Things I noticed:
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Regarding the background of one of the VP candidates, no matter what Trump does, people born in this country are legally and constitutionally citizens and cannot be deported under any circumstances, even if their parents are undocumented
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“OK” should be in caps
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Everyone knows what the President’s name is by the time he’s been elected. You need a better mechanic for that.
*Secret Service: The phrase should be “‘Only for your protection, sir,’ she grins.”
*“She” should not be capitalized where the driver does so; the second option on that page has a similar problem
*Leaving aside how absurd this outcome would be, it’s “Green Party”, not “Green Party Party”
*In various places, you misspell “choose” as “chose”
*In the description of the Dems, it should be “welfare…to those who need it”
*There need to be some commas in the GOP description; it’s unreadable as is.
*The Libertarian description should say “government should not bail out any companies”.
*The first page of chapter 1 is a mess and needs a lot of work.
*In the justice system goal, “many” should replace “several”
*The bit with the ChoiceScript game is bizarre and not funny. If it’s a joke, it’s not a good one. I’d say get rid of that entirely unless it’s an important subplot.
*If you choose to do the interview in a T-shirt and jeans, it says you’re naked.
*LOL at #ReasonsToLoveRussia
*ISIS wouldn’t have a school for girls - part of their whole thing is that women shouldn’t be educated. Maybe make it a place where ISIS captives were kept? Not to mention that ISIS is quite likely to be destroyed by 2020 anyway.
*“Not thirsty”? I’m not sure how to phrase what you’re getting at there, but that doesn’t work.
*Replace “hub-hub” with “hubbub”
*Replace “Iphone” with “iPhone” in the kiss scene
*Finally, a suggestion: add goals to raise, or to lower, defense spending.
*I love the idea of a POTUS who has approximately all the sex and doesn’t care who knows it, like JFK without the secrecy. Win.