The One Chosen (WIP; 355,000 words; updated 16/04/2024)

Someone born without natural magic.

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And the public beta is updated! The current version contains 355,000 words, with an average playthrough length of around 155,000.

Please remember to comment if you have any questions or find any bugs, or even if there’s something you wish you could have done but weren’t allowed to (within reason). Thanks!

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Calling the Duke Daddy H will never not be funny to me

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Please report these values to the writer:
Anne West:
Physical: 10
Mental: 52
Social: 18
Total: 80 (New save.)

Hopeful: 60
Mundane: 40
Lawful: 62

Ædmund: 64
Charles: 56
Dahlia: 64
Helena: 68
Kevin: 64
Max: 65
Teri: 66
Xiulan: 60
Dating Teri.
Artie: 58
Professor Karline: 62
Ædmund chaos stat: 3
Duchess: 60
Won trial: Yes.
Inherited: No.
Elected: Yes.

I don’t know if I’m dense or just missing something, but why does Professor Karline answer “Why does he (the Duke) hate me so much?” with “We both know that?” (or something to that effect.) I don’t know that! Where would I have found out anything like that? Even as a reader I’ve come across nothing that tells me anything like that!

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Wow, what a wild ride!

Oh yeah, I noticed that, too. I was kinda assuming it was just because you were sponsored by his rival, but his actions just felt much more personal than that…

I notice people talking about what they gave up to the elf queen, and I feel like I got away with probably the easiest option. Just make sure you bring Kevin with you.

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Oh? I left Kevin because he’s “the animal person” and I figured he’d be the most help against the hellhounds (though in reality, he probably is more prone to trying to pet them, isn’t he?) I usually take Dahlia, in case we need to speak covertly at some point.

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I shall endeavour to allow you to do so even more.

Well, that at first, but your lack of power didn’t help matters.

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I’ve just uploaded the next preview to Patreon, in which we discover Max’s middle name.

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Please report these values to the writer:
Plúirín Raines:
Physical: 14
Mental: 54
Social: 12
Total: 80 (New save.)

Hopeful: 48
Mundane: 41
Lawful: 62

Ædmund: 73
Charlie: 60
Dahlia: 61
Helena: 69
Kevin: 70
Max: 66
Teri: 68
Xiulan: 74
Dating Ædmund.
Artie: 54
Professor Karline: 62
Ædmund chaos stat: 10
Duchess: 62
Won trial: Yes.
Inherited: Yes.
Elected: Yes.

That was AMAZING!
I cried when we got Disinvited and had to see everyone in the bad future
I originally wasn’t gonna romance Ædmund but I fell for him when I saw his rebellious streak :smiley: I’ll definitely do a replay with romancing Teri and Charlie and Kevin and Xiulan and probs everyone lol

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Morgan Reed:
Physical: 8
Mental: 60
Social: 12
Total: 80 (New save.)

Hopeful: 50
Mundane: 31
Lawful: 62

Ædmund: 69
Charlie: 54
Dahlia: 65
Helena: 65
Kevin: 63
Max: 68
Teri: 61
Xiulan: 66
Dating Xiulan and Dahlia.
Artie: 62
Professor Karline: 65
Ædmund chaos stat: 4
Duchess: 65
Won trial: Yes.
Inherited: Yes.
Elected: Yes.

Very good WIP, I enjoyed it very much. The plotwists are very well integrated, my congratulations to the writer.

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Elita Raines:
Physical: 10
Mental: 6
Social: 64
Total: 80 (New save.)

Hopeful: 54
Mundane: 43
Lawful: 65

Ædmund: 77
Charlie: 54
Dahlia: 65
Helena: 65
Kevin: 65
Max: 66
Teri: 65
Xiulan: 65
Dating Ædmund.
Artie: 62
Professor Karline: 63
Ædmund chaos stat: 10
Duchess: 56
Won trial: Yes.
Inherited: No.
Elected: Yes.

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I really enjoyed this and particularly loved the choices to be snarky at every turn.

Alys Morgan:
Physical: 32
Mental: 32
Social: 16
Total: 80 (New save.)

Hopeful: 45
Mundane: 58
Lawful: 52

Ædmund: 59
Charles: 50
Dahlia: 58
Helena: 60
Kevin: 63
Max: 58
Teri: 66
Xiulan: 56
Dating Ædmund.
Artie: 53
Professor Karline: 62
Ædmund chaos stat: 5
Duchess: 62
Won trial: Yes.
Inherited: Yes.
Elected: Yes.

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Please report these values to the writer:
Alicia Foster:
Physical: 8
Mental: 4
Social: 68
Total: 80 (New save.)

Hopeful: 68
Mundane: 30
Lawful: 62

Ædmund: 65
Charlie: 56
Dahlia: 74
Helena: 68
Kevin: 60
Max: 54
Teri: 65
Xiulan: 72
Dating Xiulan and Dahlia.
Artie: 63
Professor Karline: 70
Ædmund chaos stat: 4
Duchess: 63
Won trial: Yes.
Inherited: Yes.
Elected: Yes.

I’ll be honest, I wrote this game off ages ago and for the life of me I can’t remember why I did that. Maybe it was the underpowered ‘non-chosen’ aspect, or just the premise of the magical world. But all I can say is that I’m really damn happy I went back and gave it another go. The story has been fantastic, and all the characters are lovable.

My only real complaint, which I realize is way too late into writing and development to change, would’ve been a bigger focus on the relationships, since as of right now they do sorta feel a little bit like filler placed there just to have a dating element to the game. Obviously we’re still dealing with a story in which the characters are all children, so it has to stay wholesome. But I would’ve loved to see Xiulan take me and Dahlia to the anime convention, and Dahlia taking us out to grow our brains and be cultural and learned, rather than just getting a brief overview of that being what happened, haha. The moments that are in the game are wonderfully sweet and cute mind you, but I do feel like the general impact of the relationships so far have been very minor, to the point where had they not been there, it wouldn’t really have changed much.

And I don’t say that to disparage you mind! I do say that in the spirit of constructive critism, as for something you might want to keep in mind for any potential future games you might write. If romance is present in a game, even if it’s the cute puppy-love romance of teenagers, then I feel like it’s important to acknowledge the romance being there and actually give some focus to it. It doesn’t have to take center stage like it does in most romance forward games akin to WHC at all, but it is important to actually give substance to the relationship, otherwise you end up with a relationship the player isn’t really truly invested in all that much. Sure I love Xiulan and Dahlia for my gay as hell MC, but as it currently stands I unfortunately wouldn’t really miss the relationship either if the romance option of the game disappeared overnight. And I feel that’s in large part because the relationship hasn’t really gotten any attention at all outside of a few lines here and there.

Just something to keep in mind for any future games, if you do decide to add romance to them. Overall though, I’ve loved and adored the game, so there’s absolutely no hate from me on that front. It’s been a pleasure to spend quite a few hours on this game.

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Thanks for the comment. Honestly, I have been worrying about having enough romantic scenes lately. I am planning on having one big final scene just before the finale, and I don’t want to do anything too large so as to avoid pre-empting that, but it is still an in-universe year away, so I have been intending to have some small stuff prior to that. Hopefully that will help tide you over until the big scene.
Thanks again.

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