How will you be dictating what is good vs evil? Can we be a relatively peaceful member but maliciously conniving? Yknow, instead of the ol brute evil warrior and all.~ 
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MCās evil if they betray the others and be on the enemyās side, break peopleās hearts, kill innocent people etc.
But a bit of prologue would be good.
Oh, sorry I forgot to mention that in the game. My bad.
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Canāt wait for more!
This sounds awesome Iām definitely killing Rhona she annoying
This looks interesting so far, but one thing that I would suggest for the basic information such as gender and name is to either make it flow into the story or to do it before the story begins. As it is, it feels weird. You could fit it in with the line beforehand such as āOthers found themselves jealous of theā¦ gender choice who survived the battle. āHey, you know that little -insert gender-ā¦ name choice?ā you heard someone whisper behind youā or something along those lines. I think it would help the flow.
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I said it in second post 
but I am glad we share same thoughts 
Yes, I just wanted to also suggest a way to fit it in well, incase the author was stuck.
As for other stuff, I also found a oddly worded passage that Iād recommend changing.
Lord Alan has never let you to have dinner with the warrior. He always sees you as a family. Thatās why you eat together with them.
Iād change it to "Lord Alan does not allow you to dine with the warriors. He has always seen you as family. Thatās why you eat with the whatever you call the family, Iām not sure if āroyal familyā would be the correct term.
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Nice demo, Im looking forward to see how this progresses.
Iām going to betray the family and kill them hi Augustine haha
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betterā¦
This looks interesting so far.
I havenāt played the demo yet but do we have to be the strongest warrior can we be a mage instead ??? A Archer perhaps just asking 
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You know me too well.
looking forward to updates!
I can tell the story is going to be good and I like the setting a lot, but the writing lacks flow; it sounds really choppy and short when Iām reading it. Try to add details and emotions and get it to flow smoothly 
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Summary
I donāt think the ā[b/]ā part is supposed to be there
First day training princess and some quite eventful dinner is boring day?
Also, might I ask who is Aaron?(did I get the name right?)
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@Vattena He is explained in the first post:
They also have the other family members in the first post. My question about this is; can we raise our stats?
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