The Guardian (Updated 1/13/19)

[Baam]

@jaz99hewitt

Can you romance your sister since she is not blood related

I was wondering when someone would ask this

[flocktrops]

You don’t need to be blood related to someone for them or for you to consider them a sibling, she grew up with the mc and sees then as a older brother/sister, not to mention the fact that mc saw the sister grow up, asking for the sister to be a ro is kind of creepy

[Hamps]

You tell em sista slay

[Dartknight]

You mean like Frankenstein? The doctors parents adopted a girl from the village when he was a child with the express purpose being for them to get married someday.

[expectedoperator]

I like what you’ve written so far – the character and attitude of the King, the different races (I decided my first MC will be a Drake), and the different skills you get to choose from. It’s always interesting when the MC is more a “side character” like here where you’ll eventually have to guard the princess.

If I had to point anything out – since the narrative mentions the King visiting you and treating you like family, perhaps when it asks if you wish it could be different, there’s an option where you can say that you consider the King to be your family anyway (which would work well with the next choice where you can voice that opinion). Regarding typos and grammar, for now I would just be careful about tenses and try to split up large paragraphs, especially during the exposition dialogue concerning the different countries.

Looking forward to eventually meeting the princess.

[Amanda]

I played through twice and I personally love the premise you have laid down. One of my favorite aspects of the game is the attitude of the king towards the MC and how loving he is with the MC. What I find really interesting are the different races, traits, and qualities/abilities that go along with each. I look forward to the MC and their little sister meeting and how the actual story progresses.

[ollierocket23]

Hellooo mateee so I wanted to say that first of all, the story is sweet and interesting into my eyes. The races were intriguing and I want to know more about the lore and so on and so forth. The writing is good and well understood, however there seems to be quite a bit of grammatical errors here and there so you might wanna take a look at that. Overall, the game has potential and lots of it. It just needs a bit of refining. And also:

I picked my MC to be a female so ye I think it shouldn’t be prince.