“I want whoever funded all this, whoever called for the murder of my brother and whoever sent Steele in to impersonate a Marshal. Heck, I’ll even arrest the lion tamer.” Marshal James indicates. “Say, Julie is going to be burning a pot-roast tonight and I don’t want to have to eat it alone.”
In the options following that I can react to the pot-roast thing, but not to his off-hand comment about the lion tamer. I’d have liked the option to inquire about that and have him give one or two short sentences to that (“Didn’t you know? Regina has two pet lions” or something like that).
Talking to Julie about Simon, these two option are missing a disable reuse command:
“Would you be lonely without him?”
“Anything I can do to help?”
“That’d be a return to California. I’m a Marshal out there, and my leave of absense is almost up.”
“I’d wager whoever is pulling the strings has got a that much reach.”
Later on I call him Simon when I haven’t asked him if he’s okay with it.
Since I’m already having a casual talk with him over dinner, I’d appreciate the option to ask him for an update regarding my family/friend/hospital/lawfirm/… he is protecting for me back home.
The scene where we talk about the Upton Conspiracy also seems a bit short. A little more of a discussion/speculation about the possibilities would make a good fit, instead of just going along with him without contributing anything.
Interrogating Steele, I get this:
((Start here. A quick, no lose, interrogation)) It only takes a week to ride to Carson City and arrange to see the false Marshal.
I’m reasonably sure that authors note shouldn’t be there in the public version
Talking to the railworker, I have the option of remaining silent and to stare at him during the whole conversation. I admit I was a little disappointed that even with my Legend-Point worthy Intimidation skill he wasn’t even the slightest bit unnerved by that. For someone who’s already on edge due to the Indians, Bandits and whatnot, he sure has some balls of steel 
During the train ride I get the option to make sure that nobody makes trouble and this comes up:
No one dares both you in Nebraska.
Choosing to hunt:
There just isn’t much game in Pennsylvania, if only because the doves are too content to flutter up as the train screams past.
(Gunfighting slightly increased) Pennsylvania is a tidy sight, marred only by the occasional pit mining site that reduces huge hills to craters.
Up till that the first sentence was about the current state I was in and the second about the new state I was entering. This instance it’s the same state for both.
I’d also like the option to chat with my companions during the train ride. They don’t crop at all apart from a sentence at the start (Schmidt was handling his horse and Carrie… I can’t even remember).
That goes for the rest of the Chapter too, the companions are awfully quiet during the whole trip. More interaction or comments would be better.
Upon entering the Upton house, this comes up:
Schmidt takes up position by the front door, fades into the many shadows.
Miss Caraway settles in opposite a mirror in the hallway, keeps an eye up and down.
I’m guessing the space comes from a couple variables, but the broken up text seems a bit strange.
Those spacing errors come up a couple of times during the story. Should I make a note when I find them?
Regarding the Legend score, I’ve been wondering for some time now at which point I met Billy Tate in the story. It’s been awhile since I played from Chapter 1, but the couple times I did, I didn’t notice it At which point do I have to look out for him?
Lastly, between Chapter 9 and 10 there is still the Beta-Break (“No new Chapter yet”).
