I don’t think it comes across as “love at first sight” at all. It very much reads as “I find this woman very appealing, it seems to be mutual, and I’d like to explore that connection - I sense this could be the beginning of something truly special,” rather than “Yup, she’s The One, I’m ready to make a lifetime commitment or else resign myself to a lifetime of tragic pining.”
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So good I enjoy what I’ve read of your previous works and I love that you made the mc non-human this time.
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On a side thought, you could always set the povs as side content to read in the codex? Just suggesting. It’s ok if you don’t want to. 
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I’ve considered this for the final game. If I do, I probably won’t release them until it’s ready to publish. But I have had this thought and will ponder it a while.
Thank you! I actually have one (or two) game ideas where you can play as full Fae, but I’m having fun with the Fae-blooded human perspective in this story. Glad to hear you are, too!
This is what I’m going for. Hopefully there’s enough interaction in the first scene with Angelina now for it to feel like a reasonable conclusion, and that the POV scene of Angelina’s storyline will give people a better idea of who she is. That will be coming in the public update at the end of the month.
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