The Wayhaven Chronicles: Book One (WIP)

GloriaRose · 2017-01-16T18:45:13.568Z

Urban · 2017-01-16T18:57:24.202Z

I read the code and found a bug. If your character is make and you choose to be bisexual, all of the RO will be women.

avidreader · 2017-01-16T19:38:56.133Z

@Seraphinite Is it safe to assume that the Agency is made up of Supernatural creatures and humans and their job is too keep bad monsters in check?
Does the MC know that their mum is alive?

Seraphinite · 2017-01-16T20:08:30.024Z

@Hazuki - I do remember (I hope you enjoyed Amesbury’s route!)
I always like to have a bit of fun with introductions, so I’m glad it came across that way

@GloriaRose - You’ll definitely be seeing plenty more of Felix

@idonotlikeusernames - The option to shoot will still be in there- there will just be other options too, for those who don’t want to take that option. I’m hoping to have good ranges of options as I go, especially the further we get into the story and past the introduction stuff

@Urban - Thanks for checking that out! I’ll make sure to change it up

@avidreader - The Agency is made up of teams of supernatural creatures (usually four to a team) and they are assigned a human handler. The supernatural world is still kept very secret from humans.
The MC does know that their mother is alive (I’m thinking of adding in a choice for people to decide what kind of relationship they have with their mother). But, although the MC knows their mother is an agent for some kind of agency, they don’t realise what exactly that is… that’ll be a nice surprise

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I’m going to admit I got a little downhearted at the comments about the choices not being very, uh, good? But, I thought, instead of just getting upset and de-motived, I just got to improve them!

I do plan to have more story-changing, and relationship-changing things later, but a lot of the intro is just setting up the world and the MC- are there better choices you would like to see to do that? I thought it was better to have some lighter more fun things at the start, and obvious skill-building things to establish a character before diving into the deep stuff, but maybe not?

Thank you for any help you can offer

avidreader · 2017-01-16T20:30:24.096Z

Are the four vampires on your mother’s team the four romance options?

Seraphinite · 2017-01-16T20:58:52.334Z

Yep they are! The four you’re introduced to at the very end of the demo are the four romance options:

Adam/Ava
Nate/Nat
Felix/Farah
Mason/Morgan

They’re all on the MC’s mother’s team, and have been for a long time.

Sorry, I also didn’t answer your question from your other comment! I’ll blur this in case anyone wants to find out about the world through the story- The Agency goes after supernatural beings who break the rules of the peace treaty set between supernaturals and humans. (Supernaturals don’t come from our world, they fall through gaps in the walls between parallel worlds, and the Agency help them adjust to our world but also make sure they stay in line.)

DevilTheCupcake · 2017-01-16T21:06:55.465Z

I personally don’t expect for there to be any especially heavy choices in the beginning of a game. I might add an asexual option when you’re choosing orientation, or another option for something less binary when choosing your gender. I think you’ve already said that you’re going to add a choice for the whole shooting scene, so the choices (this far, at least) seem fine to me.

H2O · 2017-01-16T21:13:04.744Z

Great start! I adored The Lady’s choice so I am excited that you have a new project well underway!

Also, playing as a guy interested in men I noticed that rather than Felix, the character was named Farah instead, despite him still being pretty much male. The others (Adam, Nate and Mason) are fine.

Seraphinite:

I am hoping to put in a love-triangle between two of the RO’s and the MC- it’s something that was going to feature in the original book series (when I was going to write it as novels), and I’d like to include it. You don’t have to have the love triangle- it will just be there if people would like to.

Ooh, I like this! A love triangle done right will add delicious drama~

I am still going to aim for a harem end though

avidreader · 2017-01-16T21:42:11.703Z

At the end of the demo Morgan smokes a cigarette (i’m gonna assume her lungs have atrophied so no ill effects) can the vampires consume other human things or are they only able to drink blood?

Seraphinite · 2017-01-16T22:12:57.229Z

@DevilTheCupcake - Those options sound like solid adds, I will definitely go back and put those in (the more customisation the player can have over the MC, the better!) Thank you for your help

@H2O - Yeah, The Lady’s Choice is quite a bit different than Wayhaven Chronicles, but I’m having fun with it!
I think I messed up the code a bit with gay and bisexual male options, so I’ll definitely be going over that tomorrow. Thank you for picking that out! I’m looking forward to the love triangle, as the RO’s it’s between will just add to my need for melodrama Will be interesting to see how to write and code it!

@avidreader - As long as the vampires consume human blood, they function pretty much like human beings (well, super-humans!), so they can consume other things, though they usually choose not too. The vampire senses make them super sensitive to many things- including taste, so everything is heightened for them and doesn’t make it so nice at times

Laguz · 2017-01-16T22:16:27.115Z

vampires (no unusual shapeshifters, poor tea)
no non-binary MC option, no non-binary romance option, poor tea
all ROs introduced so far fit standard otome/straight female-oriented VN romance archetypes, poor tea

avidreader · 2017-01-16T22:25:31.551Z

So the MC cooking a meal for one of the vampires isn’t out of the question (as long as we don’t end up being the meal)

Sigma11 · 2017-01-16T22:25:35.665Z

I asked for water and got coffee at the bakery scene and “Who is she?” when I was male.
I enjoyed playing the nice guy so I hope we get to play that way the whole game.
Also we can avoid romance altogether?
I usually stay single on my first go.

idonotlikeusernames · 2017-01-16T22:35:57.947Z

Damn your other game, that Amesbury looks like one sexy bastard , too bad it hasn’t got a male mc option.

Harley_Robin_Evans · 2017-01-16T23:16:49.482Z

Loving this game so much love that it has funny sense of humour bit

Bre · 2017-01-17T00:47:02.934Z

Oh cool! I played The Lady’s Choice on itch.io, I loved it. I have a high hopes for this novel.

FairyGodfeather · 2017-01-17T01:00:00.602Z

Seraphinite:

I’m going to admit I got a little downhearted at the comments about the choices not being very, uh, good? But, I thought, instead of just getting upset and de-motived, I just got to improve them!

I love having good choices. I love playing the hero. I don’t want to be the bad guy or the villain. I don’t want to break the laws. I want to be nice and kind and friendly and helpful to everyone. I didn’t even want to shoot anyone. And if I’m skulking around, without a warrant, I’m sure not planning on shouting out POLICE! or trying to arrest anyone either.

If you want a game where the main character is a do-gooder, then keep doing it. There’s nothing wrong with it. You could also have us become corrupted as the game continues if you really wanted. But, we’re a police officer.

I’d have liked a little bit more background on why we dislike Bobby. Something that felt real since I usually get disgruntled if the game’s telling me I dislike someone and I don’t actually. I’d rather it showed me, and have them do dislikeable things.

ImAcrophobic · 2017-01-17T01:29:37.411Z

Really enjoyed the demo. Hope to see more soon (:

Bre · 2017-01-17T02:16:59.392Z

It was really good, love the characters.

Mewsly · 2017-01-17T03:36:11.197Z

I can’t wait for more! I really enjoy your writing style and the characters all seem really likeable! I’m also excited for the love-triangle elements. I love me a good love-triangle. Keep up the good work!