I really like this game so far. The shy flirting options were quite nice to see. I initially voted for A in the popularity contest but after more playthroughs, I changed my vote to N and there it will stay.
It does feel like the MC is sometimes more concerned about losing credit for the MC's first investigation than about actually stopping the killer. I would like to see more choices where the MC would not mind the Agency running the investigation if it would prevent the MC having to explain to another parent about the death of a child.
The MC also never actually asks the agents what they already know about the killer. Admittedly, the agents would probably have just claimed it was classified but the MC should have at least had the option to ask.
I'm not sure what options are available if the investigation stat is higher. However, the MC is told that the killer had traveled the world (which could suggest wealth), that the first victim died of a blood transfusion (which could suggest some medical training and equipment), and that the hospital's blood technician is new (which would fit with the murders in town only having started recently). If it is not already present, I would like the option for the MC to ask Verda how much training and equipment would have been necessary for the blood transfusion.
Yes, I have no interest in M's character for that reason but trying to expel M out of the MC's office was not given as a choice. I can understand why a vampire would not be worried about lung cancer, but so casually endangering other people such as the MC is unforgivable as far as my MC is concerned.
Here are some typos I noticed.
"Yes," Nate replies, this time not interrupted by his brooding leader, who is once more stood staring out of the window.
Either this word should not be there or it could be who is once more standing staring out of the window.
"Better than being bored in the warm," Farah states, rocking back on her heels with a smile.
It should be warmth.
My tension drops, and I find my attention keep being drawn towards him.
It should be keeps.
Stumble on a reply and try stop my blush his gaze pulls from me. "Well, uh, thanks..."
It should be either try to stop or try stopping.
"You barely seem like you've tried to work with us, no wonder the case if failing." He folds his arms, but some of the fight seems to have dropped from him.
It should be is.
"We really need to find her identity so as I can find the killer."
I think it is correct as currently written but the phrasing is a bit awkward. I think it would flow better either without the word as or with the word that instead.
"The one's with the mutation in their blood?" Nate asks, to which the Agent nods in confirmation.
It should be ones.
I shake away the previous introduction, turning to the dark-haired stranger on my right, still attempting not to look at the stern man stood beside Nate, who is continuing to examine me with a narrowed gaze.
It should be standing.
Simply nod and head to desk.
I think it should be either to the desk or to my desk.
It would only take a second to cal- they all have Agency phones, having given their numbers to me a couple of days before. But, I'm not in the mood for more of Adam's, well, mood.
It should be call.
Farah remains stood uncharacteristically stiff in the doorway, staring at Kate and chewing on a thumbnail.
It should be standing.
She wraps the bandage with care around Nate's palm, the blood soaking into the cloth, though Nate can already feel the wound healing. But, the bandage nor the healing are what keeps his focus at that moment.
I think But neither the bandage nor the healing would flow better.