You should definitely drop the scene about the choicescript games, it’s very disruptive to the feel of the game.
When choosing the MC’s career, what age the MC was elected at doesn’t change in the text.
The MC can be 35, but when choosing the military background it says the MC is 40.
At the age of 40, I became the youngest President of The United States.
In the politician background.
I became one of two Senators of my state, (whatever they choose as their home state)
The bolded text needs to be deleted.
“Owww,” says your other child, Jacob groaning as He rubs His head.
Uncapitalise the bolded words.
“Yes, sir/madam.” He/She says through his teeth.
The above text needs to be coded to account for the secret service person’s gender.