We could use a little more 18+ content here. But that’s me
So I’ll just throw in my two devalued cents here (as I was also working on action-oriented piece the other day…)
* I haven’t found any bugs yet - or maybe missed a few already? Lol. Right now I’m just kinda skimming through. The narrative will be more interesting if you have a little more dialogues I think?
* I like the setting.
Prizefighting is a rather niche segment and definitely has its own ins and outs. Which in turn allows for rich storyline. Your action scenes have pretty good detail and variation!
What I would fix:
* Stat screen.
The descriptions are actually kind of fun to go over, if a little too verbose for my taste; however as a player I’d want to get a view as thoroughly as possible of how my character is currently doing in the least time possible, if that makes any sense?
The numerics-only with no colored bars is not a problem in itself, but I don’t think you’d want to tell the players that they “wouldn’t want it any other way” (as with the hair)… imagine the irony. I think the flexibility for character development is one of the most cherished mechanics in interactive novels. Let the player have a little fun.
* I wouldn’t use the splash with that trademark soap.
Two things - firstly, of course, copyright infringement kind of issue. Secondly, it suggests that it’s tied to Palahniuk’s work, although may be omissible if that’s actually what you intend to do. Thirdly if I may, even if it’s intended as a fan work, Fight Club isn’t exactly about prizefighting - actually it’s not even about prizefight at all, which is where your piece is already different. From what I see in the first couple of pages anyway. Eventually it’s not a bad thing, just that you might want to lose that soap artwork.
* I’m assuming you’re working on the content for the male option? Not that you should. It’s a rather “acceptable” standard to be able to play as either man or woman. But I guess you know that.
(Actually, you should do it. There is no way a game about prizefighting doesn’t has the male character option. :D)
Also, nitpicking: on the Game Options screen you may have the Save tab in the first row if the menu is called during in-game. If used as a main menu kind of thing I’d probably put it like Start New Game - Load - Delete.
Overall I think the game is enjoyable for sure, it only calls for polishing here and there. Good job and keep it up!