Gosh, the characters in this story are so… amazing. I swear I felt genuine anger when Will made those comments towards Alessa, and that archer lady trying to pull Billy’s reins and hurting him. I’d forgive everything but anyone hurting dear old Billy is subject to my wrath. He’s precious, and a badass to boot.
Speaking of Alessa, I love her but I also wanna sit her down and have a nice long talk about why we can’t have nice things. She doesn’t hesitate in subtly threatening us, yet gets touchy when threatened back. Can’t help but show that she really likes us, but refuses to talk about literally anything concerning herself. Hopefully she’ll finally open up a little in the next chapters.
Your writing is really descriptive too, gives enough details yet worded in a way so as to not stifle the reader’s imagination. The fight scene was great, I can only imagine the amount of effort and coding that must have taken. The wide range of choices and dialogue options are also something I really appreciate.
I do hope we see more of Garrett (and possibly Will, because I left him alive) later on. Looking forward to meeting all the other characters (Rafael, Tarek and of course, the witch and her merry little squad).
No! I thought it was very immersive and provided for a nice lighthearted scene.
As if that could ever be a bad thing?!
I hope you include an option to have heterochromatic eyes. I understand that it may be a bit of a pain to write and code especially if it crops up more than once later on, in which case, do feel free to ignore this!