to think that MC shy away from her , but she still remember us warmly is sweet :-):blush:

Is Ingrid a major character? I suppose she could be our faithful friend ? :slight_smile:


#5

Flashbacks will definitely feature Ingrid [are these spoilers? ah well] and as for a major character… You’ll have to wait and see!

buuuut~ if anyone asks… she’s a very major character! :stuck_out_tongue: but you didn’t hear that from me-- :wink:


#6

Oh… alright no problem :-):grin:

I am always fond of childhood friendship :-):stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:

And when Ingrid pass me those candies and told me it will heal anything… i actually consider the possibility since this is high fantasy… perhaps she is a fairy or something ? :-):sweat_smile:

Anyway… definitely looking forward to read more of your first interactive fiction :slight_smile:


#7

I remember reading the previous version of this story before the hiatus. Welcome back!

I have a question, how much of a personality is defined for the MC? For example, there are only two options in response to the siblings’ taunt about mother – punch both of them, or do nothing. I would like a middle ground, i.e. an option to make a (possibly sarcastic) verbal retort without resorting to outright violence or hostility; just enough to put them in their place.

Speaking of which, as interesting as the premise is, there are only very few choices to make compared to the amount of text. I’m hoping that is going to change as the story progresses and with further updates, otherwise it causes some people (including me) to kind of lose immersion, and feel detached from the world and the MC.

Good luck!


#8

May I suggest page_breaks or line_breaks. It makes me feel tedious or perhaps that’s just me.


#9

@soprano

Oh heavens, thank you for the welcome back!

And regarding responses by the mc, the player will define much of the MC’s personality [but this is just an outline for now]. I am going to go back and add a peaceful [but sarcastic] response for the player to choose. There will be more choices going forward [and more going back when I get around to it tomorrow].

Thank you for reading! I’ll try and add more options and peaceful but sassy options in the future! :slight_smile:

EDIT: I’ve added a peaceful sarcastic option [though still kinda verbally malicious if I have to be honest-- oops!] I’ll be re-writing it again as I don’t like how it turned out but it’s an option for now. I hope it better suits your MC’s situation? If not let me know and I’ll happily give it another go! :smiley:

@Bathala - I already have a lot of page breaks, but I’ll definitely add more! I suppose the paragraphs are a bit long and there are too many of them per ‘page’. :sweat_smile:

EDIT: I’ve quickly realized my page_breaks didn’t seem to work so everything ended up being WAY longer than it should have been! I apologize for that!


#10

That’s actually perfect, thank you! Glad to hear you’ll be adding more choices from here onwards, can’t wait to see where it goes.

Oh, the save system doesn’t work now for some reason.

It shows this error:

Another (very) minor issue:

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I don’t think we should see the ‘sm_init mygame’ thing in the very first line.


#11

ahh, I know why the saves won’t work. That sm_init is the save code but I forget that I have to re-code it when I change things. Lemme do that real quick for ya!

EDIT: all fixed! I’ll have to start writing reminders to myself to re-code it in the future so people’s saves don’t fail. Thank you for letting me know!


#12

Very interesting, I will be definitely watching this and looking forward to more updates.


#13

A lot of text with only a few choices


#14

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This is a common issue that I see with certain stories on here. If you’ve already chosen a gender for a character, that character should stick to that gender. There was no way to know that Holland was a guy until the pronoun ‘he’ came up. The entire introduction was ‘them/their’ which makes it entirely confusing. If a character is a male it should be ‘he turned his head left’ and vice versa for females. Only if a character is undefined then those ‘them/their’ pronouns would be appropriate, but not if the character already has a decided gender.


#15

Yes, I am aware that one should stick with a singular gender. Please be aware that the he/him/his pronouns tend to slip in by accident via my spell check [which hates they/them being in certain places some times] and clumsy fingers and not because I’ve purposefully changed my character mid-way through a chapter.

Hollond has been determined as non-binary for quite a while [they are an old, personal and beloved character of mine] and is not male despite what a few mistakes call them. Like I’ve stated before it was not on purpose and I appreciate you catching those, but do remember in the future that I wasn’t trying to change their gender and that maybe it was a mistake rather than a conscious action especially if you’ve only found [what i assume is] one gender mistake in the story. However, if you find more of those do let me know! :slight_smile:

– And thank you for reading the story!


#16

I wasn’t trying to be rude :sweat_smile: other than the pronoun complication, I think your story’s really interesting.


#17

Oh heavens! I hope I wasn’t being too rude either and I didn’t mean to kinda yell at you [my quick jump to defend was pretty autopilot and harsh], I apologize! I really do appreciate you catching those [or any more you may see] and for choosing to read my story! :smiley:


#18

//Pardon my double post, I don’t remember if this is allowed or not on the forums. I apologize if not–

Story Updates
Chapter one has been updated but not completed. There are more choices for you to make in the newest sections of the chapter and you get to meet a new character!

warnings;
– Was not spellchecked, so there are probably errors galore [please let me know so I can fix them]

– There are food related questions in the newest update and one refers to tofu. Obviously it isn’t correct but it will probably change in the next update.

– I [personally] am not happy with the update so I may re-write it if I have time otherwise it’s kinda stuck as it is. So sorry in advance for the shoddy writing in this update.

– Rewrote the scene with At’Ora [also gave her a slight name change unless I’m mistaken] to reflect whatever personality you build up. There are four [?] aggressive responses and [4] passive responses. Based on your previous choices you will only get to choose either from the aggressive responses or passive responses but they, themselves, also have less aggressive or more aggressive responses within them.

– The ending is abrupt but that’s for a very good reason, so potential spoilers for the end; What questions would you like the MC to ask Hollond and the newest character? I have some basic questions I’ll add but is there anything that you’d be interested in hearing the MC ask them?

Tumblr Updates
Added a character page [still missing some characters, I’ve only got Hollond and Galeon on there but Nanami and Finlay are next], and have an ‘About Trails’ page that you can view.

Asks are also open if you’d like to send one in, otherwise there isn’t much else don to the tumblr. :slight_smile: