Started playing through again, and I’m instantly reminded of exactly why I refused to let Sara play the first time around… (Seriously tempted to just let Jack take the little brat.
) Well, I wouldn’t, but she’s skating on dangerously thin ice here… :
Is this set in America Canada (Winnipeg)? Because if so, this:
A tradition unique to Reina, where the whole town gets together to celebrate the season of Winter and the beauty it brings.
Nobody’s quite sure about when it all started, or why, though pretty much every historian can agree that it originated during the Middle Ages.
would be impossible. The first settlements in America + Canada were about 1600, while the “Middle Ages” ended about a hundred years earlier (about the same time as Columbus actually got there, and he was far further south). Unless the town was a pre-Columbian settlement it wouldn’t have been around back then, and even if it was, it probably still wouldn’t be called “Middle Ages” or “mediaeval”,
Every year, the Town Council picks a random school year out of the hat to put on a performance on the last day of the Genesis Festival.
Why a random year? Why not just make it always the MC’s year? (That is to say, always the class of 14-year-olds, not following the MC up the school.)
“But…” Sera looks like she’s about to cry. You feel a pang of pity. If Sera was telling the truth, she spent most of the day playing all by herself. And all she wants now is to play with you…do you really want to deny her this?
No pity. If she wanted to play, then maybe she should have been nicer to the other children at school. It’s nice to see that constant refusal doesn’t lose you the game any more, though.
Days later, you will wonder what would have happened if you had just said no to Sera, had just dragged her home kicking and screaming.
I did say no. Several times. And I certainly attempted dragging her home.
You haven’t hallucinated like this since you were seven and ate Claude’s magic mushroom stash.

The Fish Incident of '08 was YOUR creation.
This is great as a throwaway line, but when it comes back a page or two later:
Your whole family has mutually agreed to never talk about the Fish Incident of '08.
it seems pretty out of place (and you should only ever mention something like that once… unless you’re hiding actual plot as a joke).
Also, at the end, my Belief value got up to 109%… I must really believe in Jack… 