Thanks to some much needed feedback, I tweeked chapter one a lot.
Changes:
*fixed typos
*fixed pronoun issues
*better introduced characters
*gave the option to repick job if desired
*added weapons and attire features
*made a certain choice matter more to the story
*pacing is better, and more things happen in between the beginning and end
I hope you all enjoy Chapter One ver2.0 
I have yet to begin Chapter 2, editing chapter one took up all my time. But it will be up in due time!
Link to chapter one :https://dashingdon.com/go/4128
Can’t wait to see your feedback and constructive criticism.