Dreamingofroses- I’ll gladly take any feedback you want to offer. Numbers are good, as they let me see what kinds of characters people are playing and what the difficulty numbers need to be set at. Other critiques are useful too, especially what you liked and didn’t like.
Pale_strider- Strange. When I update my drop box with Chapter 4, I’ll double-check to make sure it works.
Mardam- Thanks for the numbers. Your Lawyer is clearly a man of few words and much action. Did you find enough Lawyer related notations to justify taking that occupation? Sometimes I bury that sort of things a little too deep.
Zed- Welcome back. If you can wait until the 7th, Chapter 4 should be out then… karma permitting.
Mardam- Yeah, I’ll have to add in more legal notations to make certain people can find a few. Any suggestions on where you think being a lawyer might make a big difference? I’m thinking some of the negative effects of some of the Red Ribbon mining outcomes might be mitigated.
All of Chapter 4 has been written, spell-checked but not yet debugged. My additions to earlier chapters have added additional errors that need to be sorted before I work on the new chapter. Sigh.
@Allen: I kinda think that there are very few situations in the West where “being a lawyer” matters more than “knowing the law” (or in other words, Legal skill). Most of the lawyers out here are going to be country lawyers rather than educated professionals anyway.
“If you are absolutely determined to make a lawyer of yourself the thing is more than half done already. It is a small matter whether you read with any one or not. I did not read with any one. Get the books and read and study them in their every feature, and that is the main thing. It is no consequence to be in a large town while you are reading. I read at New Salem, which never had three hundred people in it. The books and your capacity for understanding them are just the same in all places. […] Always bear in mind that your own resolution to succeed is more important than any other one thing.” -Abraham Lincoln.
There was an outlaw named John Harding or Hardin I think, one of the worst criminals in the wild west who killed like 20 people before he was 20, he passed the bar exam in jail and became a lawyer from the wells Fargo company a place that he probably robbed once or twice, but that needs some research I saw one of his buisness cards on pawn stars.
Clearly I’ll have to take a look at Pawn Stars. But first, Chapter 4 and with fifty-odd minutes to go on my self-imposed deadline.
Please tell me what you think and what seems to be right and wrong with this latest Chapter. Also, I need to know if there are any recursive loops I may have unintentionally devised.
Mardam- Taking them to court is worth a consideration. I mean, they turned away Yiska’s cease and desist order, but that wouldn’t hold water with a hard nosed Judge. I’ll make a note of the possibility.
Ramidel- That’s a good Lincoln quote and he has the right of it. The nearer you are to the frontier, the less you need what we presently think of as Lawyer learning. Lincoln got a taste of that himself when he was called in to assist with a case as a local lawyer employed by some big shots out east (One of whom would later be his rival for the nomination of President). Though he was excluded owing to a change of venue, he learned a great deal of how law was practiced in the big city. His arguments, he decided, would have been lacking, but that just made him redouble his efforts in Springfield.
It feels too late to remove Lawyer and just use legal though. Perhaps I should introduce a medical skill instead of having the doctor trait… Gah, more work!
I just finished reading it good stuff I’ll read it again tomorrow when i get up, there were a couple of joinedwords but thats no big deal and miss caraway repeated her self once when we were drinking, but I like where you took the story, lots of action, riding shotgun on the stagecoach was epic I like how you did the fight scenes, it was a different but in a good way, a little confusing at first but I got it.
I can see this becoming my fav game here keep up the good work, oh and go pawn stars lol
But my favorite show is the venture brothers
Pale_Strider- Glad you liked it. I’m looking forward to you pointing out where I’ve made mistakes. That makes editing so much easier. I only had the time and energy to do one edit-pass. (There’s those silly joined words. It probably comes from me trying to learn German years ago) Removing any confusion would also be good, in both the Stage-Coach scene and the possible gunfight at Echo Canyon.
And, Go Team Venture. A great show, which I should really get back into when I’ve got the time.
Being an “official lawyer” can be more fluff than anything, like Doctor seems to be so far. Legal Understanding determines how good of a lawyer you are. And while medicine ought to be a skill, so far it’s only come up in the context of basic first aid that any Westerner can do.
Anyway, initial notes:
When picking a Chinese name…
I did notice you were of the celestial persuasion." Marshal James answers, “but I figured you might like an Americanname to start over with. Fewer questions will come from people you haven’t met yet.”
And when I picked the name:
line 1550: Invalid option; conflicts with option ‘Lam’ on line 1463
Intermediary between Chapter 3 and 4, it says “Health fully restored.” Guess what, I’m not healed. (And after that damn bear, I needed healin’.)
Ramidel- Trouble is, I’ve scripted in a few events where being a Doctor is not entirely fluff and can change things slightly depending on who you save. I’ll give the medicine skill some thought.
Fixed the odd error. apparently two string variables can’t be the same. So, I added a ‘b’ to the last name of Lam in the English Name section and that should do it.
I will read it again later taking notes for you, i really only noticed like 4 things.
I found when writing my game, if i used return to drop down to a new line notepad++ did not see that as a line break and joined the two seperate words
if you make a space after the first word befor you hit return then your good to go.
Oh and Go Team Venture
When you meet the Elder, this is said after every conversation option is taken:
The lead rider maneuvers his steed close, shows empty palms as he gives you an honest nod. “Greetings Marshal. How provident to meet you in the wild. I am Elder Hancock, and Albion Springs is part of my ward.”
Also, got this when Andy -died-…
Andy Smith was no great player in the old west, but after you brought him back from the brink of death he had plenty to say. In some tellings you just yelled at him real loud. And still other tales involved a badger and a dollop of honey. But not matter the how, it always remains you who were his savior that day. Three Legend points awarded.
Another problem came when I totaled up my Legend points: I appear to have had way too much of a legend, because there’s no summary of my tale there.
Well if the joinedword thing is a bug then that takes away three out of the for things I found.
I found the fight scenes a little confusing just because when I was in the canyon I used “shoot at the closest bandit” choice and on the next page it was still there and I was like huh, should I pick it again and so I did and got shot in the shoulder, but it’s fine really by the time I got in another fight on the stage I knew what the deal is and found it worked fine, i shot at them with my rifle untill i took out my pistol then went into a full gallop.
Soooo I guess I was just confused, not the game being confusing.
Really good work.
In a perfect world I could pick my rifle if a sharpshooter, like a Henry rifle like Carson…hey do you think the origin of the term sharpshooter came from the old sharps rifle, I’m going to look that up.
Edit: nope it an earlier English term possibly from Richard Sharps, Sharps Shooters regiment.
But buffalo hunters were also called Sharp Shooters because they used the Sharps rifle.
