Wow commenters were not lying about how much tension there is in yandere heir mode.
Most sexually intense corner shop encounter
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Interesting. It felt awfully short for the amount of words, though I didn’t try the other route or non-yandere mode yet.
I’ll keep an eye out for updates, I’ve wanted a romance more interesting than the usual ‘pick flirt options before you even know the character yet’ and the yandere mode seems like it could fit the bill.
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This looks spectacular, a yandere princess
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Just watched Future Diaries and I’ll be honest Yuno kinda scared me at first especially when Yuki looked into a room he wasn’t meant to but I do love how they got there happy ending. Yuno is the only Yandere I know so if the princess is anything like her I’m both excited and a little scared but I really just want to see how it will play out. So I’m very much looking for updates now that I watched the anime!!
While it’s pretty short, i’m pretty much hooked. i’m excited to see where this goes (especially with the yandere/obsessed Heir)
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I was one of Odessa reader and sadly it’s abandoned, i really like the idea.
I noticed this thread few months ago and it has similar idea as you mentioned too. I hope everything is going well for you!
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Thanks really brother
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Hey sorry for the late reply but if you are one of Odessa old reader then do you have the password. Since its abandoned and never will be finished i just want to read the rest
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Love the idea. Looking forward to the future updates.
The idea is very cool (and it’s a little funny to me to have found this now, considering I’m working on my own dating game/selection-type story) and I definitely liked the descriptions and the setting. Modern setting was a nice surprise, and I feel like you really nailed the feeling of the late-night grind of a low paying job and the constant tiredness and quiet resignation that comes with it. The meeting with the Heir was also very well-written, it had a very somber and intense mood for something so short and simple (mind you I’ve only played the yandere route rn).
If I had to give a complaint, my biggest one rn would be that the variables and code, and some of the descriptions, definitely need touching up. Some words are misspelled, there’s capitalization where there shouldn’t be (or there isn’t where there should be), something a scene is described twice because the branching paths aren’t well separated, and the pronouns for the Heir are constantly shifting during an interaction.
For reference, I set the Heir as being male, having blue eyes, black shoulder-length loose hair and a tall athletic build. The physical characteristics are acknowledged, but with weird capitalization, and the pronouns keep shifting between male and gender-neutral during the whole thing. It’s a bit immersion-breaking and makes the scene feel very weird and hard to read.
Otherwise I don’t have any other notes. Definitely looking forward to what you’ll be writing and adding next, if you decide to continue on with this project (which I hope you do).
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