Tin Star testing

@AllenGies:
“Iron gets expensive out these parts.” Schmidt notes, “even if I could get the screens repaired.” The Cowboy frowns as he pulls out every silver coin he has in (**missing his?) pocket. “Depends who you buy from.”
#“That’s enough silver, Schmidt. I have decided to waive my fee for this arbitration.” (**Q: but it was Carson, not Schmidt.)

Due to your efforts throughout Lander Country (**should be County),newspapers and first-hand accounts carry the name Ren Keaton. More than a few plaques and memorials tell the truth of your tenure as Marshal. In time, half a dozen books on your life are written and published to local scholarly approval.

You leap atop its back, like a flea on a dog, as it charges the enemy. Without pause, it plows through men like a rolling boulder. The cannon (**should be plural?) have fallen silent. The enemy gathers its strength. The rail-men, virtually unscathed in all the fighting, prepare themselves for what comes next.

“Ah yes, the explosive liquid. It is not so different from the Chinese rockets and fireworks, much as a full grown boar is to (**missing a?) piglet. Master one when it is small and you shall know how to act around the other. Indeed, there is a particular tale concerning exactly that, though I fear I learned it originally (**missing in?) Mandarin.” By the time he is done with his tale, you have a feeling for the subtle things that can come (**missing from?) nitroglycerin.

“Yeah, it hasn’t been a walk in the park.” Arthur admits, rubs his head. “In the beginning I’d get these headaches and my heart would pound something fierce. But those faded pretty quick. Though, if I go without making a batch for a couple of days, I’ll get a headache again. But that always goes away once I get back to work”
#“Any side effects from making up batch after batch of nitroglycerin?” (***This choice continues to remain after choosing it)

Talking with Arthur: "We mix it up every day because it is too dangerous to transport. I mean, they tried that a couple of (**should be or?) three times.

With Yiska chapter 8: The two of you walk and talk a long while, about what needs to be understand (**should be understood?) in the days ahead.

A stack of fresh boards has been dropped off at your front door one morning. No bill, no note, just a gift out of the blue. Preston’s doing, no doubt. Especially considering the little pile of bread crumbs that litter one end of things. You set to work using the materials you purchased and soon the sturdy little office is a cozy place. Level too where the foundation had begun to sink. Just outside your office there is a canvas cover that shrouds the supplies you acquired to fix up the place. (**Q: I did not personally acquire or buy any materials that chapter, just have what Preston gave me…is that what you mean by “you acquired”?)There isn’t but a scrap of time left to do one final thing.

Ride out on a circuit of Lander county as the Marshal people expect you to be.

Practice incessantly with your guns.

Pull out your books and get to studying.

Get out in the fresh air and do things.

Go prospecting for a time.

Fix up your office.

Start clearing your land for a homestead.(**Q: I did not get land yet so should this be a choice yet?)

Fight with raiders at painted caves: “I’m good.” Miss Caraway says, closes up the breech on her double-barreled shotgun. Without pause, she slips forward through the heavy smoke, catches the raiders while they are reloading and sends a lethal rolling thunder into their midst. The enemy starts firing again. Schmidt digs out the bullet from his shoulder, flicks it aside. “I think I’ve had enough of this.” He growls. A nearby knot of raiders folds up and the rest retreat. Just like that, the chase is on. You race down tunnels and through caverns until the enemy is well scattered. When the last of the gun fire ceases, you find yourself far ahead of everything and quite alone. A crack of a pistol sounds out and a round zips past your ear. There, just down a tunnel stands a figure you know well; Hungry Snake. Just behind him two figures pause. The first of those is a lean man of twenty and some, with a pair of rimmed glasses perched upon his nose. Slick black gloves cover his hands, and his suit has a definite French flair to the cuffs as he steadies a pistol. Cufflinks of pearl gleam at his wrist and a golden chain for a pocket watch hangs loose from a pocket. The other is a young woman, her long blond hair gathered into an elegant coif and secured with an emerald stickpin. Dangling about her neck lies a monocle that nearly disappears into the ruffles of her forest green dress. A shine of silver arises from her wrists as thick bracelets shift as she too steadies a pistol; a little silver derringer that neatly fits the palm of her hand. At her waist gleams a ruby hilted dagger which she shifts down almost idly with an elbow. “I think I see a badge.” The Man notes in a very eastern accent, pushes back his glasses.“Regina?” The Woman, this Regina, raises up a monocle with a free hand, regards you.“A badge indeed, brother. Tell me, Marshal. What is your name?” “I’ll tell you.” Hungry Snake growls out. “Its Ren Sixkiller.” “Definitely not a man named Steele.” Regina sighs, glances to her brother. “Reginald, I think something must have happened to our Marshal.”

“Enough talk!”

Start firing.

I shot him."

(**all of us are Acting like i just met them but i had gone in under flag of truce to parley first and already met/talked to them, then fled when things went awry.)

Ask favor of Preston:
#“What (**What’s) all this I keep hearing about you and women?”

When talking to Andy on his death bed:“Big Indian. Hartigan called him… Hiding Shadow.” (*Should this be hungry snake? Or is he just refering to another one of Hartigan’s gang?) Andy manages, gives a shudder. All the color has fled from his features.

“An outlaw by the name of Richard Hartigan has a sizable band of men, and he will hit you like a storm.” (**When telling Hayworth of the impending doom, This choice continues to stay even after being chosen)

“Yeah. Its wrong to cuss.” Carson tosses over, “And I’m not about to give an inch on anything or anyone I find worthy.” (*Should this be unworthy?)

That said," Marshal James continues, “I’m not about to be distracted by whatever deals you might have made with the local ‘law’. The destruction of that dam was… controversial. At least until I heard reports of the flooding round these parts. Do you understand? We tin-stars have to stay together out here, read from the same page or else our book will close.” (Q:***Should he scold me for being in a relationship with Preston? Or maybe he would bring it up when I say there is a local bevy of sheriff’s deputies that would help? Thoughts?)“He does. If he trusts you enough to part with them, they’d be welcome to ride.” Marshal James agrees. “I’ll even draw up the paper work to make it all legal like for him to work in the county.”

“I imagine he’ll respect that.” She nods, “he doesn’t like owing anyone. Especially not the law in Lander County.” (Q:*I already said my intentions were that we are even once I heard from Elko, but then the next page I Have to choose another intention.)
#“I intend to make Lander County a paradise.”
#“I intend to make Lander County somewhere that no one has to fear criminals.”
#“I intend to make Lander County a place of civilized laws.”
#“I intend to make Lander County my personal fiefdom.”
#“I intend to serve my time here and then leave for greener pastures.”
#“I don’t have any plans.”

2nd post due to reaching character limit!
@AllenGies:
And so, you ride. Following Yiska’s directions (**Q: i did not meet him. I left the camp to see Indians myself…did the directions come via Miss Caraway since she spoke to him while I was talking to Admussen’s?) you swing northward after leaving the camp. A maze of valleys and ravines lie ahead and the going is slow. Worse, there is no sign of an Indian warband. Not yet anyway. Come dusk, you light a fire of tumbleweeds to keep the chill of the night at bay. Miss Caraway, hair down once again, fishes out her hip flask and takes a quick pull of panther juice. "Ah, I needed that. She offers you a snort as well. “I snuck around a bit while you were talking to the Admunsens, dropped in on their hostage for a bit. We got to talking and I think we should do something about the Indian back there.”

“He played dead so convincingly that of all in attendance that (**that should be removed here.) only I was not fooled.” Julia adds, “when I covered for him, well, that was the beginning of things for us.”

“Now that, is the question.” Yiska nods. “Now, there is no law that says only one Marshal per county. That is merely custom and precedent. It could be broken any number of ways. Delays in receipt of letters for example, though that is less prevalent now with the telegraph. I suggest you proceed with caution for neither of you are on solid ground. Now, I hate to be a bother, especially to a client, but I also have other clients who have been waiting longer.” He ushers you to the door, says the usual farewells as you step out.

Head back to Preston Springs.

Take in a play while you are down here.

Go find Yiska’s office and ask for legal advice.(**Q: I just came from his office so this should not be an option still.)

“He’s still chewing on a cactus, so to speak. I wouldn’t go riding round Echo Canyon any time soon.” She points out, “and next time, let me do the talking.” (**She wasn’t with me to go see Hartigan. Schmidt was. And I didn’t go with the stagecoach. I stayed in town.)

Schmidt gives you directions that readily match those you already have. He’s not lying about that much. “Glad to help.” Schmidt nods, turns back to the line for the assayer.

Have you ever heard of a Marshal Steele?"

#“Ever known a county with two Marshals?”
#“There was a Marshal by the name of James. You ever talk with him?”
#“Would you be willing to come to the Grand Haven Hotel when I ask?”
#“What do you know about Marshal James?”
(Q: Why can’t I talk with Schmidt more? It is like it cuts you off after a couple questions and he is done before I got everything I needed from him. Also if I am in a relationship with him he is pretty darn casual with the MC.)

A single satchel of black powder, flung high and long, drops down into the camp. The explosion that (***that should be removed cuz you have it later in the sentence or vice versa.)rips through the camp with a terrifying rumble that sets a dozen men to reeling. Men steadily gather together, let their rifles bark all the while. But with with (**double with) so many fallen, the enemy’s eagerness begins to waver.

The horse tracks are many and varied. It takes a little while to survey them all. As expected, there are are (**double are).unshod horses that had come closest to the house. But farther along there are many that bear the iron ‘U’ shape. A lot of them. Miss Caraway snorts at the prints.“Indians never shoe their horses. Waste of time and money for them. I ain’t never even heard of a maverick warband trying that”

Argh, I captured Regina, reviewed my legend, and then got a 500 error.

I guess I should have saved my previous chapter. :frowning:

To ride a bear, you need to wrestle a beat into submission in chapter three, and then not kill it, and in the final battle, if you find it chained, free it. Then, if you have a good riding skill, not sure how much, you get a chance to ride the bear you wrestled.

Not sure if this bug was reported before, but if you talk to the guy in charge of the rail layers, you can tell him again and again that Hartigan is riding against him.

And before anyone jumps in about edit buttons, mine just timed out.

Well that’s highly amusing, I don’t think I’ve ever had the brawl high enough for the bear wrestling thing anyway.

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Frank: “Guess Im just dead weight now.” He says, “bury me under the shade of a sycamore. And tell Andy where I lie.” (**Q: But Andy died…so how would I tell Andy where Frank was buried?)

“I will, I promise.”

Promise nothing, keep the wagon moving on.

“Ah, them Winthrop boys run it. Nasty piece of work them. They’ve been harping on Jeff Donner, trying to get him to sell his slaughter-house to them. They call it smoothing the road, but it ain’t that. Not when they buy you a beer just so they can pour poison in your ear about a friend.” Schmidt clenches and unclenches his fists. “When we go talk to them fellas, I’ll hold back until you give the word.” (**Q: Schmidt says WE. Is he supposed to come with me to talk to Winthrops and try to stop the slander against Jeff?)

When talking to Marshal James: Apparently neither the captured Reginald nor still free Regina were ever at your trial. At least they didn’t recognize you during that little talk with them.(**I never talked with them at the Painted Caves.)

Carson guides his horse out from the stables, gives you a nod. Schmidt steps on out of the Grand Haven Hotel, waves farewell to those inside and thumps his way over to you. Caraway edges out of the Mother-Lode saloon, shades her hat against the sun and gathers her horse.
Deputy Frank Spears gives a yawn, adjusts a rifle in its case as he tightens the saddle on his horse. With a final pause to survey the vibrant little town of Preston Springs, you mount up and ride out.
(** Q: If Im in a relationship with Preston, I know there is a little moment with him when he joins you at the railroad, but I wondered why he doesn’t say goodbye or good luck to the MC before they leave town?)

(**Q: Is the undertaker Julia or Julie? It starts as JULIE but later coverts to JULIA after the chap 8 interlude)

“There are those who think a woman should not be in my particular trade.” Julie notes, “to which I say ‘Who among us is spared an ending?’ Even so, I had to come out travel to the froniter to work in the field that I prefer.” (**Q: Should this be “I had to travel to the frontier…”?)

“This way, Marshal.” Julies (**Julies??) says, leads the way toward her residence and place of profession.

Undertaker comes to visit one evening: The grieving parlor is as you remember, though now lit by a host of unlit (**lit by unlit candles?) candles that flick and sway in the entry breeze. At the center though rests a full and lidded coffin.

Making Frank a deputy: “Well, it’d better be paying work. An honest sweat dries quickest.” He notes, gives a little grin. “Little Sam always used to say that, and he’d know. Never like (**should be liked?) to work a day if he could loaf it away.”

Schmidt ambles up. “Mind if I warm my hands a mite? I got a late chill coming up here, like the Old Man North wanted to remind me he’d be leaving town only for a little while.” “Help yourself. Fire’s free.” One of them men (**should be the?) points out.

Before long, a pair of figures edge over the crest with rifles at the ready. “Iron!” One calls down to you while the other takes aim with a rifle. It seems clear they are asking for a password of some kind. One of them (**should be the?) men atop calls down “iron” once again.

“Stop kidding around!” One of the men shouts down. “You know the boss hates that.” One of them men (**should be the?) atop calls down “iron” once again.

There are so many targets that you can’t hit them all. Carson works his rifle from the hip, sends a man sprawling into another. A stray bullet zips past and nicks your leg. (Health very slightly reduced) A stray bullet zips past and nicks your leg. (Health very slightly reduced) (**Q: Was this stray bullet to leg meant to repeat?)

A month with your Colt Walker blasting out in your grip, costs your (**should be you) a full keg of powder.

Long rows of tents, a whole armed camp, is packed into a narrow gorge, utterly hidden from idle sight.
A section of men stand shoulder to shoulder, begun (**should be begin?)to fire in ragged volleys.

It’s @piggleywinks the Grammar Police run for your life

Arghhh! I save my progress but when I come back it says there are NO SAVES (My life in shambles!) So I have to start again.

And I also forgot how to succeed in the Gold Wagon mission with Hartigan.

do you erase the cookies

@bezment78 No, although I’m not the only one who uses this computer so I might look into that.

stsword- Okay, I clarified the ‘some white men know honor’ quote. But I am more interested in the 500 error you received when you reviewed your legend. Did you get a close look at what exactly it said?

bezment78- Thank you. Now if I can just finish the last chapter and epilogue, maybe muck about with some of the stat-screen code…

piggleywinks- Great notations as always. I’m going to have to take what I’ve incorporated, run autotest and update my drop box so that other people don’t pick up on the same typos that have already been fixed.

Sorry, AG, I did at the time but I don’t really remember what the error message was there.

Oh, guys, to find the bear at the end, does that just require a good enough riding score or do you have to make a specific choice?

You set up a box for Fatty, who immediately tries to scramble out; the ungrateful wretch.

Fatty is what I named my pet mouse. I never adopted a mouse before, so it never occured to me, but if that mouse was so hard to catch, how did I get it into the box to begin with?

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I name mine Wolfgang Amedeus Mozart.

Oh does anyone else think that the MC’s line in response to Old Dan’s alligator tall tale could use some more pizazz?

Something like “Actually gators are short term sprinters at best, so they aren’t even inclined to chase prey over land” or “They aren’t that hard to wrestle really,” or “I’ve never had to run away from an american alligator,” for a Chinese MC.

As it stands the choices are being humorless or lying, the MC can do better.

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Wyrmspawn- Nice name for a mouse, whether appropriate or ironic.

trollhunterthethird- This is what happens when I let a player name things. :slight_smile: But I don’t think I can include a scene where you craft a tiny piano for it to play, let alone an audio file. :wink:

stsword- That does sound like something I should revisit… perhaps have the first option based on a high survival, the next on a high brawling, etc.