I really like the demo but need a save system, because i have to play all over again when the page refresh.
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This is very fun and well written so far, and I’m glad you decided to make this into a game!
personally, I already really like Morkai and Straasa. The MC might be a bit (understandably) skittish but beggars can’t really be choosers.
Their dynamic is very natural and even MC’s awkward hanging on seems natural (Straasa seems the type to immediately try to help anyone or thing that seems even remotely helpless and (my) poor Mc just wants to not end up dead). I can’t wait to meet the rest of the cast.
How does the soulstone change? Do they do different things do we choose the weapon’s form?
Does mc have some kind of precognition ability? Mc seems to get a whole bunch of Feelings™ and “Just Knows” an awful lot of stuff. Will we be able to develop that ability into something more concrete than a wicked sense of intuition? Sorta like what the big bad(?) did but without a fancy soulstone.
feedback and stuff
Only Morkai shows up under the relationships tab
I’m riding a mule!
You weakly pull on your mule’s reins,
I had no idea I wasn’t riding a horse (my first thought when it comes to “steed”) until that point so that’s the mental image I had formed. It was a bit jarring immersion wise when Ashes suddenly turned into a completely different animal. Maybe refer to her as a mule during her intro?
And damn if Morkai didn’t do everything in his power
Unless he’s given up, didn’t should be wouldn’t
you world nothing but sounds
You should be your
This was it.
Was should be is
Your donkey follows slowly after you.
what about the donkey
Donkey should be mule, there’s also one instance where Morkai calls her a donkey and then calls her a mule shortly after.
That they cornered men are still alive
They should be the
two)you
Space after the parentheses
That name ringed a bell
ringed should be rung
Straasa complained, looking pained
complained might sound better as complains
He is [i[here
Should here be italicized?
Never look a gift donkey in the mouth
not sure, but should this be mule?
I also agree that a save system would be nice. It might be a bit fussy but there’s a lot of variation between different dialogue options. A save system would be very helpful in going through them all for feedback or even just seeing what else happens.
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I approve of this inspiration. 
My donkey is secretly a proud -Battle Dragon-Cat in disguise, yeah. No smelly dogs for me. 
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Oof, I can finally post again! I reached a 22-posts -per -day limit (this was my first post since I de-lurked), so I had to wait for 24 hours! So sorry for the late replies. A lot of answers incoming!
@E_RedMark Aveline rocks! She was the only stable one in there! Also, you might like the female elf, you never know…
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@Arcane_warrior Kind of? You can choose a path where you go darkside, but it’s more an insidious, hidden kind of thing. You can’t just go all mental on everyone. Have to keep up those appearances! But if you do choose this path, boy can you **** everyone over.
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@soprano Thank you so much for your kind words! For the bug reports too! I 've updated the demo, I think I got everything everyone has pointed up by now.
Not liking them and being suspicious is a valid response! I’m guessing you and Morkai are already snipping at each other?
As far as your question goes, all I can say is that you are not done with your background stories, hohoho. Make of that what you will!
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@Takashi_Shin Thank you so much for the kind words! Every time someone tells me they liked it, I get such a validation rush, hahaha
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A piece of advice so you don’t reach your limit again (wasn’t even aware that was a thing?); it’s generally good practice to reply to multiple people in a single post. Your thread will look far less cluttered.
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@Socchi I know, right?! They definitely make me swoon! Though it’s nice to hear someone say that they find Morkai playful instead of plainly a jerk! Hahaha, I’ve readied myself for the hate 
I also fixed the bug!
@Valkyrine As long as you don’t throw the money at my head! Hahaha, thank you, I’m SO glad you enjoyed it! Also, why have only one pretty boy, when you can have two? The polys are basically gratuitous fanservice to myself 
As far as the fainting goes, yeah, you’re right, there was a lot of it. But the way I saw it, it was because the MC has been so stressed out and at their wit’s end that they Can’t Deal With It Anymore©. But don’t worry, there’ll be no more fainting, or at least it will be kept at a reasonable quantity, lol. Also, I live for emotional torture.
@Reinaldo_Pimentel @ApplePi I have fixed the save system, I thought I already had it, weird. Sorry guys! Also, as far as Soul Stone changes go, the stones change based on your stats or you can choose yourself which one you’ll get. Every soul stone changes into a different weapon and the bold/cautious stat determines if the weapon will be melee or ranged. And yes, of course they’ll do different things! You don’t expect the Soul Stone that affects combat to do the same thing as the Soul Stone that does magic, right?
Also, yes, the MC does have a precognition ability! You can indeed level up your intuition you may say, or you can tone it down if you want. There will, of course, be consequences for each choice 
@Taylor_Enean The donkey can be whatever we want it to be. She transcends the restrictions of three-dimensional form. She is pure energy. I’m sure enjoying how people like her!
@Johann Thank you, you have given me an instrument of destruction. Prepare for gigantic posts.
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its not hate if its true though 
well my favorite romance back there (DA2) was bella…so…who know . I just don’t wanna be locked forever in the trend of ‘‘You get the playful rogue’’ which the DA serie gave me…over and over…
hence why I’m willing to try the other butthurt lady…for a change lol
does she bite ?
If you ask nicely? 
Pweatty pweaaaaaaase…? no wait…half dragon…how about some Juicy sacrifice! Morkai…you and your manly sexy abs would do! Muahahahaha
@E_RedMark @Taylor_Enean Oh yeah, she does a lot of things if you ask nicely… Also, technically Daelynn is the playful mage, so… Progress?
Also, don’t worry, she is careful with the teeth. And nowhere have I mentioned Morkai’s abs! I am a pure, innocent soul, a puritan at heart. “I would never objectify anyone!” I said, you know, like a liar 
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at least you are aware of your lyiness
yeah I did read the description , the mage is the playful one . Got nothing against playful character but I’m dying for an aveline kinda of character for ages now . You know , serious…can take thing seriously…and such .
@E_RedMark Then you’ll definitely get along with Eledwen, she is all about taking things Seriously©! Also, she can’t stand Morkai’s guts, so you’ll get along perfectly with each other!
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thats not sarcasm I hope lol cose yeah…sound like a match made in heaven and hell it be…funnyhawke+Isbella when companions around lol and then go all seriouse and broody…maybe have domestic screaming match or something lol
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@E_RedMark It’s not sarcasm, I usually use emojis when I’m being sarcastic, lol! Also, she is not the screaming match kind of gal. She is more of a give you the cold shoulder kinda type 
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butthurt intensifie yell at me dragon Lover! Let me hear another kind of roar!
you inspired that…so you are to blame !
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@E_RedMark Now you’re making think what how one could get Eledwen to roar at them, and I’m liking what I get… Curse you!
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