The Burning Sun

[Mistyleaf123]

okay!

[Adrastee]

Well, I’m surprised that this WIP did not get more attention, it’s very good! And the fact that we can customize our MC’s appearance is really nice, too. Par contre il manque assez souvent des majuscules en début de phrases, surtout dans les dialogues! C’est pas gênant mais un peu dommage

[CC_Hill]

Hello, merci pour votre commentaire, C’etait mon premier projet et oui Il y a pas mal de faute d’ortographe, format et j’en passe, rire. Je reviendrai dessus, mais avant je dois faire un travail collossal pour le rendre un peu plus presentable. Merci de l’avoir lu j’apprecie

[redfield]

Ooh I came across this in dashingdon and even tbought it was an old demo - anyway, I enjoyed the story so far.

I did spot some character pronoun inconsistencies and some very minor typos (sorry i can’t point them out specifically, tis been days since I’ve read the entirety of the demo)

Anyway, like I said, it’s really interesting. Will be looking forward to more, definitely.

[CC_Hill]

Thank you for reading, I have a kind dragon eye alpha tester helping me correcting the grammar and spelling… so hopefully soon I’ll be able to update it, This was my first project and I intend to continue it now that I’m better with choicescript.