To the Whistling Winds (WIP) [UPDATED 08/04/2020]

Hi, thank you so much for your feedback!

I really appreciate you pointing this out, as I myself have been hem and hawing over the “chapter 1.5” (aka the chapter with all the errands). I think it adds elements that I want to continue on later, but I also know it slows down the pace of the story a lot, and I can understand when you say that it feels like the Fae elements haven’t really shown up.

I think I’ll leave it in the demo for now, but it might be cut (and used for parts lol) after Chapter 3 is uploaded. At the end of the day, I don’t want my readers to be bored by a chapter, so I want to see if I can make it flow better. Again, thank you for pointing this out. It really helps.

And thank you so much for your kind words in regards to my writing style! I hope you continue to enjoy my game as I update, and please keep me informed about your thoughts on my pacing.

(Edit, as I just saw your other question):

Some of the choices you make in regards to your MC’s personality will effect future gameplay for sure. Stuff like your dream job, clothing, etc won’t affect anything beyond flavor text, but your MC’s personality and skills do change based on their choices.

Hope that answers your question!

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I really like the slow pacing of this, and the whole seemingly average normal atmosphere of the game makes the strange and magical things that more interesting. Also, if we choose to be a straight woman (picking the ‘ex boyfriends’ choice) will all the 6 ROs be male?

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None of the ROs are gender-flippable from what I’ve seen. So if you pick to play as a straight woman you’ll only be able to romance the male ROs and get locked out from romancing the female ROs.

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Hey, this is great! I almost forgot all about the fact that fairies would be involved LOL. This borders on slice-of-life, just you going about the motions until you can leave and go do something in your degree field haha. I’m very excited to get into the magic elements of the story :heart_eyes:

Once upon a time I also worked in an amusement park and this game has me both parts relieved I left and amused since I used to go though so many feelings the MC currently goes through while employed.

I can’t wait to see how the game continues!

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I just wanna know what happens when trying to climb into your window.

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@Yev
Thank you for your feedback too! I appreciate hearing both sides of slower pacing vs faster pacing, and I think I’ll wait and see how Chapter 3 goes before cutting anything. As @Fay said, if you play as a straight woman, you will have 3 RO options of the guys. The genders of the ROs do not change depending on the MC’s sexuality.

@Fay
Thanks for answering a question for me! :smiley:

@tandra88

I’m glad you liked my demo so far! I feel like that’s my favorite part of magical realism - sometimes you can even forget that there are magical elements involved. I’ll see if I need to change anything in future updates, but lulling the MC into a false sense of security is a part of my plan. :wink:

Aw, I’m glad you found it accurate! I myself have never worked in a park, although many of my friends currently do, and I’m trying to use them as sources. I hope you continue to enjoy the game as I update!

@Jordan_Kelley

If your MC has enough Athletics to climb the trellis, they realize that there’s no way for them to get in unless they break the window. If your MC doesn’t have high enough Athletics, they give up half way. Hope this helps!

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Hah!!:rofl::rofl:
Yep that helps!!

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Hi everyone! It’s been a busy couple of weeks for me, but I just wanted to thank everyone for 3K+ demo plays and nearly 300 likes! I’m always happy to see how people respond to my work, and I hope you all enjoy the next update!

The next update will contain Chapter 3, as well as refining the stats page. My current draft for the Chapter is 4.5k words, and I estimate its finished state will be 15k.

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08/04/20 UPDATE!

Hello! August is here, and with it, Chapter 3! This chapter is almost 10k in length, and of course, picks up where Chapter 2 left off. The size of the playable demo is now 41k.

MC has an interesting night, and we finally meet the last two ROs! (Teddy and Bridget are eternally patient with me.) Warning: this chapter contains thriller/supernatural horror aspects and mild violence. Nothing too drastic, though, but better safe than sorry.

Update includes
  • Chapter 3
  • Bug fixes, spacing errors, grammar stuff.
  • Relationship stat refining.
Links

Demo
Tumblr
Ko-fi
TTWW Discord Channel

What I’m looking for in terms of feedback:

  • Spelling errors, bug fixes, grammar improvement.
  • Thoughts on the chapter’s mood
  • Feedback on my writing style
  • Pacing
  • Anything else you feel like bringing up!

I hope you guys like the update! :slight_smile: (I’m going to go back to playing Fire Emblem now…)

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I’m so excited to play it!! Have fun with your FE! (Three Houses?)

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You’re using American dates right? Like August/fourth/2020 instead of fourth/August/2020

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Love what I’m reading! All the little details help just make it! The new chapter was fantastic, One thing I did notice though, after leaving the office after searching the desks and lockers there’s the line:
“You draw your true a little tighter around yourself”
Thought that might be a typo? Sorry I don’t know how to post screenshots of it.

Edit: The page where you choose to head north to Promenade Plaza or west to Olympus if that helps! :slight_smile:

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Oh gosh I loved the update! I specially liked the way you introduced the creature and the attack! And I really liked that the MC is freaked out that they actually recognize the people around them. Or the moment where they get their keys and just straight up faint. I actually laughed at that, just imagining the scene from the outside. This person who has just been attacked by SOMETHING (is it a harpy? I feel like it’s a harpy but I’m probably wrong lmao) simply stands up, grabs their keys, looks proud af, and then passes out. Loved it. Keep up the good work! :smiling_face_with_three_hearts::heart:

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Made me laugh too! Now I’m just picturing the MC after the attack when the others are staring at them just shaking their head slowly and blurting out “nope!” before keeling over. Also I just thought it was a really damn ugly faerie :face_with_hand_over_mouth:

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I cannot get enough of this WIP. Well done!

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Love this! I’m mid-playthrough, but I noticed this error(?) the last few times I played too.

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Thank you so much! Yes, I’m playing Three Houses - Blue Lions right now. Annette owns my heart. :heart: I hope you liked my demo! I’d love to know your thoughts.

Yes, all of my dates are listed Month/Date/Year.

@Autumn19
Thanks for catching that typo! I’m really glad you liked this chapter! :smiley: Your conversation with Ceres made me laugh, because that’s pretty much how it went. More about the winged creature will be explained in the next chapter, but it is fae.

@ceresvaldez
Thank you so much for leaving your feedback, it was great to see! ^^ Everyone that MC’s met so far has been a bit of a weirdo. Poor MC is going through a lot, and fainting after an adrenaline rush is definitely not making their day any better. (Imagine being Alejandro or another bystander watching MC keel over.) I’m happy to hear you liked this chapter!

Aw, thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it!

@syzygy
Thanks for catching that error! I’ll have it fixed in the next update. Hope you liked the rest of your play through. :slight_smile:

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Super excited about this update! I want to officially meet everyone!!! What a way to reunite or meet with ro’s! Fighting a monster and then passing out! Whew, my MC needs to be held until she feels better. I wonder who she’d want to do that…

Nice update! The banshee/fairy appearance and build up were a ton of fun to read. Really drove home that we were out alone at night in a big park. I also liked that the different paths in the office (lockers vs desks) would give different clues (and more mysteries).

Typo

Just had to say this about my new favorite plotline:

Spoiler

Noooo. Say it ain’t so. Has he not suffered enough? (It’s probably bad that I laughed at this but that’s what I did) :laughing: Truly, a man of many mishaps.

Really liking your take on the fae, especially the little lore crumbs we’ve been given so far. Hoping for more in the future!

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Hi Dankman! It’s nice to see you again. :smiley: Thanks for catching the typo, it should be fixed in the next update.

I’m glad you liked the update. I can’t lie, I love writing slice-of-life mundane chapters, but having the fae finally show up was a relief.

This is Mitchell’s story, fam. You’re just living in it.

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