Will fix that, thanks!
Ahahaha… Yeah, grammar is not my forte which is why I really appreciate the help.
I most certainly will. It was my plan to add more choices eventually.
Thanks for the encouragement! Please keep an eye out!
Hmm… that’s odd. I’ll try and fix that.
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One small thing that sticks out to me is when the MC is first waking up after the graveyard scene… The first replies to the woman you wake up to all seem presume the reader is okay with what happened, and isn’t confused/spooked about what just took place. I don’t particularly want to be hostile to her, as she clearly isn’t hurting the MC, but being all smile-y, and sweet, instead of at least exercising some suspicion about what’s going on didn’t flow right to me. I ended up just choosing the stoic response, even though it wasn’t a perfect fit for what I was feeling, as a reader. 
Although short, your story seems really intriguing, so I look forward to seeing more.
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Hi! I really like what you have so far and I’m looking forward to future updates! Typos were already mentioned, but I did notice one thing
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This looks so amazing. I’m loving it. It’s sooooo good.
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